Comment from Dutchie

Excellent

Out of your comfort zone, my friend? I see you changed it. I wanted to PM you, but I did not know how to change it. So I came back for the improved version.
Well done my friend, I love your humor!! Fia

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 11-Apr-2016

Thanks so much, Fia. I appreciate you looking out for me. LOL...Bob

Comment from Mark Valentine

Excellent

I saw this contest and though it ironic as it would take a good deal of imagination to convey a lack of imagination in 17 syllables. You nailed it. This one would be great even as an anaonymous entry -knowing that it comes from a novel writer who, to my knowledge, has never posted a 5-7-5, makes it all the better. As you say "nothing lost but pride" -and actually you didn't even lose that because this is quite good.

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 11-Apr-2016

Thanks so much, Mark. Yeah, I figured what the hell....what is the worst that can happen for five bucks invested of funny money. Thanks for your encouragement, my friend. Bob

Comment from Scarbrems

Excellent

Booo, yours is better than mine. Another contest I won't win, lol. Very poetic 'yawn', here, Bob. No pride lost with this entry. Great stuff.

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 11-Apr-2016

Thanks so much, Sarkems. Bob

Comment from trumby

Excellent

You've infused a touch of quasi-bitterness in this poem, mate.
You obviously don't feel comfortable with this form of writing.
I have no idea why you feel that way.
This really is an excellent poem.
Possibly even a contest winner.

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 11-Apr-2016

Thaanks so much, Mark. You are a gentleman. Bob

Comment from Father Flaps

Excellent

Hey Bobby,
I was surprised to see that you entered this contest. I don't have a clue what it's all about. Of course, the rules overpowered me anyway, right off the bat. I am tossing this one around in my head, wondering if it would work,
"Far out of my realm
so what in the (helm) is this
nothing lost but pride" ...who is steering the ship?
I would lose the period at the end, my only real suggestion.
Good Luck in the contest!
your fan,
Kimbob

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 11-Apr-2016

Thanks so much KImBob. I just figured what the heck...for 5.00 why not give it a go. LOL. Bob

Comment from Sis Cat

Excellent

This is a fun, yawn poem that made me smile. "Realm" is well rhymed with "hell." You also paint a picture of being overly ambitious and proud as a poet. Thank you for sharing your poem. I wish you success in the contest.

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 11-Apr-2016

Thanks so much, Cat. LOL...This was just a lark as you can tell. But I had fun with it. Take care. Bob

Comment from boxergirl

Excellent

Lol, Bob...nothing to feel shameless over...I really like the humorous and sarcastic tone in your short poem entry. I'm glad you decided to toss your hat in the ring...I'm still smiling! :-)

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 11-Apr-2016

Thanks, Karen. You are so sweet to overlook my handicap. :) Bob

Comment from Chris Walker

Excellent

Way to spread those wings, Bob! Excellent micro poem! There's definitely no pride lost here--it's well written, it's brevity still captures a sense of amusement--how about writing some more poetry? Good luck in the contest. Chris

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 11-Apr-2016

Hi, Chris. I have a ton of poetry in my portfolio. I used to write a lot of it before the novel fever got me. Take a look someday if you have time. Thanks so much for your review and compliments, my friend. Bob

Comment from ciliverde

Excellent

This is so awesome, Bob - I love it :)
"So what in the hell is this?"
It's a perfect entry for this contest, that's what it is!

You might just win this one!
Carol

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 11-Apr-2016

Thanks so much, Carol I doubt I will win, but I figured what have I got to lose but five bucks and .....a little pride with my unpoetic self showing. LOL...Bob

Comment from l.raven

Excellent

Hi Bob, I don't ever remember seeing you write poetry...sometimes we have to step out of the box...and give it a whirl...very well expressed...pride and all...never saw a yawn contest...LOL...well done you...luff Linda xxoo

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 11-Apr-2016

Hi, Linda. Oh, yeah. I've got tons of poetry in my portfolio. I used to write a lot and actually won quite a few contests, but then the novel bug got me and I haven't been back in a long time. Thanks so much for your encouraging words. Have a peek at my port under poetry sometime....LOL...Bob

reply by l.raven on 11-Apr-2016

I truly will...and you are so very welcome...always...Luff xxoo