Hawaiian Time
People in Hawaii are laid back33 total reviews
Comment from Tomes Johnston
This is an interesting poem that the author has created with this piece of writing. This is a lovely poem about an idyllic lifestyle on the pacific islands. That is why we holiday on paradise islands.
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This is an interesting poem that the author has created with this piece of writing. This is a lovely poem about an idyllic lifestyle on the pacific islands. That is why we holiday on paradise islands.
Comment Written 27-Dec-2015
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thanks for the nice review
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My pleasure.
Comment from Brett Matthew West
"live nothing" should either be "live, nothing" or "live. Nothing...".
"weathers" should be "weather's" or "weather is".
"Saunter" should be "saunter".
"event" should be "events".
"ones" should be 'one's" or "one is".
"America Hawaii" should be "America, Hawaii".
May wish to reconsider these suggested edits.
Poem itself depicts life, as you view it, in Hawaii.
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"live nothing" should either be "live, nothing" or "live. Nothing...".
"weathers" should be "weather's" or "weather is".
"Saunter" should be "saunter".
"event" should be "events".
"ones" should be 'one's" or "one is".
"America Hawaii" should be "America, Hawaii".
May wish to reconsider these suggested edits.
Poem itself depicts life, as you view it, in Hawaii.
Comment Written 27-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2015
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Thank you Mathew
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i appreciate the Critique the rating is for the poem not the author notes just saying i made the changes
Comment from misscookie
I love the artwork that you choose to go with your poem it is a perfect match.
Your word sounds to go to be true. You make is sound like Paradise. I know when white man came over there it had to change a lot .Except to certain parts of the Island I'm sure is clam a peaceful as you say. Just wondering.
Cookie
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I love the artwork that you choose to go with your poem it is a perfect match.
Your word sounds to go to be true. You make is sound like Paradise. I know when white man came over there it had to change a lot .Except to certain parts of the Island I'm sure is clam a peaceful as you say. Just wondering.
Cookie
Comment Written 27-Dec-2015
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thank you Cookie
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It was my pleasure.
Take care.
Cookie
Comment from zanya
It does seem like an earthly paradise - how different it must feel to live and abide in such a place'Everyone's happy and no one's ever late'-a sojourn there would be well worth experiencing
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It does seem like an earthly paradise - how different it must feel to live and abide in such a place'Everyone's happy and no one's ever late'-a sojourn there would be well worth experiencing
Comment Written 27-Dec-2015
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thanks for your review
Comment from amahra
Thank you for sharing the time factor about Hawaii. I love learning new things. It's a great poem that captures the essence of the slow and leisurely Hawaiian people. Thank you for posting.
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Thank you for sharing the time factor about Hawaii. I love learning new things. It's a great poem that captures the essence of the slow and leisurely Hawaiian people. Thank you for posting.
Comment Written 27-Dec-2015
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thank you my friend
Comment from trumby
Excellent work here, mate. A nice way of describing how is it to live in Hawaii. This poem reminds the readers that its not just the money that we should value, that everything is not all about money. We should also value our time with the family and friends, relax and feel happy with our loved ones. People should also make some time to enjoy what the nature could offer.
The image used added interest in reading the poem. I enjoyed this one.
"Life on an island is a reason to celebrate"
Good job mate. Keep writing and thank you for sharing this one.
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2015
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Excellent work here, mate. A nice way of describing how is it to live in Hawaii. This poem reminds the readers that its not just the money that we should value, that everything is not all about money. We should also value our time with the family and friends, relax and feel happy with our loved ones. People should also make some time to enjoy what the nature could offer.
The image used added interest in reading the poem. I enjoyed this one.
"Life on an island is a reason to celebrate"
Good job mate. Keep writing and thank you for sharing this one.
Comment Written 27-Dec-2015
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thank you my friend check out my portfolio i have many poems on this site just my inspiration left me for a while
Comment from William Ross
Very good a well written piece, Not sure I would like to live there, maybe visit someday. have a wonderful and joyous new Year.
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Very good a well written piece, Not sure I would like to live there, maybe visit someday. have a wonderful and joyous new Year.
Comment Written 27-Dec-2015
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thank you William
Comment from chasennov
People in Hawaii are laid back "Hawaiian Time" This is an excellent poem you have developed here about Hawaiian Time. It tells us that there is more to life than money. Very well done. I particularly liked this last line: 'Just a rock in the ocean rolling with the tides.'
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People in Hawaii are laid back "Hawaiian Time" This is an excellent poem you have developed here about Hawaiian Time. It tells us that there is more to life than money. Very well done. I particularly liked this last line: 'Just a rock in the ocean rolling with the tides.'
Comment Written 27-Dec-2015
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thank you
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Welcome again.
Comment from Leineco
I suppose it's a secret recipe of golden sun, turquoise seas and swaying palms :-) I have spent some time there myself, and even though I live now in the south, I still find Hawaiian time is a different kind of slow. Here, it is about "decorum". But on the islands, it's a matter of being in synch with nature - waterfalls and oceans flow. . . perhaps that's the connection :-)
Nicely said Earthwriter :-)
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2015
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I suppose it's a secret recipe of golden sun, turquoise seas and swaying palms :-) I have spent some time there myself, and even though I live now in the south, I still find Hawaiian time is a different kind of slow. Here, it is about "decorum". But on the islands, it's a matter of being in synch with nature - waterfalls and oceans flow. . . perhaps that's the connection :-)
Nicely said Earthwriter :-)
Comment Written 27-Dec-2015
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thanks for the wonderful review
Comment from Dean Kuch
I've always heard that Hawaii was a true island paradise. I got to go there once while stationed in the Marine Corps but we were only there to get a minor repair on the ship I was on. With such a brief stay scheduled in port, we were forbidden to leave the ship.
It sure looked beautiful from the topside deck.
Your wonderfully well written poem makes me want to return there again for a much longer visit.
Well done, Earthwriter.
~Dean
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I've always heard that Hawaii was a true island paradise. I got to go there once while stationed in the Marine Corps but we were only there to get a minor repair on the ship I was on. With such a brief stay scheduled in port, we were forbidden to leave the ship.
It sure looked beautiful from the topside deck.
Your wonderfully well written poem makes me want to return there again for a much longer visit.
Well done, Earthwriter.
~Dean
Comment Written 27-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2015
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thank you
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'welcome...