A Book of Love
Viewing comments for Chapter 23 "Mirror Image"Assorted poems of love
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Comment from c_lucas
Aim for the groin, the center of all your heartaches. Pickled, it can do no more harm. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very innocent read.
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2015
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Aim for the groin, the center of all your heartaches. Pickled, it can do no more harm. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very innocent read.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2015
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C, thanks for the advice. I did consider it...but a good ol fashion slap across the face sufficed :)
Thanks also for the read and review :)
Always,
Missy
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You're welcome, Missy. Charlie
Comment from G.B. Smith
Oh sweet baby, this is so sad
It is true from what I know about your life
however I do understand. My last marriage was like that and I finally had to leave her.
Have a safe and wonderful week
Bear
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2015
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Oh sweet baby, this is so sad
It is true from what I know about your life
however I do understand. My last marriage was like that and I finally had to leave her.
Have a safe and wonderful week
Bear
Comment Written 12-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2015
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:( Bear. I want to thank you, for all your support since I came to FanStory. I appreciate everything, honestly.
Missy
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You are welcome. The feeling is mutual
Bear
Comment from mfowler
You've nailed it for me with this one, Missy.
The poem has an interesting premise, the mirrored opposites.
You develop the imagery throughout and remain consistent to the theme. Hence, nothing seems out of place and all works towards the promotion of the idea that you just don't fit together. The last two lines reveal the choice the voice makes when she can no longer accept a bloke who only loves himself. And your finish is a killer. You offer him 'forgiveness' as your parting gift. Perfect.
No worries with extraneous wording and your punctuation does teh job consistently throughout. I don't often notice the niceties like the design, but your attractive bookend patterns on that lovely chocolate brown background, complemented by the white text, is very stylish. Lots of reasons for a sixer. Excellent.
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2015
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You've nailed it for me with this one, Missy.
The poem has an interesting premise, the mirrored opposites.
You develop the imagery throughout and remain consistent to the theme. Hence, nothing seems out of place and all works towards the promotion of the idea that you just don't fit together. The last two lines reveal the choice the voice makes when she can no longer accept a bloke who only loves himself. And your finish is a killer. You offer him 'forgiveness' as your parting gift. Perfect.
No worries with extraneous wording and your punctuation does teh job consistently throughout. I don't often notice the niceties like the design, but your attractive bookend patterns on that lovely chocolate brown background, complemented by the white text, is very stylish. Lots of reasons for a sixer. Excellent.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2015
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I am squealing like a lil school girl here, after reading this review from you, Mark. I read it and changed it several times before posting. Always, in my mind where your words...no extra's. God, I am so happy now!!! Big ol hug and smooch on the cheek for you, Teach :)
Missy xx
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My pleasure, Missy. You've been slowly moving towards this and I didn't want to rate your work exceptional till I thought it was. That way you'd keep striving and believe me when I sent it. The test will now be the kind of feedback other reviewers give you. Look for reviewers who review your poem, not just nice things that are so general you haven't a clue why they like them.
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I am walking on a cloud now...trust me. I'll come down in a day or so...lol
Comment from JanPerry
I can sympathise with the lying. I had it too, hate it.
People like their privacy and that's why they lie.
Presentation is outstanding, keep this up. Lovely.
It is spoken honestly and with passion too.
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2015
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I can sympathise with the lying. I had it too, hate it.
People like their privacy and that's why they lie.
Presentation is outstanding, keep this up. Lovely.
It is spoken honestly and with passion too.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2015
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Hi, Jan. Thanks for the understanding review :) We live and learn...sometimes through pain and disappointment.
Always,
Missy
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Mine was omission, to me that's the worst part of lying (not telling me something)
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Agreed
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, Missy
_ So true, turn that fella loose.
_ Many years ago, I was married to a cheater.
_ Best move of my life was to take a hike.
_ I'm glad you moved on as well.
_ Excellent write.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*:*)
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2015
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Hi, Missy
_ So true, turn that fella loose.
_ Many years ago, I was married to a cheater.
_ Best move of my life was to take a hike.
_ I'm glad you moved on as well.
_ Excellent write.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*:*)
Comment Written 12-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2015
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Damn, hon. Mine was a womanizer and cheater. One was never enough...who am I kidding 3,4 or 5 was never enough for him. Grrr!!
Thanks hon for the review and heart to heart. :) xx
Always,
Missy
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- I walked in on him and my 'best' friend--indeed.
- I stayed awhile so the boys wouldn't have to go through a divorce.
_ When they left, so did Momma! (*<*)
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Mine was my neighbor...I made a decision to stay...but never trusted again...He died in 2004.
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-LOL---Mine died in 94, about 2 years after I left.
-Jeesh, could be talk. (*>*)
-Grrrr, I tried to answer your PM, but the system wouldn't let me. Anyway, yes, if you don't get the postings for someone, I've found if you bookmark something, you'll get them.
_ FanStory Gremlins, perhaps.
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I need you to send me the pic for challenge...the dang gremlins got in my email too!!! lol
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It helps to write something BEFORE I send this.
I will send you the jpeg right now.
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LMAO....OMG...YEAH!!!
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Just sent it to you via email.
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Big (((HUG)))
Got it, thanks a million :)
Comment from Dean Kuch
Well, I have had it happen to me, and very recently, unfortunately, Missy, so I feel fully qualified to comment on this rather lovely poem you've so carefully crafted here.
It's often said that opposites attract--and they do...but only for a little while. Once the newness and initial excitement wears off--which it always does, eventually--you'd better have something far more substantial than a physical or chemical attraction to fall back on. Something like true, unyielding--I'd give you both of my lungs if you needed them to breathe--type of love. Without it, those burning embers start to smolder and will eventually be extinguished by angst, heartbreak and the tears of sadness.
Beautifully done, Missy. This one really hit close to home for me...
Always with respect,
~Dean :}
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reply by the author on 12-Oct-2015
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Well, I have had it happen to me, and very recently, unfortunately, Missy, so I feel fully qualified to comment on this rather lovely poem you've so carefully crafted here.
It's often said that opposites attract--and they do...but only for a little while. Once the newness and initial excitement wears off--which it always does, eventually--you'd better have something far more substantial than a physical or chemical attraction to fall back on. Something like true, unyielding--I'd give you both of my lungs if you needed them to breathe--type of love. Without it, those burning embers start to smolder and will eventually be extinguished by angst, heartbreak and the tears of sadness.
Beautifully done, Missy. This one really hit close to home for me...
Always with respect,
~Dean :}
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Comment Written 12-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2015
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Damn, Dean, I'm sorry, sweetie. It is like a kick in the gut when you come face to face with all of it. I cried til I had no more tears. Now, I am moving forward a lil smarter but also a lot more wary of kindness from some people. Sad, but true.
Always,
Missy
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We learn the hard way sometimes, but the important thing is to learn from our mistakes, and how deceitful some can really be.
You're welcome, Missy...
~Dean
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello,
Beautiful poem about finding out the truth and letting go. I was married to a lier and I was never able to trust him. It was hard to let him go but I finally did it. You have a very good message and the poem is very well written. Good job!
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reply by the author on 12-Oct-2015
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Hello,
Beautiful poem about finding out the truth and letting go. I was married to a lier and I was never able to trust him. It was hard to let him go but I finally did it. You have a very good message and the poem is very well written. Good job!
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Comment Written 11-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2015
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Thanks, Gypsy. For the review and the heart to heart. I feel ya sista!!
Onward and upward, I hope :)
Always,
Missy