To Last Forever
Viewing comments for Chapter 19 "Woo Man"Poems by Michael
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Comment from Kingsland
Gentle like earthquake's after affects. Earthquake's is a possessive, so you need the coma with that line, but I say wow as I see nothing gentle about an earthquake during or after it's after effects. But in any event I still liked this poem. It has good poetic expressions. This was my pleasure to have read and written this response for... John
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2016
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Gentle like earthquake's after affects. Earthquake's is a possessive, so you need the coma with that line, but I say wow as I see nothing gentle about an earthquake during or after it's after effects. But in any event I still liked this poem. It has good poetic expressions. This was my pleasure to have read and written this response for... John
Comment Written 01-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2016
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c'mon John are going to tell me you've never felt the earth move under your feet...feel the sky come tumbling down...ah tumbling down...when she's around...ahhaha...ah I used earhquakw as metaphor...for...hm hmm all that and a cigarette after hindsight.
well thank you Bro...I'll go comma up. appreciate you stopping by John. love Michael
Comment from lancellot
Ah, yes, you know you are describing my ideal woman. Also, the woman of many guy's fantasy and what a lot of women wish they could be. If only they all could be this way.
You may get some push back from the women who never had an hourglass figure. But I bet they wish they did.
Great work.
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2016
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Ah, yes, you know you are describing my ideal woman. Also, the woman of many guy's fantasy and what a lot of women wish they could be. If only they all could be this way.
You may get some push back from the women who never had an hourglass figure. But I bet they wish they did.
Great work.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2016
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Hey Lance...-smile-
sorry i'm behind. thanks man....glad you enjoyed it....love Michael
Comment from royowen
Ah women, such a divine creation, certainly the better half of a man-woman relationship, sometimes I think maybe the feminists may be right, the God produced man, and got it right when He created woman! But no, both are equal in function and essential to man's expression of God incarnate. Well done, brofriend Michael, beautifully written, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2016
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Ah women, such a divine creation, certainly the better half of a man-woman relationship, sometimes I think maybe the feminists may be right, the God produced man, and got it right when He created woman! But no, both are equal in function and essential to man's expression of God incarnate. Well done, brofriend Michael, beautifully written, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 01-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2016
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Hey Roy...-smile-
sorry I didn't see this....Amen...what a compassionate Creator we have...with a remarkable eye for detail. love Michael
Comment from ahtnamas
I simply did not connect with this poem. I like poems that have connected imagery, and this feels disconnected. You seem to do more telling than showing in this poem. The first rule of writing is show don't tell. I am sorry. I was not engaged. Not what this reader expects from a poem...and with an MA in Poetry...I have read all kinds.
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reply by the author on 01-Sep-2016
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I simply did not connect with this poem. I like poems that have connected imagery, and this feels disconnected. You seem to do more telling than showing in this poem. The first rule of writing is show don't tell. I am sorry. I was not engaged. Not what this reader expects from a poem...and with an MA in Poetry...I have read all kinds.
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Comment Written 01-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2016
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well connections come and go ah hum namas. so I wouldn't let it get me down...the dating game takes some getting used to...listen fyi....like girls...-wink-....alright go get drunk or something, put on your Annie hat....there's always tomorrow-
Comment from I am Cat
Hello Michael...
my favorite part:
gentle like earthquakes after effects
calm surviving souls
grateful for with all their might
cigarettes after hindsight
hourglass shape our lives
since womankind
defined desire
nirvana
and...birthed divine
made me smile REAL big...
most especially:
gentle like earthquakes after effects
calm surviving souls
grateful for with all their might
wow! That's just REALLY great. I loved it. ;)
It's so true. I think that image and feeling will stick with me a LONG time.
That's what poetry is about. wish I had a six to show my appreciation.
love those lines.
Thank you for that.
Cat
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2016
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Hello Michael...
my favorite part:
gentle like earthquakes after effects
calm surviving souls
grateful for with all their might
cigarettes after hindsight
hourglass shape our lives
since womankind
defined desire
nirvana
and...birthed divine
made me smile REAL big...
most especially:
gentle like earthquakes after effects
calm surviving souls
grateful for with all their might
wow! That's just REALLY great. I loved it. ;)
It's so true. I think that image and feeling will stick with me a LONG time.
That's what poetry is about. wish I had a six to show my appreciation.
love those lines.
Thank you for that.
Cat
Comment Written 01-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2016
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Hey Kitten...-smile-
I didn't see this quit purring so loud....aha...thank you Madam...always uplifting when you pet me. sorry I'm late...love michael
Comment from Kingsrookviii
Excellent poem, buddy. This is great stuff. I think human sensitivity is under attack these days! LOL Largely, we are desensitized and that's a big loss to society. Femininity and masculinity are under redefinition attempts, even.
Balance is all-important and divine, at once with nature. Take care. Bruce.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2016
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Excellent poem, buddy. This is great stuff. I think human sensitivity is under attack these days! LOL Largely, we are desensitized and that's a big loss to society. Femininity and masculinity are under redefinition attempts, even.
Balance is all-important and divine, at once with nature. Take care. Bruce.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2016
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Hey Bruce...-smile-
well thank you man I didn't create them per say but certainly have admired and run to and from them my whole life. beautiful but very high strung emotionally. I wear kevlar...-wink-....love michael
Comment from Joan E.
I liked your references to "nirvana" and I could see the "driftwood" and the "moon-tides" plus your "earthquakes" similes. Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2016
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I liked your references to "nirvana" and I could see the "driftwood" and the "moon-tides" plus your "earthquakes" similes. Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 01-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2016
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Hello J...-smile-
thank you sunshine for broadening my day...you're too good to me...I love you...Michael
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I enjoy our reciprocal admiration. Big hugs- Joan
Comment from HarryT
Nice easy flow, could feel the slow build up. The poem works well as does the intermittent rhyme. Like the bookends of the first and last stanza.
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reply by the author on 24-Sep-2016
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Nice easy flow, could feel the slow build up. The poem works well as does the intermittent rhyme. Like the bookends of the first and last stanza.
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Comment Written 01-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2016
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Hey Harry...thank you man...-smile-
yes Sir sort of trade mark with me...appreciate you enjoying. love michael
Comment from Ricky1024
Hi Mike,
This was (as usual)
Exceptional.
I used words for a Title of a poem just posted.
Check it out and tell me what You Think?
Ricky
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2016
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Hi Mike,
This was (as usual)
Exceptional.
I used words for a Title of a poem just posted.
Check it out and tell me what You Think?
Ricky
Comment Written 01-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2016
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Ricky...sorry I missed this man...hope youre not pissed off....love michael
