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Comment from misscookie
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My that's a wonderful way to remember your day. It is something different.
I guess you got written from your da.and I know you loved him very much.
My daughter Dainne has been gone for nine years I can't believe it was that long we both love to write but she was a marvelous gifted writer..
Thank you for sharing

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 Comment Written 13-Apr-2016


reply by the author on 14-Apr-2016
    Hi Cookie, thanks for your lovely review and yes I did love him so much and we all miss him terribly especially my Mum it makes me sad when she is so lonely without him But we do visit him often and tell him all about the family events etc. and every time we go to the cemetey the sun always comes out even on a dull day so he is always looking over us.
    You must miss your daughter so much but I'm sure you have some lovely memories and her words to cherish. The time just seems to go so quickly Many Cheers and a hug to you Christine 😃
reply by misscookie on 14-Apr-2016
    You're very welcome and she like you dad, Dianne and her brother whose in heaven with her is watching over me.... and Dianne visits me many times,
    Until next time.
    Cookie
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2016
    Yes I know what you mean. never away as long as they are in your heart. Christine
reply by misscookie on 14-Apr-2016
    Keep the faith stay strong.
    Until next time.
    Cookie
Comment from terry drake
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Your last line has a seven syllable count compared to eight on each of all the other lines. Your cherished memory is strong in this poem and the rhyme scheme was good.

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 Comment Written 13-Apr-2016


reply by the author on 14-Apr-2016
    Hi Terry, Thanks you very much for your review and I have corrected line eight to fit the syllable count ( I am usually so mindful to have this correct so I appreciate your eagle eye ) Yes our memories are very strong and he is not far away. Cheers Christine😃