Second Honeymoon
Flash Fiction-Potlatch Challenge26 total reviews
Comment from nordicgirl
What a perfect little gem. This is without a flaw and has the best payoff. I can just see him standing there wondering who the hell took his yacht. Too funnt and so perfectly ironic. NG
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2016
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What a perfect little gem. This is without a flaw and has the best payoff. I can just see him standing there wondering who the hell took his yacht. Too funnt and so perfectly ironic. NG
Comment Written 03-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2016
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Perfect. Yes, you have it exactly. This was an easy write for a change. I actually like this one unlike last week. Errgh. Thanks a million one hundred thousand and twenty one. michael
Comment from Gloria ....
Well, Mav, this is another one of those get rich quicker through murdering one's unwanted spouse.
I mean the list of wrongs she had committed is truly criminal. A cigarette lighter, a Green Lantern comic book collection? Those are simply unforgiveable crimes.
Love the twist at the end with his yacht slipping over the horizon. That's gotta hurt!
Great job with your offering to the Potlatch.
Love it,
Ange
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2016
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Well, Mav, this is another one of those get rich quicker through murdering one's unwanted spouse.
I mean the list of wrongs she had committed is truly criminal. A cigarette lighter, a Green Lantern comic book collection? Those are simply unforgiveable crimes.
Love the twist at the end with his yacht slipping over the horizon. That's gotta hurt!
Great job with your offering to the Potlatch.
Love it,
Ange
Comment Written 03-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2016
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I was shocked, Ange, after last weeks episode of total blankness. This one just poured right out the way it's supposed to. What a relief. My stupid family DID give away my damn Green Lantern comics along with my Marvel comics, Spider Man number one and everything else number one. Yep, about two hundred thousand worth. LOL No sweat, I got two member cent pumps today. I'M BACK!
Glad you liked this beautiful woman.
Maverick
Comment from Ima L. Ami
Excellent story, but the end is unclear to me. Who was the couple and why was the yacht slipping into the horizon. Did you get scared and ultimatley not kill your wife, or did another couple intervene unexpectedly?
"like she was shoveling chocolate cake in her pie hole" -- I love this line!
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2016
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Excellent story, but the end is unclear to me. Who was the couple and why was the yacht slipping into the horizon. Did you get scared and ultimatley not kill your wife, or did another couple intervene unexpectedly?
"like she was shoveling chocolate cake in her pie hole" -- I love this line!
Comment Written 03-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2016
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No, I killed her. Don't know who the couple was. They must have been stranded on the island and he didn't know it. So, they took his boat and left HIM stranded. So, his plan backfired. He's alone with his dead wife on an uncharted island. Better?
Glad you liked. I'll be by to review yours soon. I ain't afraid. LOL mikey
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Great job! So how'd you do it? lol.... no particular reason, just asking :)
Comment from Taffspride
good write Mikey, Oh dear, murder is far less expensive than divorce!! But is it worth it?
Any-one who would give away your comic collection would deserve it though.
I could not help but chuckle as I read this.
There was only one suggestion.
but Ginger and Mary Ann are nowhere in sight. Hell, Gilligan would be a welcome sight. You have used sight twice in adjacent sentences. it sounds a little off. You might say:
but Ginger and MaryAnn were nowhere to be seen.
That was the only glitch for me. the rest was fine.
Iechyd da
Ann
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2016
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good write Mikey, Oh dear, murder is far less expensive than divorce!! But is it worth it?
Any-one who would give away your comic collection would deserve it though.
I could not help but chuckle as I read this.
There was only one suggestion.
but Ginger and Mary Ann are nowhere in sight. Hell, Gilligan would be a welcome sight. You have used sight twice in adjacent sentences. it sounds a little off. You might say:
but Ginger and MaryAnn were nowhere to be seen.
That was the only glitch for me. the rest was fine.
Iechyd da
Ann
Comment Written 03-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2016
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I changed it as soon as I read this. I forget to what, but it was a big improvement. LOL Thanks. :))
Glad you liked it. mikey
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
LOL and you know I can see it happen.
What a story and I just cringed when I read the yacht sailing off without you. But at least you saved someone else.lol
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reply by the author on 04-Jul-2016
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LOL and you know I can see it happen.
What a story and I just cringed when I read the yacht sailing off without you. But at least you saved someone else.lol
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Comment Written 03-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2016
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Yes. That's the silver lining. I saved whoever those people were. Gonna be lonely though. At least I still have my lighter. mikey
Comment from jlsavell
Mr. Cahill, now can you tell me if you are ingesting any happy pharmaceuticals. I am perplexed. Are you now stranded with the woman you love/hate? Stranded forever? You are loving this potlatch.. well done friend.. jimi
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reply by the author on 04-Jul-2016
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Mr. Cahill, now can you tell me if you are ingesting any happy pharmaceuticals. I am perplexed. Are you now stranded with the woman you love/hate? Stranded forever? You are loving this potlatch.. well done friend.. jimi
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Comment Written 03-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2016
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It said "brown acid" on the bottle. Some guy was mumbling in the background but I couldn't hear him over Hugh Masakela. It was raining too. Nah. I killed her. Not sure where those people came from. Yep, stranded. Yes, Potlatch good, fire bad. Thanks so much. mikey
