Comment from Ben Colder

Excellent

I have never tried this type of poem writing before, but you make it look and sound interesting. Thank you for sharing. Well done, poet.

 Comment Written 10-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 11-Jan-2016

Thanks, ben.

Steve

Comment from trumby

Excellent

Honestly, I don't think I can review the style/form but I love the poem, the message. We really dont know how we are going to die, because like what you have said, there are heaps of ways to do that, so we might enjoy our lives and be happy. Thanks for sharing.

Best wishes.

 Comment Written 10-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 11-Jan-2016

Thanks for stopping by.

Steve

Comment from nancyjam

Exceptional

Great job on this Rondeau Redouble.
It has always looked to me like an impossible form
to conquer, but conquer it you did.
Excellent rhyme and positioning of repeat lines
that flow smoothly.
Good advice for living in the moment!
Nancy

 Comment Written 10-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 11-Jan-2016

Thanks, Nancy.

It's a bit like solving a cryptic crossword - I'm good at those!

Steve

Comment from ~Dovey

Exceptional

Hi Steve,
Given your topic and my inexperience with this style, I feared perhaps something grave had happened before you ended your final line. I read and re-read, then re-read the description of the Rondeau Redouble (thank goodness for Author's notes!) and now I've got it.

(and the first part of the first line is repeated as a short fifth line to conclude the sixth stanza)

I am most relieved to have decided that you didn't die before penning the final line. You did extreme credit to this difficult style. I don't give out that sixer very often, and this, I find, is my second, or possibly third of the day! I best slow down here, I'd say!

This is an excellent piece and well deserving of the rating, based on the difficulty of the style and the perfection in the rhymes used to accomplish your fruition to detail.

Thank you for sharing!

Kim

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reply by the author on 11-Jan-2016

Kim, thanks so much for the obviously close reading of the piece and the amusing review (and the sixer, of course!) - I guess it would have been a good one to go out on....

Steve

Comment from foxangie123

Excellent

Good one and the picture you chose is absolutely perfect to the lines you have mastered into your poem. Even though it would normally be seen as dark, I found it to read much lighter than than to the point of hidden humors held within. Nice.

 Comment Written 10-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 11-Jan-2016

Thanks, Angie.

Steve

Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep

Excellent

Fantastic, Steve! Well done for the number of variations on your rhyming words. I had noticed as I was reading the great inventions you had come up with. You are right, Rondo redouble is a lovely form of poetry and most enjoyable. I learnt these in a course but don't have enough time to practice everything, Giddy

 Comment Written 10-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 11-Jan-2016

Thanks, Giddy.

Do you mean a FanStory course? I've never tried one - can't afford it, actually...

Steve

Comment from Leineco

Excellent

:::grin:::

To welcome the reaper with such relish!!
(Why not? If you gotta go. . .
it might as well be a bang not a whimper :-)

Great manipulation of this form Steve :-)
(it's not easy to wrangle those two measly rhymes without
feeling overwhelmed by the repetitiveness, but I really
feel you accomplished overcoming it :-)

Plus, I love the tongue in cheek impishness of it :-)

 Comment Written 10-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 11-Jan-2016

Thanks for the thoughtful review. Yes, the form always seems to lead to impishness - something to do with the measly two rhymes forcing you to put in some unlikely words...

Steve

Comment from Louise Michelle

Excellent

You said it, Steve. We never know how we're going to go, so we might as well live life to the fullest.

The third stanza is my favorite. I particularly like the line: there is no foolproof way to prophesy.' Even talented psychics make mistakes. Very nicely written. Hugs, Lou

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reply by the author on 11-Jan-2016

Thanks, Lou. Don't believe in psychics or anything of the supernatural kind...

Steve

Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

...a bloke could die.

Haha, this was a very well rhymed and perfectly composed Rondeau Redouble, Steve.
You've certainly covered a myriad of ways one could conceivably meet their maker.
This speaks to the old saying that many like to say to someone when they feel that someone is sleeping their life away by staying in bed all day.

You can sleep when you're dead.

I could've sworn I 've read this before but my review doesn't appear here, so...

Well done, a very fun poem to read.

Dean~~>

 Comment Written 10-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 11-Jan-2016

Dean, thanks for the great review.

I like the Darwin Awards that celebrate people who manage ti kill themselves in particularly stupid ways!

Steve

reply by Dean Kuch on 11-Jan-2016

It was my pleasure, Steve,
Dean~~>

reply by Anonymous Member on 13-Jan-2016

It was my pleasure, Steve,
Dean~~>

Comment from frogbook

Excellent

Ah, you are a better man than I (although I'm not a man-haha). It made me dizzy just to just read the instructions. But let me tell you that although I can't intelligently critique the form, I did love the poem and the humor. The form with it's repetition was interesting and smart. I was quite entertained and frankly, in awe of this type of poem.

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reply by the author on 11-Jan-2016

Thank you.

A lot of people hate the restrictions of this type of verse, but I like it - I love puzzles and that is almost what this is to put together.

Steve