Things Change
contest entry45 total reviews
Comment from Pantygynt
Easy to see why this ran out a winner. There can't be a man in the house who can't remember going through this awkward metamorphosis in his younger days. I'm 74 now and I had no little brother to confide in but I can still remember the awkwardness of it all as clear as if it were yesterday. No girls, it's not painful and we don't have put up with half the problems you have every month, but it's still kind of, well, awkward when it happens and you don't properly understand it.
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Easy to see why this ran out a winner. There can't be a man in the house who can't remember going through this awkward metamorphosis in his younger days. I'm 74 now and I had no little brother to confide in but I can still remember the awkwardness of it all as clear as if it were yesterday. No girls, it's not painful and we don't have put up with half the problems you have every month, but it's still kind of, well, awkward when it happens and you don't properly understand it.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2015
Comment from Nosha17
You sound like me, talking and thinking in rhyme-it won't stop. Good touch of humour and nice light-hearted approach to puberty-a difficult issue to discuss in the home between parents and kids. Well expressed views on the subject-congratulations on your win. Faye
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You sound like me, talking and thinking in rhyme-it won't stop. Good touch of humour and nice light-hearted approach to puberty-a difficult issue to discuss in the home between parents and kids. Well expressed views on the subject-congratulations on your win. Faye
Comment Written 17-Jul-2015
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Touchy topic and I'm sure it troubles boys a lot. I love the idea of a big brother telling his younger one about all this stuff, and I think he might do it better than Dad.
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Touchy topic and I'm sure it troubles boys a lot. I love the idea of a big brother telling his younger one about all this stuff, and I think he might do it better than Dad.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2015
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
Not only was this a very fun piece, it was very cleverly written and constructed. The internal rhyming in each section was spot on and added to the enjoyment of the piece.
I like poetry in prose language and this went extreme!
Nice one and good luck.
GMG
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Hi there,
Not only was this a very fun piece, it was very cleverly written and constructed. The internal rhyming in each section was spot on and added to the enjoyment of the piece.
I like poetry in prose language and this went extreme!
Nice one and good luck.
GMG
Comment Written 17-Jul-2015
Comment from The Mom/DarleneThomson
Very humorous way of explaining puberty. I wish you well in the contest. You keep rhyming because I like your style. I like your artwork and might spy it for a while. Best wishes on a job well done.
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Very humorous way of explaining puberty. I wish you well in the contest. You keep rhyming because I like your style. I like your artwork and might spy it for a while. Best wishes on a job well done.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2015
Comment from abbasjoy
This is a funny account of a factual situation. How many of us can forget the awkward moment when our parent, usually the mother if her daughter who needs to know.
You account is well told from the older brother's perspective, and what makes it so humorous is that the younger brother doesn't have a clue what his brother is saying and really doesn't much care either.
Well done, rhyming and all.
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This is a funny account of a factual situation. How many of us can forget the awkward moment when our parent, usually the mother if her daughter who needs to know.
You account is well told from the older brother's perspective, and what makes it so humorous is that the younger brother doesn't have a clue what his brother is saying and really doesn't much care either.
Well done, rhyming and all.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2015
Comment from justjo66
Great entry for this prompt and contest. Your story is worthy of keeping to
read to any boy going through puberty. Humor was used very well and your
descriptive language right on the mark. Good luck in the contest.
Jo
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2015
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Great entry for this prompt and contest. Your story is worthy of keeping to
read to any boy going through puberty. Humor was used very well and your
descriptive language right on the mark. Good luck in the contest.
Jo
Comment Written 16-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2015
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Thank you very much. I'm glad you liked my entry and I appreciate the sixer too.
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
I love this entry. It is cute and sweet. I know kids get so confused when they go through puberty, and it is terribly embarrassing for them. The final promise to help his little brother is precious,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2015
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I love this entry. It is cute and sweet. I know kids get so confused when they go through puberty, and it is terribly embarrassing for them. The final promise to help his little brother is precious,
Rhonda
Comment Written 16-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2015
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Thank you very much, Rhonda. It was a kool contest.
Comment from JaseDR85
Very powerful, and very visual. I loved it rhyming and having a child's viewpoint on things. This played out almost like a poem, but was only a story told from a child's thoughts. Incredible job well done! Keep up the great work!
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2015
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Very powerful, and very visual. I loved it rhyming and having a child's viewpoint on things. This played out almost like a poem, but was only a story told from a child's thoughts. Incredible job well done! Keep up the great work!
Comment Written 16-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2015
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Thank you very much
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is the cutest poetic view of puberty that I've ever read. my doctor when I was growing up gave shots for everything. I hated going. good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2015
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this is the cutest poetic view of puberty that I've ever read. my doctor when I was growing up gave shots for everything. I hated going. good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2015
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Thank you very much