Comment from Tessa Kay

Excellent

I don't know too much about Tankas, but I like the romantic and peaceful atmosphere you've created in your poem. Well done.
All the best in the contest:)

 Comment Written 12-Oct-2015

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reply by the author on 12-Oct-2015

Thank you very much Tessa for a lovely review and comments recmy Tanka I am glad you thought it was well done and conveyed a romantic feel. Thanks for your best wishes also Cheers Christine😃

Comment from Pam (respa)

Excellent

-Good image for your poem.
-You have the correct format.
-Good subject and use of imagery.
-It begins well with "Sleeping peacefully."
-The middle line changes the direction of the poem.
-The last line is a good conclusion:
"Passion rises our lips meet"
-I would consider putting a comma after rises.

 Comment Written 12-Oct-2015

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reply by the author on 12-Oct-2015

Thank you respa1 . As always your reviews are one of my yardsticks so Thank you for a great review and rating for my effort. and I am so pleased you have picked up on my changes ( middle line ) I did do a little research on Tanka before I wrote this so I tried to ensure I met the requirements. and I will put in the comma, Always enjoy the challenge but your comments are alway important to read Cheers Christine😃

reply by Pam (respa) on 12-Oct-2015

You are very welcome, as always. I appreciate your meaningful replies. I am glad you find the reviews of value for you, as I enjoy doing them.

Comment from OnyxSapphire78

Excellent

Great entry for the contest! You paint a very romantic passionate picture with just a few words. Nicely done. The artwork works very well with your poem also. Good luck to you and happy writing!

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 Comment Written 12-Oct-2015

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reply by the author on 12-Oct-2015

Thank you very much OnyxSapphire78 for taking the time to read and give me feedback for my first Tanka I am glad you found the passion in my few words and Yes I liked this artwork too and hoped it would work well with this .Cheers for your good luck also Christine😃