cocaine and psychedelics
contest entry (see author notes)52 total reviews
Comment from azwildrosa
This is a powerful peom. I avoided reading but in the end it grabbed me. Addition has power, a control many of us beleive we can control. In reality, we do not. Thank you for this great read. Best wishes to you in the booths.
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2015
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This is a powerful peom. I avoided reading but in the end it grabbed me. Addition has power, a control many of us beleive we can control. In reality, we do not. Thank you for this great read. Best wishes to you in the booths.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2015
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thank you so much for taking the time to read a poem that you almost skipped. i appreciate you reviw. have a merry Christmas :-))
Comment from Helena Frances
Powerful, clever, honest, painful, sad, real, desperate, necessary,
unwanted, clear, curious.
I hesitated before reading this--my life has a loved one in recovery. There is hope, and serenity:)
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reply by the author on 09-Dec-2015
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Powerful, clever, honest, painful, sad, real, desperate, necessary,
unwanted, clear, curious.
I hesitated before reading this--my life has a loved one in recovery. There is hope, and serenity:)
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2015
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Thank you for reading the poem. recovery is the most amazing experience. I am so blessed to have lived through the hell and come out the other side. God is the only lasting solution to addiction. of course , this is true for every living human being as well. people in recovery have outlets for growth that others do not have . i love recovery meetings ! have a merry Christmas :-))
Comment from c_lucas
It is foolish to give up your independence and become a slave to drugs. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a good read.
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2015
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It is foolish to give up your independence and become a slave to drugs. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a good read.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2015
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But for the grace of God there goes I. Curiosity can lead to addiction before one knows it. No one sets out to be an addict. Poor choices and poor mentor guidance. have a merry Christmas :-))
Comment from CEO2020
Excellent depiction of cocaine dependency in poetry. Your words bring the reader into the sight and emotions of dependency and the horrors it bring. I m the voice of one who sipped but did not swallow.
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2015
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Excellent depiction of cocaine dependency in poetry. Your words bring the reader into the sight and emotions of dependency and the horrors it bring. I m the voice of one who sipped but did not swallow.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2015
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Thank you for taking the time to review the poem. the poem was fun to write but the subject is deadly serious. have a merry Christmas and a good night :-))
Comment from mermaids
You have a vivid use of words that captures the power and control this drug has on people. A coal eyed snowman in the dead of winter is a marvelous line that captures the impact of this drug. I also like the free verse structure and your use of color in the fourth verse.
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2015
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You have a vivid use of words that captures the power and control this drug has on people. A coal eyed snowman in the dead of winter is a marvelous line that captures the impact of this drug. I also like the free verse structure and your use of color in the fourth verse.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2015
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Thank you so much for your kind review. it was a fun poem to write . however, the subject is deadly serious. have a merry Christmas :-))
Comment from Bill Schott
Wow! That poem was rife with metaphor and vaunted verbiage that effectively takes the reader through the gauntlet and eventual demise of the addict. Nicely put together.
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2015
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Wow! That poem was rife with metaphor and vaunted verbiage that effectively takes the reader through the gauntlet and eventual demise of the addict. Nicely put together.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2015
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Thank you so much for your kind review. the poem was fun to write. however, the subject is deadly serious. merry Christmas :-))
Comment from Leineco
You've done an excellent job of juxtaposing the highs and lows of addiction -
from the soaring elation of escaping to the plunge into ruination.
Everything seems so fairy tale smooth and eider cloud fluffy when you are using, but the price escalates with every taste, and the crash that's inevitable turns oozing pain into paroxysms of agony.
Excellent approach to the prompt :-)
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2015
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You've done an excellent job of juxtaposing the highs and lows of addiction -
from the soaring elation of escaping to the plunge into ruination.
Everything seems so fairy tale smooth and eider cloud fluffy when you are using, but the price escalates with every taste, and the crash that's inevitable turns oozing pain into paroxysms of agony.
Excellent approach to the prompt :-)
Comment Written 08-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2015
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Thank you so much for the kind and encouraging review. The poem was fun to write. however, the subject is deadly serious. have a merry Christmas. :-))
Comment from Glasstruth
Wow! What a presentation. The colors are not distracting. Adds to the illusions of being high. Like the free wheeling movement of the lines. Great enjambment throughout. Awesome! Les
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2015
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Wow! What a presentation. The colors are not distracting. Adds to the illusions of being high. Like the free wheeling movement of the lines. Great enjambment throughout. Awesome! Les
Comment Written 08-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2015
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Thanks for the encouraging review. i am glad yo liked it. i enjoyed writing the poem. however, the subject is deadly serious :-))
Comment from robyn corum
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This was a wonderfully fun poem about a horribly addictive item. I think this piece should do very well in the contest.
The colors add a neat and dramatic touch on the black background and help to make the 'story' come to life. A master-stroke! Good luck!
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2015
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ooooOOooOooo...
This was a wonderfully fun poem about a horribly addictive item. I think this piece should do very well in the contest.
The colors add a neat and dramatic touch on the black background and help to make the 'story' come to life. A master-stroke! Good luck!
Comment Written 08-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2015
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Thank you for your very kind and encouraging review. i enjoyed writing the poem. however, the subject is deadly serious.have a merry Christmas :-))
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
This is a very, very powerful piece and drags the reader into this world of darkness and pain. A brief alleviation does nothing for the recuperation before the descent back into hell.
Great write.
GMG
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2015
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Hi there,
This is a very, very powerful piece and drags the reader into this world of darkness and pain. A brief alleviation does nothing for the recuperation before the descent back into hell.
Great write.
GMG
Comment Written 08-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2015
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Thank you for taking the time to review the poem. the poem was fun to write but the subject is deadly serious. have a merry Christmas and a good night :-))
