Comment from Earl Corp

Excellent

I entered a poem titled Chamberlain that was also disqualified, mine because i entered a rhyming poem into a free verse contest. I feel your pain. I liked this poem. It rhymed, made sense and it entertained me.

 Comment Written 02-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 02-Nov-2018

Thanks Earl. Nice meeting you. Have to look for your stuff. Appreciate your great review.

Comment from Sasha

Excellent

Great work with this and very clever too. I had the same problem with my keyboard but never thought of clear nail polish. Smart tech to come up with that. I have several bottles of clear and will paint my keys in the morning. Thanks for the tip. Best of luck in the contest too,

 Comment Written 02-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 02-Nov-2018

No Contest luv that is long gone. I was disqualified as the contest was not allowing for rhyme. I was glad the Revive Certificate came up on this oldie that has pretty well been changed from the original and new verses added.

Comment from Ben Colder

Excellent

Ten cents. Good photo. Now I know what you look like, gloves and all. LOL. I never found anything wrong with the way this is written. Thanks for sharing, Bro.

 Comment Written 10-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 10-Sep-2015

Thanks Bro, the original is far better. I will put it up after the competition finishes. I tried not to rhyme but oh well. Working really hard on my autobiography to get it up in a Revive Certificate next Month. More pictures and more dialogue as many haved asked for.

Comment from RonCraig

Excellent

Hello Geoff,
Clever remedy my friend. You must be a better typist than I am as I would only need to cover one finger on each hand to save my keyboard letters. I kinda stalled in my third book but check for friends post along the way.

Ron

 Comment Written 10-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 10-Sep-2015

Thanks Ron this was a failure, mate. You know me hard not to rhyme. I have a better version of this I may go ahead and put up. Working real hard to get my Autobiography up again with more pictures and more dialogue. I thought I accidentally put the first chapter up again too soon. But seems maybe not Sigh.

reply by RonCraig on 11-Sep-2015

Hey Geoff,
So why not try your hand at fiction? Tell us a short story?????? The sky's the limit, you and Louise are on a trip, married a couple of years without any physical limitations and happen to find a letter in an envelope on the street. There is no address on the envelope but the information in the letter is very important and you have to track down the sender or intended receiver by what's in the letter.

Maybe the letter is for a daughter he can't locate but is trying to find her before he dies and mentions the bank where the key in the envelope will open the safety deposit box. "?????

OK I will mind my own business, but I think you and Louise could have some fun with it.

Your mate,
Ron


Ron

Comment from judiverse

Excellent

This has a lot of humor, especially with the wording. Good job of identifying the problem and the solution. Glad the gloves work. This really doesn't fit as blank verse, as in it the meter needs to be iambic pentameter (10 syllables per line). Your count varies from line, so that's why it really isn't blank verse. Bothersome rules! This is fun but call it something else. judi

 Comment Written 10-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 10-Sep-2015

hi Judi I know it doesn't qualify. I had better rhyming lines and I may go with that after this. I tried hard not to rhyme but you know me. My other version is much better. Not worth anything either, though.

reply by judiverse on 10-Sep-2015

It's hard to get the iambic pentameter right. It's a fun poem, anyway. judi

Comment from w.j.debi

Excellent

Those keys may disappear, but they never move so even if the labels are gone you can keep on wiring. I like the humor and the meter of you poem. I don't know how many others face this dilemma, but at work, my keyboard has several blank keys. I had not considered gloves. I wonder....

 Comment Written 09-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 09-Sep-2015

Thanks friend, new friend I think. I have failed in the contest attempt at a blank poem. I actually had it nicely rhymed in the original which may go ahead and put up generally later. Appreciate your review.

reply by w.j.debi on 09-Sep-2015

I look forward to the rhymed version.

Comment from Leineco

Good

you definitely made me chuckle LOL -
no matter how far we advance. . .the little things still plague us!
and the clever figure out a way around it ;-)

BUT

You entered this in the Blank Verse Contest...which has as it strictest rule:
consistent iambic meter (usually pentameter (10 alternating beats of soft and hard), though tetra (8 beat) or hexa (12 beat) are sometimes penned.

I give the poem/concept a 5 star rating. . .but sadly, have to subtract one star for not meeting the contest requirements.



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 Comment Written 09-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 09-Sep-2015

Well don't subtract but I am not going to succeed anyway. I did bomb out I had written this with much more rhyme and I may go back and do it again with original wording. Thanks anyway.

Comment from ProSongwriter

Excellent

Hi Geoff ....

Well, look it it this way ... just imagine all the fun you'll have trying to figure what key goes to service! Or maybe ... you have magical fingers!

Whatever ... twas a joy to read ... loved the muted humo(u)r! Good luck in the contest!

Best to you, my friend!

Alan

 Comment Written 09-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 09-Sep-2015

Hi Alan I know it does not qualify should have left it how I created it originally fully rhymed right through. Duh. Thanks mate.

Comment from Selina Stambi

Excellent

Hello Geoff,

Great pic! What a perplexing problem, and wonderful that you found a solution to it.

Nice aabb rhyming quatrains.

I'm rating on my enjoyment of the poem. HOWEVER

this is not a blank verse poem, unfortunately. Blank verse is unrhymed iambic pentameter. I.e. Lines of five feet with a weak/strong beat in each foot, and NO rhyme (I know it seems awfully complicated, doesn't it?)

This poem won't qualify as an entry for the blank verse contest, I'm afraid, unless you re-write it accordingly.

Best wishes. Hope it works out.

Have a great rest of the week.

Sonali



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 Comment Written 09-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 09-Sep-2015

Thanks Sis YES too complicated. I even changed it from the completely rhymed original I had. Trying to build up the member dollars ho hum.