Comment from I am Cat

Excellent

lovely... just lovely. ;)
not sure about the volta... but who cares with words like that, right? lol
mwah
I'm too tired, aren't you? yeah. you have a way of just saying stuff... i"ll jump with you.
why not? lol
well done
C

 Comment Written 12-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 12-Apr-2016

I saved the volta for the very last line because I'm a cheeky young man. LOL Even Billy Boy would be nervous doing that. But I'm insane, so it doesn't worry me a bit, a bit. I generally don't sleep a bit, a bit. Thank you cosmopolitan world traveler. mikey

reply by I am Cat on 12-Apr-2016

Well, I think you're pretty nifty... I must have stumbled over it in my haste to review... ;) you're awesome

Comment from lightink

Excellent

What a closing couplet! The aging love! But certainly no willingness to just sot down and wait for death - or endless dr''s appointments!
"I hunger and I seek what I needs sup." - here the grammar is off a bit I think...
Otherwise, I's quite a life affirming story! I especially liked the third stanza's passion!

 Comment Written 12-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 12-Apr-2016

Yeah, I thought that line sounded strange, but I couldn't figure out why exactly. I changed it. I think it's okay now. Thank you, I needed the extra push. LOL!
May as well go out kicking and screaming, that's how I came in! mikey

Comment from nordicgirl

Exceptional

Damn! I feel like grabbing some dude and ... well making him a helluva a sandwich or something else maybe. This is pretty fire it up stuff here Mr. Cahill, sir. Yes, I don`t mind if I do. NG

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 12-Apr-2016

Oh, yeah, baby. A sandwich sounds divine. Can you make a patty melt on rye with crispy bacon and grilled onions? OHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!! I thought a bit of friskiness was in order and it seemed like a good night for the grey pony to gallup. :)) mikey

Comment from Ima L. Ami

Excellent

Wow! This is super intense and the rhythm and flow are excellent. I love the message of searching for true love and "...quake with grace", what a great line! The artwork is perfect for the words. Great work, thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 12-Apr-2016

Thanks Suzanne. A real sonnet. Us free verse poets like to throw one of these in just to prove we can! LOL
Glad you liked it. A rage against age piece. Once you're there it seems like the thing to do!! mikey

Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)

Excellent

Did you write a 'fake sonnet'? This is a lovely real one.
I especially like your couplet:

The young have heat, but quick it fizzles out;
but ancient fires burn longest, there's no doubt!

Lots of emotion in this one, my friend~Debbie






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 Comment Written 11-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 12-Apr-2016

Yes! I did. LOL I wrote a rambling free verse and called it a sonnet because someone asked me to write a sonnet. Then I felt guilty so this is the real one. Crazy poets, yes?
So delighted you liked this. I was happy with the ending too! Words to live by!! Thanks so much, Debbie. mikey

Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca

Excellent

LOL
yes it is
even with close "thee's and thou's"
You are on a sonnet kick but I have to say I liked the last one better

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 Comment Written 11-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 12-Apr-2016

Yes, the last one was a bit more fun it seems as I read the account of it. That armour is a pain to get out of. mikey