Comment from Dorothy Farrell

Excellent

This is a well written free verse. Good use of alliteration with the letter 'S' in your first and last stanza. Looking at your picture and reading stanza three would suggest you refer to the homeless, but it is very subtle. Homeless in the weather you write about is not a good place to be. A good descriptive piece. Good Luck in the contest. Regards Dorothy

 Comment Written 07-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 07-Feb-2016

Thanks, Dorothy. The plight of the New York homeless huddled among heaps of dirty snow and garbage left quite an impression on me. I appreciate your dropping by to review and your generous comments. Best wishes, Tony

Comment from Treischel

Exceptional

Indeed, the homeless that don't head south to warmer climes are a hardy lot. You paint a much more depressing vision of winter than I usually do, and do it in outstanding free verse imagery. Of course this side is just as real, and you really put it out there. Excellent poetic portrait. Very thought provoking.

 Comment Written 07-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 07-Feb-2016

My view of snow is usually more positive too, but I found it quite depressing heaped up on the sidewalks of New York alongside all the garbage and the homeless people. Thanks for reading and your generous comments and the six stars.

Comment from Pantygynt

Excellent

A piece of excellent free descriptive verse that must surely draw heavily on a fertile imagination as you are surely just past the very height of summer.

I like the somewhat oblique reference to homelessness here. That state must be a nordic hell in weather like this. The hell of Norse mythology is always depicted as a frozen waste as opposed to a fiery furnace.

 Comment Written 07-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 07-Feb-2016

No - drawn from life. I'm currently in New York for a month, where my daughter is about to give birth to our first grandchild. My view of snow is usually more positive , but I found it quite depressing heaped up on the sidewalks In gritty mounds alongside all the garbage and the homeless people. A Nordic hell indeed.

reply by Pantygynt on 07-Feb-2016

Of course. I had forgotten you said you were going. Yes city snow soon gets very ugly.

Comment from Bill O'Bier

Excellent

I enjoyed reading this delightful poem. The descriptive language flowed well. The artwork works great with the theme of the poem.

Thanks for sharing.
Bill

 Comment Written 07-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 07-Feb-2016

Thanks, Bill. I appreciate your dropping by to review. Best wishes, Tony

Comment from Larissa B

Exceptional

I see this is a contest entry. So if this is the same one I entered, I'm in trouble. lol! I love the warmth more evident towards the end-- and very ironical coz your topic is about snow. Of course, I always want to assume that every poet talks about much more than one topic in any given piece... the more hidden ones, usually deeper and darker.

Great write! and congratulations. ;))

Larissa

 Comment Written 07-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 07-Feb-2016

Thanks, Larissa. I appreciate your dropping by to review and your kind comments. Also the generous gift of six stars. Best wishes, Tony

Comment from dmt1967

Excellent

It is a good job I read your title twice as I thought it said something else lol. I put that down to my dirty mind, though lol. This is a great poem. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 07-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 07-Feb-2016

Thanks, dmt67. I appreciate your dropping by to review. You're right, there's room for interpretation in the title! Best wishes, Tony

Comment from Dawn Munro

Excellent

Tony, this is one of the saddest free verses on this topic, and believe me, I've read a few! It galls me to think about the homeless with all the wealth held by a precious few - how can anyone in good conscience hoard millions (and more)? At least donate a building to provide shelter for a few!

(Forgive me - I don't think I need to comment on the technical aspects of the writing to a writer of your calibre, hence my reaction to content, mostly.)

 Comment Written 07-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 07-Feb-2016

Thanks, Dawn. The plight of the New York homeless huddled among heaps of dirty snow and garbage left quite an impression on me. I appreciate your dropping by to review. Best wishes, Tony

reply by Dawn Munro on 07-Feb-2016

I know. Same here in Toronto, sans the garbage. :( You're welcome.

Comment from krys123

Excellent

Tony;
-the metaphorical imagery in this writing is totally superb and fantastic I was at grips as I grasped the imagery with such fervor. I like your innuendos about the homeless and their suffering.
- the picture was very appropriate and relative to your conceptual theme and quite complementary to the poem. It gave me shivers along with the poem.
- this is a very superb and excellent free verse poem Tony. the imagery was very distinct and clear and quite expressive and vividly and demonstratively descriptive throughout the writing.
- good luck in the contest and may the good Lord be with you always Tony.
Alex

 Comment Written 07-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 07-Feb-2016

Thanks, Alex. The plight of the New York homeless huddled among heaps of dirty snow and garbage left quite an impression on me. I appreciate your dropping by to review and your generous comments. Best wishes, Tony

reply by krys123 on 09-Feb-2016

You are very welcome Tony. I've written many songs about the homeless some of them upbeat just to get the attention of the listener.
Alex

Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep

Exceptional

I could feel the raw cold in this poem, Tony. How I would hate to be homeless, even here in Queensland, let alone somewhere where it snows! I thought it was a deeply imagistic free verse work, Giddy

 Comment Written 07-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 07-Feb-2016

Thanks, Giddy. The plight of the New York homeless huddled among heaps of dirty snow and garbage has left quite an impression on me. I appreciate your dropping by to review and your generous comments and the six stars. Best wishes, Tony

Comment from country ranch writer

Exceptional

being homeless in cold weather just doesn't seem right does it why can't they be taken inside to warm up no people are to afraid to trust them for one dad apple spoils the barrel

 Comment Written 07-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 07-Feb-2016

Thanks, CRW. The plight of the New York homeless huddled among heaps of dirty snow and garbage has left quite an impression on me. I appreciate your dropping by to review and your generous comments, and the six stars. Best wishes, Tony

reply by country ranch writer on 08-Feb-2016

read a story about a lady up there that works seven days a week helping the homeless get their meals and brings them to where the area is that needs it the most. there is an angel on her shoulders