Comment from Ben Colder

Excellent

I would gain ten pounds just by listening to this. Now, I find myself getting up and heading to the Ref. LOL. Thanks for sharing your poem.

 Comment Written 07-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 09-Sep-2015

A tingling remembrance of a co-worker cracked me up never saw anyone so possessed by food. Thanking you for generous rate and captivating thoughts.

Comment from Gert sherwood

Excellent

Hello TPAC
What a fun and such a variety of delights to read

I like your dream
A fog hiding me in white,
soft puffy marshmallows to me, (where is the graham crackers and heresy bar?

As you sway, seeing an array of food selections,
Would make me hungry.

 Comment Written 25-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 25-Aug-2015

Another work holds those sweet-s. Thanking you for generous rate and captivating thoughts in comments.

Comment from Nosha17

Excellent

I guess, food is rather an attractive option of life, we all dream of this ice cream sundaes or yummy fried chicken. Well chosen words and imagery to convey your dreamy thoughts of food. Faye

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 24-Aug-2015

Not really my dream but an observation of co-worker. Thanking you for generous rate and captivating comments about this work.

Comment from anabellapongasi

Excellent

Hi there,
I love the imagery in this that are all pleasing to the senses, especially those that tickle the taste buds! Made me a bit hungry :)Nice dream. A wholesome and enjoyable read.
Blessings,
Anabella

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 24-Aug-2015

Thanking you for generous rate and captivating thoughts about this work

Comment from Tessa Kay

Excellent

What a dream. I'm glad, it ended well. The way you described it, I could feel those berries on my tongue. Nice job.
A couple things you may want to check over:
-a place of mind I (,) no comma -want to stay.
-A special treat filled paradise, - you may consider putting a dash between treat and filled (treat-filled) to connect treat to filled and not to special. Make it clearer.
-exiting dense clouds I see(,) - no comma, the sentence continues straight.

I enjoyed reading this.
:)

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 24-Aug-2015

Great shout out. Thanking you for generous rate and welcomed comments. I will revise.

Comment from petalangela

Excellent

It is said that after the act of sex lol the next best thing isbthebsatupisfaction of being replete on your favourite foods sweets etc
Also dream meaning of food are sexual needs exposed to the un onions mind

Hmmmmmm. No comment

 Comment Written 16-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 16-Jul-2015

Onion for a mind, a good consideration for me to consider not to imply these as your intents, work exposes inners I see thanking you for comments and generous rate

Comment from Michael Ludwinder

Excellent

You have a interesting poem. The imagery is creative and imaginative. The ending through me for a loop but in a good way. Great job - very creative.

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 Comment Written 15-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 16-Jul-2015

Glad you found some delight in this work, I had never seen a person so captured by their thoughts at least dealing with food I do appreciate generous rate