A Journey...Darkness to Light
Contest entry35 total reviews
Comment from happykat4
This is a very clear journey for a person who has had such a devastating loss. First the drugs masks the hurt for a time, then the state of drunkenness yet this is not enough. The breakdown then the abyss-hope gone. The reach out to God because your lost. PLEASE hear her..and He does! With Him holding you close in his arms, you asked and he answered. He walks with you every day and you find purpose once more. Beautiful poem. Blessings. Kat
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2015
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This is a very clear journey for a person who has had such a devastating loss. First the drugs masks the hurt for a time, then the state of drunkenness yet this is not enough. The breakdown then the abyss-hope gone. The reach out to God because your lost. PLEASE hear her..and He does! With Him holding you close in his arms, you asked and he answered. He walks with you every day and you find purpose once more. Beautiful poem. Blessings. Kat
Comment Written 03-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2015
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Thank you for taking the time to read the poem and commenting. Your thoughts and input are greatly appreciated. Have a good night): Thanks much for the 6th star!):
Comment from visionary1234
This is lovely, Pierre! It takes a special skill to write in rhyming couplets and NOT sound forced, but you pull it off magnificently AND move us at the same time. Good luck!
:)Sharyn
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2015
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This is lovely, Pierre! It takes a special skill to write in rhyming couplets and NOT sound forced, but you pull it off magnificently AND move us at the same time. Good luck!
:)Sharyn
Comment Written 02-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2015
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Thank you for taking the time to read the poem and commenting. Your thoughts and input are greatly appreciated. Have a good night):
Comment from c_lucas
When a child passes owe, a part of the parent's soul goes too. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. Good luck in your contest.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2015
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When a child passes owe, a part of the parent's soul goes too. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. Good luck in your contest.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2015
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Thank you for your kind words. I appreciate your input. Have a good night):
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You're welcome, Pierre. Charlie
Comment from Unspoken94
They'll probably kick this 6 out and it's my last one, but Pierre, this poem is a 6! Most of my career was counseling children and teens and young adults who were in the throes of a terminal illness. This included their families. I think I can get a sense of where this person is coming from. We don't bury our children. It's our children who are supposed to bury us. The grief of a child is not the same as the grief of a parent, spouse or friend. You demonstrated that in this poem. I value the ending which is one of hope and wholeness. -Bill
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2015
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They'll probably kick this 6 out and it's my last one, but Pierre, this poem is a 6! Most of my career was counseling children and teens and young adults who were in the throes of a terminal illness. This included their families. I think I can get a sense of where this person is coming from. We don't bury our children. It's our children who are supposed to bury us. The grief of a child is not the same as the grief of a parent, spouse or friend. You demonstrated that in this poem. I value the ending which is one of hope and wholeness. -Bill
Comment Written 02-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2015
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Thank you very much for your kind review. Thank you for the 6th star too. I'm quite sure that I could not handle the counseling with which you were involved
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We served the whole family through their nighmare and one of the expectations was that the primary persons in that child's life were to commit to counseling for a year following. It was tough but we never lost a client. All the best.
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thank you for the reply. i hope you have a very good night):
Comment from syrhey
Wow, this was deep. This poem is very emotional and powerful to me because I am a mother of 2 daughters and I can't even fathom the thought of losing any of them. My condolences and very powerful poem.
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2015
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Wow, this was deep. This poem is very emotional and powerful to me because I am a mother of 2 daughters and I can't even fathom the thought of losing any of them. My condolences and very powerful poem.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2015
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Thank you for taking the time to read the poem and commenting. Your thoughts and input are greatly appreciated. Have a good night):
Comment from P1
wow what a heart stopping strong emotional
piece of poetry. was captivated by it from
start to finish you presented it really well
well wortht the read
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2015
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wow what a heart stopping strong emotional
piece of poetry. was captivated by it from
start to finish you presented it really well
well wortht the read
Comment Written 02-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2015
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Thank you for taking the time to read the poem and commenting.
Comment from Janet Foor
So sorry for your loss. The loss of a child is a horrific experience. My neighbor's son drowned when he was 8 and the grieving was enormous for the family and friends. The last stanza gives one hope that this parent found comfort in his faith.
Excellent rhyme and internal rhyme. Good use of alliteration throughout.
Well done.
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2015
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So sorry for your loss. The loss of a child is a horrific experience. My neighbor's son drowned when he was 8 and the grieving was enormous for the family and friends. The last stanza gives one hope that this parent found comfort in his faith.
Excellent rhyme and internal rhyme. Good use of alliteration throughout.
Well done.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2015
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Thank you for taking the time to read the poem and commenting. Your thoughts and input are greatly appreciated. Have a good night):
Comment from Bryana
This is very sad, I hope is not biographical.
I love these lines...
Don't give up, don't go away
I still have plans for you today
Many are los in bleak decay
Who do not know I am The Way
I wish you good luck in the contest and a nice weekend
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2015
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This is very sad, I hope is not biographical.
I love these lines...
Don't give up, don't go away
I still have plans for you today
Many are los in bleak decay
Who do not know I am The Way
I wish you good luck in the contest and a nice weekend
Comment Written 02-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2015
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Thank you for your kind words. I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment. have a good night!):
Comment from OLA THOMAS
This was very done very darkly at the beginning and I was grieved but the last stanza lifted my spirit with the entrance of His light. His light takes away all form of grieve and darkness around us. Happy to see this in the poem.
ola thomas
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2015
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This was very done very darkly at the beginning and I was grieved but the last stanza lifted my spirit with the entrance of His light. His light takes away all form of grieve and darkness around us. Happy to see this in the poem.
ola thomas
Comment Written 01-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2015
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Thank you for your kind review. i appreciate your input
Comment from Benjamin Valencia
Hi..A strong and shocking comeback that would have been hard to do for the common man. The spiritual strangulation part was neatly defined. Cheers.
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2015
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Hi..A strong and shocking comeback that would have been hard to do for the common man. The spiritual strangulation part was neatly defined. Cheers.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2015
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Thank you for taking time to read the poem. I appreciate your review
