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Comment from tony bronk
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That is correct, you folks "down under" are preparing for your winter while we're enjoying our spring, preparing for our summer. You did a lovely job of describing Australia this particular part of the year, and i enjoyed reading it. Tony

 Comment Written 24-Apr-2016


reply by the author on 25-Apr-2016
    Ho Tony, Yes seems we arecon oppsoite poles so it is a bonus for us to have such lovely warm to hot days in this latish Autumn so one needs to take advantage of thecwarming rays. Glad you enjoyed the read. Cheers go to you Christine 😄
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2016
    Ho Tony, Yes seems we arecon oppsoite poles so it is a bonus for us to have such lovely warm to hot days in this latish Autumn so one needs to take advantage of thecwarming rays. Glad you enjoyed the read. Cheers go to you Christine 😄
Comment from misscookie
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You captured my attention from the first line to the last
I must confess I was being to wonder where your poem was going.
How please I was to find out you were talking to the sun...LOL
Cooke

 Comment Written 24-Apr-2016


reply by the author on 24-Apr-2016
    Hi Cookie, So glad you stopping by to read my poem and Thank yo so much for your generous six stars I am thrilled with you response. Ha Ha had you in and I hope I was tasteful with my words although a bit naughty and only sunbaking ( I am often sunbaking to warm my bones. A big Cheers to you my friend for your support. Christine 😀
reply by misscookie on 25-Apr-2016
    You're very welcome, yes you got me good about your sun bathing.
    Have a nice day.
    Cookie
Comment from foxangie123
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This is an extraordinary and fabulous piece of writing with a drawing that is exactly perfect to go with. A down right lovely poem here. Keep them coming.

 Comment Written 24-Apr-2016


reply by the author on 24-Apr-2016
    Hi Foxie, Thank you my friend for your review and encouraging comment for my SUN poem, I couldn't resist a Sunbake yesterday although it is late autumn but the sun was so inviting LOL . more to come And as always a big Cheers to you Christine 😀
Comment from Douglas Paul
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You really did a nice job on this Chrissy, It feels enchanting to me. It is an elegant description of the Sun. It has the feel of a love poem

 Comment Written 24-Apr-2016


reply by the author on 24-Apr-2016
    Hi Douglas, I enjoyed writing this one and also did enjoy probably a last Sunbake for the year and I am in-love with the SUN have been for years LOL . Thanks for stopping by to read my poem and as alway appreciate yor lovely support. Have a great day Cheers Christine 😀
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
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Excellent poem Chrissie and I love the personification of the sun. Well written through the voice of the sun and it works well. Good aabb rhyme maintained throughout and a lovely read. Good, blindingly bright picture - like the sun. Don't forget the sun cream LOL. Warm regards Dorothy x

 Comment Written 24-Apr-2016


reply by the author on 24-Apr-2016
    Hi Dorothy, Thanks for reading my poem and for your lovely warm review, to brighten up my day. I seem to have my particular style with many of my poems aabb and use this often I am also particular re the syllable count also 8 per line as I like poems to have an even meter. ( I am learning lots I hope) took me ages to find the right picture but perserverence paid off LOL . Not much sunscreen I'm afraid just bare skin But I do look after it. Many Cheers my friend Christine 😀
Comment from VaV-VOOM
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Nice, thank you so much for a really good read. There just isn't anything like words. Thank you again, and have a great day. Write On! VaV-VOOM!

 Comment Written 24-Apr-2016


reply by the author on 24-Apr-2016
    Hi VaV-VOOM. yes words can portray a lot and I loved writing this and had fun with these words. I do love to have a Sunbake and as the Autumn day was lovely and warm I had probably on of my last ones until next Summer. And my inspiration came as I was enjoying this warmth. Glad you found this a good read and many thanks for you support once again Cheers Chrstine😀
reply by VaV-VOOM on 24-Apr-2016
    Your so welcome, VaV-VOOM!
Comment from jusylee72
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Beautiful tribute to our wonderful sun. I truly adore it. This was a fun read. I am a Texan who once lived in Minnesota. I am a complete sun lover and so grateful for the warmth it brings us. Thanks for reminding me.

 Comment Written 24-Apr-2016


reply by the author on 24-Apr-2016
    Hi jusylee72. Nice to meet you and Thank you for reading and reviewing my poem. I am glad to hear from another SUN lover, I love to lay out in the Sun and feel the warmth it brings too. My family knows where I will be on any given sunny day out on my sunbed LOL ( only for an hour) I am glad this reminded you of the pleasure of the sun. Many Cheers Christine 😀
Comment from robyn corum
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Chrissy! I was half-way through the poem and wondering if I should continue... (I don't normally read the stuff with sex flags - I'm a prude!) but since you didn't have one - and you're you - I kept going. So it was the SUN! You're sooooo bad! *smile*

 Comment Written 24-Apr-2016


reply by the author on 24-Apr-2016
    Ha Ha Robyn, Gotcha. It was only me having a SUN bake. I wasn't sure about the warning but thought I hope it doesn't need one and maybe just got away with it LOL. ( I don't read any of those with warning either ) But I like to get the reader with maybe a clever twist as long as it is tasteful. I smile at your soooooo bad Yep sometimes I am. Thanks so much for staying with me Cheers Christine. 😀
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
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Nice tribute to the sun. It's very cute and I like the personification. I like the sun but I don't lie out to tan anymore, afraid of skin cancer.

 Comment Written 24-Apr-2016


reply by the author on 24-Apr-2016
    Hi Gypsy, Thanks your for reading my poem to the SUN. I love sunbaking and have sone so for years since I was a kid. I hang out for Summer and have a lay out as often as I can ( only for an hour) It is like therapy to me and I love to be brown. ( But do use Moisturiser every day.) Thanks my friend for your review Many Cheers to you Christine😀
Comment from Lena Borghi
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This is so clever! You have made excellent use of personification. Your perfectly rhyming quatrains take us along a story, which at first seems like a lover's call and then the twist!

Well done!

Lena

 Comment Written 24-Apr-2016


reply by the author on 24-Apr-2016
    Hi Lena, I am pleased you thought this clever I had fun writing it and laying in the SUN yesterday gave me the inspiration and so I was composing this while enjoying the beautiful warm rays. Thanks you for having a read and for your review Cheers Christine 😀