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Comment from Margaret Snowdon
What could be better when you go into the unknown - joining the airforce - along with your buddies. Sounds as if you were quite a trio. At least you saw some of the world outside of Texas, where your friend stayed.
Been to San Antonio a few times - was there last April after our grand-daighter's wedding in Texas.
Indent >>>>The three of us fancied
a beautiful young lady BY the name of Betty
Most enjoyable, Jay - bring on the next part.
Margaret
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2015
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What could be better when you go into the unknown - joining the airforce - along with your buddies. Sounds as if you were quite a trio. At least you saw some of the world outside of Texas, where your friend stayed.
Been to San Antonio a few times - was there last April after our grand-daighter's wedding in Texas.
Indent >>>>The three of us fancied
a beautiful young lady BY the name of Betty
Most enjoyable, Jay - bring on the next part.
Margaret
Comment Written 04-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2015
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Thanks, Margaret, for reading. I'm so pleased you enjoyed it. I'll take care of that indent thing. The other was intentional. I've seen it written many times without the "by" (mostly by first person narrated hardboiled mystery types). I usually do it when I try to make my voice casual. I'll keep it in mind to rethink that.
Comment from Ulla
This is a good read and very well written. I had finished reading before I'd even realised. I wish I had a six but have to be content with five. I'm looking forward to reading on. All the best. Ulla
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2015
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This is a good read and very well written. I had finished reading before I'd even realised. I wish I had a six but have to be content with five. I'm looking forward to reading on. All the best. Ulla
Comment Written 04-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2015
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Thank you, Ulla. Don't worry about the six. This late in the week I didn't really expect any. I appreciate your reading and enjoying it.
Comment from jmdg1954
Wow... this is entertaining and interesting that I want to continue reading.
Well written (of course) in a way that hooks the reader from the start.
In the manner its presented also helped with the reading.
Nicely done. John
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2015
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Wow... this is entertaining and interesting that I want to continue reading.
Well written (of course) in a way that hooks the reader from the start.
In the manner its presented also helped with the reading.
Nicely done. John
Comment Written 04-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2015
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Thank you so much, John. I'm happy you enjoyed this and appreciate your compliments. I'll post the conclusion next week.
Comment from Pantygynt
A fascinating autobiographical account. It looks pretty much as if your services operate much the same as ours. Breaking old relationships apart. Now I wonder what part Betty will play in all of this. It's well written (I wouldn't expect it to be otherwise) and keeps one turning the pages, metaphorically of course because you don't on a computer.
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2015
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A fascinating autobiographical account. It looks pretty much as if your services operate much the same as ours. Breaking old relationships apart. Now I wonder what part Betty will play in all of this. It's well written (I wouldn't expect it to be otherwise) and keeps one turning the pages, metaphorically of course because you don't on a computer.
Comment Written 04-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2015
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I'm so pleased you enjoyed this. I'll be posting the next segment next week. They're short, which accounts for the large number of responders I'm getting.
Comment from Shirley McLain
I like the beginning of this story but I want to read the rest of it right now. Can you tell I'm impatient at times? You did a great job at holding my interest. Shirley
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2015
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I like the beginning of this story but I want to read the rest of it right now. Can you tell I'm impatient at times? You did a great job at holding my interest. Shirley
Comment Written 04-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2015
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Hey, Shirley. You thrill me with talk like that. I will be posting the next part next week. In the meantime, thanks for enjoying this.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
You served only four years? At least you got to travel overseas, not a good thing to be doing now, however. How much money did you actually have? :)
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2015
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You served only four years? At least you got to travel overseas, not a good thing to be doing now, however. How much money did you actually have? :)
Comment Written 04-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2015
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I have no idea how much money we had. I know my dad gave me (I believe) twenty bucks and, knowing Marty, his folks gave him some as well. Then with the sandwiches and eggs. Oh and I had another source of income I'll get into next couple of posts.
Comment from Sasha
Although coming into this late, I got a great kick out of it. I love your train of thought, a lot like mine, a leads to be and occasionally then do d and so on. I liked this section: I often snickered to each other the suggestion that O'Dwyer would've loved to have taken any one of us into that closet...I anticipated you would say something about O'Dwyer's book in the closet, but this caught me off guard and gave me a good laugh. I look forward to the next post.
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2015
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Although coming into this late, I got a great kick out of it. I love your train of thought, a lot like mine, a leads to be and occasionally then do d and so on. I liked this section: I often snickered to each other the suggestion that O'Dwyer would've loved to have taken any one of us into that closet...I anticipated you would say something about O'Dwyer's book in the closet, but this caught me off guard and gave me a good laugh. I look forward to the next post.
Comment Written 04-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2015
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You know, it just dawned on me, I should be using pseudonyms. Although he'd be in his eighty's now, so ... well, what's done's done. Anyway, thanks for reading. I'm glad you got a kick out of it. I'll be posting part two next week.
Comment from royowen
Loved this article you wrote, very classically a recollection and biographical account of reflective youthful paths, displays the way youth plays out, chaos and confusion, I nearly joined the military in my teens, I failed to make the cut, but my friend served for 12 years, my life continued in comic form most, me taking wrong paths, blundering through life, and God seemingly making some sort of order out of it, yours doesn't sound much different! Well done, Jay, it was like looking in a mirror, good scribing, blessings, Roy.
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2015
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Loved this article you wrote, very classically a recollection and biographical account of reflective youthful paths, displays the way youth plays out, chaos and confusion, I nearly joined the military in my teens, I failed to make the cut, but my friend served for 12 years, my life continued in comic form most, me taking wrong paths, blundering through life, and God seemingly making some sort of order out of it, yours doesn't sound much different! Well done, Jay, it was like looking in a mirror, good scribing, blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 04-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2015
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From your autobiographical account I read here from some source, God took you by the collar and gave you a good shake. You came back from places that, thank the good Lord, I'd never been -- or if I visited there, I got out soon enough. Your trials were much more noteworthy.
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Thank you Jay, your observations promote you. And if it wasn't for God, my life would be disastrous, I owe Him big time. Perceptive sod aren't you? It's great knowing you Jay, Roy.
Comment from doggymad
Loved this one. You have penned such a fun picture of the three lads doing what they do best. Looking forward to following this work
Freda
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2015
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Loved this one. You have penned such a fun picture of the three lads doing what they do best. Looking forward to following this work
Freda
Comment Written 04-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2015
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Thank you so much, Freda. I'm glad you chose to jump aboard. Next segment in the coming week.
Comment from watergirl
This is a delightfully told story that just rolls off the pen of the writer, like an enthusiastic friend telling you a story over coffee. The reader is glued to the narrator eagerly awaiting the next bit; "tell me, tell me. !!" Can't wait to hear more.
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2015
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This is a delightfully told story that just rolls off the pen of the writer, like an enthusiastic friend telling you a story over coffee. The reader is glued to the narrator eagerly awaiting the next bit; "tell me, tell me. !!" Can't wait to hear more.
Comment Written 04-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2015
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You couldn't compliment a writer more than to say that. Sometimes the hardest things to write are what seem so casual and conversational.