Comment from Ric Myworld

Excellent

One of those days that would bring a laugh or two for years to come for this couple, or cause more than an argument or two. Great job, and good luck. :-)

 Comment Written 21-Nov-2015

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reply by the author on 21-Nov-2015

Thanks so much for the reading and review, Ric! Much appreciated. The couple is recurring in my work, so they may very well laugh about it eventually:)
Thanks again for stopping by--I'll try to have a look at your work asap.
Stacia

Comment from w.j.debi

Excellent

What a romantic story. You take us through a gamut of emotions going through the man's head. His doubts, his fears, his realization that he is in love. Then you finally get this couple together and we know they are meant for each other.

Great use of the text messages. They fit the story perfectly.

Love the line about rain being so rare that it has become a spectator sport.

Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 15-Nov-2015

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reply by the author on 15-Nov-2015

Thanks so much for the reading and review, Debi! Much appreciated. It's great to hear some of the intended emotional impact came through:)
Thanks again. Have a great week.
Stacia

Comment from ciliverde

Excellent

Great story. As a resident of southern California, I can relate to the crazy, intense love of rain. It does extraordinary things to us...we fall in love, we stand outside laughing...we celebrate even a trace of the wonderful stuff.
Nice job, I loved this,
Carol

 Comment Written 15-Nov-2015

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reply by the author on 15-Nov-2015

Thanks so much Carol for the reading and review! Much appreciated.
So glad to hear the intended emotional impact came through--the joy of rain especially for those in desert or near desert climates. There is an Israeli dance called "Mayim" or "rain"! Sure this is true for other desert cultures.
Thanks again for stopping by.
Stacia

Comment from Teri7

Excellent

This is a really good contest entry you have penned. They just made a mess with them trying to text each other. lol I enjoyed this entry very much. Good luck my friend. hugs, Teri

 Comment Written 14-Nov-2015

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reply by the author on 15-Nov-2015

Thanks so much Teri for the reading.and review! Much appreciated.
Great point that texting is often not the best means of communication! The more direct the better in most cases although that's just what people don't do Lol.
Thanks again for stopping by.
Have a great week.
Stacia

Comment from Rosalyne

Exceptional

Hi, Stacia.
This is great! I really like how you've shown the story from Kevin's point of view. Your character development is excellent. I could feel his mix of emotions, transferring from annoyance, impatience, concern and return back to annoyance at Sharona's lateness. You showed this so well.

The build-up to the storm and the release of tension really worked, especially pairing it with the friction between Kevin and Sharona the previous night.

I burst out laughing at the street mix-up. This is priceless and so fitting.
Excellent addition to Sharona's journey.

Wonderful entry!
Bye
Rosalyne :)

 Comment Written 14-Nov-2015

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reply by the author on 14-Nov-2015

Thanks so much for the reading and review, Rosalyne! Much appreciated.
Glad it worked for you--I'm really happy that to hear that the rainstorm and tension and release comes through--what I was aiming for:)
I do owe a lot to Led Zeppelin for the story! "Fool in the Rain," if you don't know the song, is this fabulous mix of slow jazz and an upbeat samba riff, simulating the rainfall. I could hear it in my head as I wrote:)
Thank you again! Looking forward to seeing you in chat.
Stacia

Comment from Eric1

Excellent

Hi Stacia, this is a really good entry for this particular competition, a truly wonderful feelgood story that I really enjoyed reading, they were like any other young couple but your brilliant words and story added a lot more,
I wish you the very best of luck in the contest my friend.

 Comment Written 14-Nov-2015

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reply by the author on 14-Nov-2015

Eric, thanks so much for the reading and review! Much appreciated. Yes boy loves girl-loses girl--finds her again--eternal story! You have to find your own twist:) A text message is the contemporary twist!
Thanks so much for stopping by and your kind words.

reply by Eric1 on 15-Nov-2015

You are welcome my friend.

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A well written story. The couple are suppose to meet at a house they want to rent, after s fight and text messages and rain they discover they don't want to move to the suburbs. Two fools in the rain

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 Comment Written 14-Nov-2015

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reply by the author on 14-Nov-2015

LOL Sandra--yes TWO fools in the rain, hadn't thought of that! Thanks for the reading and review, much appreciated:)
Thanks for stopping by!