Brelynn
Miracles still Happen (please read authors note before reading poem)57 total reviews
Comment from foxangie123
You are very excited about your upcoming addition aren't you. A most beautiful name as well. This is excellent and such a sweet tribute to love, family, and life.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2016
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You are very excited about your upcoming addition aren't you. A most beautiful name as well. This is excellent and such a sweet tribute to love, family, and life.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2016
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I must confess to you that writing is emotional for me. I have no idea why my writing is more emotional than most other areas of my life. As you may guess, Brelynn is more emotional to me than most of my writings! So it?s with a special sense of appreciation that I thank you for your wonderful five star review. It?s only been the last couple of years that I have attempted to write because I?ve never been encouraged to do so. I want to thank you so very much for your kind words of support, and the gentle words of correction. I need both to help make me the kind of writer with broad appeal. May God bless you! Your TEAMMATE in written communication . cc
Comment from Bill Schott
This is a nice poem about the coming of a grand daughter. The story can be sort of pieced together. A couple was told they couldn't conceive, but did. Your notes have answered some questions I had. Happy grand-parenting!
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2016
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This is a nice poem about the coming of a grand daughter. The story can be sort of pieced together. A couple was told they couldn't conceive, but did. Your notes have answered some questions I had. Happy grand-parenting!
Comment Written 11-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2016
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Your beginning analysis is spot on.I must confess to you that writing is emotional for me. I have no idea why my writing is more emotional than most other areas of my life. As you may guess, Brelynn is more emotional to me than most of my writings! So it?s with a special sense of appreciation that I thank you for your wonderful five star review. It?s only been the last couple of years that I have attempted to write because I?ve never been encouraged to do so. I want to thank you so very much for your kind words of support, and the gentle words of correction. I need both to help make me the kind of writer with broad appeal. May God bless you! Your TEAMMATE in written communication .
Comment from Zue65
Oh I just love the art work that goes with this poem. It complements well the message of a baby about to be born, the joyous event for first time parents and the expectant happiness on the part of grandparents. I enjoyed reading this feel-good poem. God bless.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2016
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Oh I just love the art work that goes with this poem. It complements well the message of a baby about to be born, the joyous event for first time parents and the expectant happiness on the part of grandparents. I enjoyed reading this feel-good poem. God bless.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2016
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I must confess to you that writing is emotional for me. I have no idea why my writing is more emotional than most other areas of my life. As you may guess, Brelynn is more emotional to me than most of my writings! So it?s with a special sense of appreciation that I thank you for your wonderful five star review. It?s only been the last couple of years that I have attempted to write because I?ve never been encouraged to do so. I want to thank you so very much for your kind words of support, and the gentle words of correction. I need both to help make me the kind of writer with broad appeal. May God bless you! Your TEAMMATE in written communication .
Comment from Mastery
Hello, author. I wish you well in the contest with this emotionally penned writing. Yes, becoming a granparent islike starting life all over again. I know from five-time experience.
I liked this stanza in particular:
"At this point it's pins and needles,
arrival could be any day.
As a family we unite,
asking God to bless you. We pray!"
Just a note. From experience, I can tell you that putting words in bold type usually has the opposite effect on the reader. It takes away from the natural flow of the poem.
Blessings and good luck.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2016
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Hello, author. I wish you well in the contest with this emotionally penned writing. Yes, becoming a granparent islike starting life all over again. I know from five-time experience.
I liked this stanza in particular:
"At this point it's pins and needles,
arrival could be any day.
As a family we unite,
asking God to bless you. We pray!"
Just a note. From experience, I can tell you that putting words in bold type usually has the opposite effect on the reader. It takes away from the natural flow of the poem.
Blessings and good luck.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2016
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I must confess to you that writing is emotional for me. I have no idea why my writing is more emotional than most other areas of my life. As you may guess, Brelynn is more emotional to me than most of my writings! So it?s with a special sense of appreciation that I thank you for your wonderful five star review. It?s only been the last couple of years that I have attempted to write because I?ve never been encouraged to do so. I want to thank you so very much for your kind words of support, and the gentle words of correction. I need both to help make me the kind of writer with broad appeal. May God bless you! Your TEAMMATE in written communication . I know what you're saying about bolding the words and it was with reluctance that I did so, but my feedback is indicated that it was helpful. Thank you for your thoughts.
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Thank you fro your response. I appreciate it and am always willing to help if I can. What is your name btw? Blessings.
This is Dr. Nad and I encourage you to
Embrace the love from above!
Comment from Aurapro
I absolutely loved this writing, your choice of words were perfect
Children are such blessings, I wish them health always
Regards,
Jordan
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2016
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I absolutely loved this writing, your choice of words were perfect
Children are such blessings, I wish them health always
Regards,
Jordan
Comment Written 11-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2016
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I must confess to you that writing is emotional for me. I have no idea why my writing is more emotional than most other areas of my life. As you may guess, Brelynn is more emotional to me than most of my writings! So it?s with a special sense of appreciation that I thank you for your wonderful five star review. It?s only been the last couple of years that I have attempted to write because I?ve never been encouraged to do so. I want to thank you so very much for your kind words of support, and the gentle words of correction. I need both to help make me the kind of writer with broad appeal. May God bless you! Your TEAMMATE in written communication .
Comment from Eric1
Hi Mystery Author, this is a really good entry for this particular competition, Good rhythm and rhyming with a nice smooth flow. I wish you the very best of luck in the contest my friend.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2016
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Hi Mystery Author, this is a really good entry for this particular competition, Good rhythm and rhyming with a nice smooth flow. I wish you the very best of luck in the contest my friend.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2016
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I must confess to you that writing is emotional for me. I have no idea why my writing is more emotional than most other areas of my life. As you may guess, Brelynn is more emotional to me than most of my writings! So it?s with a special sense of appreciation that I thank you for your wonderful five star review. It?s only been the last couple of years that I have attempted to write because I?ve never been encouraged to do so. I want to thank you so very much for your kind words of support, and the gentle words of correction. I need both to help make me the kind of writer with broad appeal. May God bless you! Your TEAMMATE in written communication .
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You are very welcome my friend.
Comment from Caressa_08
Oh, how sweet she will be loved, I can see that, and quite the little miracle.
I have a grandson who is now 2 and his name is Breyden, & he too is a miracle baby as my son, the army told my son that he was sterile, & at 37 yrs old it was his first child, unexpected, but he always wanted to be a father, & be married like he is, & wife had many complications during the pregnancy...And Breyden now is a healthy toddler.
The only thing that I found was that the first line has 7 syllables, instead of 8 , though I think you can fix that with no problem, or possibly keep it that way. Also being it's a true poem I would list it as biographical.
Best Wishes for your great entry & too for a healthy delivery for your daughter and your granddaughter....and write another poem after Brelynn is born, when you have a chance.
Caressa_08
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2016
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Oh, how sweet she will be loved, I can see that, and quite the little miracle.
I have a grandson who is now 2 and his name is Breyden, & he too is a miracle baby as my son, the army told my son that he was sterile, & at 37 yrs old it was his first child, unexpected, but he always wanted to be a father, & be married like he is, & wife had many complications during the pregnancy...And Breyden now is a healthy toddler.
The only thing that I found was that the first line has 7 syllables, instead of 8 , though I think you can fix that with no problem, or possibly keep it that way. Also being it's a true poem I would list it as biographical.
Best Wishes for your great entry & too for a healthy delivery for your daughter and your granddaughter....and write another poem after Brelynn is born, when you have a chance.
Caressa_08
Comment Written 11-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2016
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Thank you for taking the time to give me insight into your own personal family history. I must confess to you that writing is emotional for me. I have no idea why my writing is more emotional than most other areas of my life. As you may guess, Brelynn is more emotional to me than most of my writings! So it?s with a special sense of appreciation that I thank you for your wonderful five star review. It?s only been the last couple of years that I have attempted to write because I?ve never been encouraged to do so. I want to thank you so very much for your kind words of support, and the gentle words of correction.(You were right and I made those changes) I need both to help make me the kind of writer with broad appeal. May God bless you! Your TEAMMATE in written communication .
Comment from amada
I celebrate with you the precious cargo coming in. Your lines here show the emotion and the devotion to that little one. Please tell us more. Best wishes.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2016
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I celebrate with you the precious cargo coming in. Your lines here show the emotion and the devotion to that little one. Please tell us more. Best wishes.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2016
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I must confess to you that writing is emotional for me. I have no idea why my writing is more emotional than most other areas of my life. As you may guess, Brelynn is more emotional to me than most of my writings! So it?s with a special sense of appreciation that I thank you for your wonderful five star review. It?s only been the last couple of years that I have attempted to write because I?ve never been encouraged to do so. I want to thank you so very much for your kind words of support, and the gentle words of correction. I need both to help make me the kind of writer with broad appeal. May God bless you! Your TEAMMATE in written communication .
Comment from joannakruk
What a lovely piece that expresses the multitude of experiences and emotions encountered in the gestational period. There is an underlying theme of an utter trust in the wishes of the lord and his decision pertaining to the fate of this child. I congratulate you for being such a proud grandparent.
Lovely flow.
Jo :-)
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2016
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What a lovely piece that expresses the multitude of experiences and emotions encountered in the gestational period. There is an underlying theme of an utter trust in the wishes of the lord and his decision pertaining to the fate of this child. I congratulate you for being such a proud grandparent.
Lovely flow.
Jo :-)
Comment Written 11-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2016
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I must confess to you that writing is emotional for me. I have no idea why my writing is more emotional than most other areas of my life. As you may guess, Brelynn is more emotional to me than most of my writings! So it?s with a special sense of appreciation that I thank you for your wonderful five star review. It?s only been the last couple of years that I have attempted to write because I?ve never been encouraged to do so. I want to thank you so very much for your kind words of support, and the gentle words of correction. I need both to help make me the kind of writer with broad appeal. May God bless you! Your TEAMMATE in written communication .
Comment from Rookette
First off...congratulations!! What a job little ones are. It's amazing how such a tiny being can bring so much love, joy, happiness...isn't it? I have 2 and I don't know, now, how I lived a day before them!!! Ok sorry...got a bit off there...
This poem is lovely. It flows beautifully! The rhyming is on point and never seems forced. What a wonderful tribute to that lucky little girl. Good luck and prayers with you and your family! xoLeslie
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2016
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First off...congratulations!! What a job little ones are. It's amazing how such a tiny being can bring so much love, joy, happiness...isn't it? I have 2 and I don't know, now, how I lived a day before them!!! Ok sorry...got a bit off there...
This poem is lovely. It flows beautifully! The rhyming is on point and never seems forced. What a wonderful tribute to that lucky little girl. Good luck and prayers with you and your family! xoLeslie
Comment Written 10-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2016
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I must confess to you that writing is emotional for me. I have no idea why my writing is more emotional than most other areas of my life. As you may guess, Brelynn is more emotional to me than most of my writings! So it?s with a special sense of appreciation that I thank you for your wonderful five star review. It?s only been the last couple of years that I have attempted to write because I?ve never been encouraged to do so. I want to thank you so very much for your kind words of support, and the gentle words of correction. I need both to help make me the kind of writer with broad appeal. May God bless you! Your TEAMMATE in written communication .