haiku (eerie mist lingers)
Contest entry28 total reviews
Comment from Jeanie Mercer
The mist in the valley and the screech of the owl both are eerie. I was not sure what your seasonal reference is, but I see that "owl" is considered a reference to winter. Good luck to you, Jeanie Mercer
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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The mist in the valley and the screech of the owl both are eerie. I was not sure what your seasonal reference is, but I see that "owl" is considered a reference to winter. Good luck to you, Jeanie Mercer
Comment Written 27-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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Thank you, Jeanie, for your review and comments for my haiku. Also, mist is a season word for autumn. Thank you for spending a few moments to read and share your thoughts. I appreciate your good luck wish, too.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
Very good. Covered all the elements needed for a perfect haiku. Well constructed and wish you success for the competition
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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Very good. Covered all the elements needed for a perfect haiku. Well constructed and wish you success for the competition
Comment Written 27-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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Thank you, Sandra, for taking the time to read and write a review for my haiku. I'm glad you enjoyed it, and thanks for your good luck wish in the contest. Thanks for sharing your comments.
Comment from Amy Greta
Beautifully haunting! There is no need for a picture, as your short, yet vivid poem creates an image all on its own. Eerie mist lingering, gives a mysterious feel as if someone (or something) is stalking you. The owl is the perfect animal to put in this spooky setting, and then having it SCREECH, not simply howl, is chilling and startling! I love it,
~Amy
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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Beautifully haunting! There is no need for a picture, as your short, yet vivid poem creates an image all on its own. Eerie mist lingering, gives a mysterious feel as if someone (or something) is stalking you. The owl is the perfect animal to put in this spooky setting, and then having it SCREECH, not simply howl, is chilling and startling! I love it,
~Amy
Comment Written 27-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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What a great review for my haiku, Amy. Thank you so much for taking the time to read and share your thoughts. I'm delighted you enjoyed the imagery of the poem, and thank you for your kind comments.
Comment from Zue65
You followed perfectly the rules of the writing prompt. I am really amazed at the creative spirit of the poets in this site. It is really difficult for me to be boxed by the words of the prompt and craft something out of a definite and fixed set of words. But the author was successful in doing so. I enjoyed the haiku.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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You followed perfectly the rules of the writing prompt. I am really amazed at the creative spirit of the poets in this site. It is really difficult for me to be boxed by the words of the prompt and craft something out of a definite and fixed set of words. But the author was successful in doing so. I enjoyed the haiku.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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I'm delighted you enjoyed the haiku, nassus, and thank you for taking the time to read, review, and share your kind words. I truly appreciate your comments.
Comment from ellie6
I like how you convey mist in the hills, it's atmospheric. Correct me if I'm wrong, but shouldn't the last line be five syllables? I could see the mist and hear the owl. Very good,
In answer to your reply, I stand corrected.It seems that the traditional haiku form has been superceded. I grant you your other star.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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I like how you convey mist in the hills, it's atmospheric. Correct me if I'm wrong, but shouldn't the last line be five syllables? I could see the mist and hear the owl. Very good,
In answer to your reply, I stand corrected.It seems that the traditional haiku form has been superceded. I grant you your other star.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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Hello Ellie. No, you're wrong. The contest directions require 17 OR LESS syllables with three lines of short-long-short syllable counts...and this haiku meets the requirements. Thank you for reading and sharing your thoughts. I'm glad you enjoyed the imagery. Re the four stars because you thought it wasn't meeting the requirements, or do you feel it needs improvement?
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello If you intended to give me an eerie feeling you did it.
One thing the background of your haiku hides the title of your writing
Change the color of the font) or the color of the background.
Gert
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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Hello If you intended to give me an eerie feeling you did it.
One thing the background of your haiku hides the title of your writing
Change the color of the font) or the color of the background.
Gert
Comment Written 27-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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Thank you for your review and comments, Gert. I strictly use the new FS format, and the title reads fine. You must still be using classic. I'm sorry you can't see the title, but with haiku, the title is always the first line of the poem. Thanks for reading and sharing your thoughts.
You are welcome
Yes I use classic. Like the set up.
Thank you for letting me know the first line of a haiku is in the title.
Gert
Comment from fossilhunter
There is great imagery in this poem which is a pleasure. I am not usually impressed with a haiku. Yours is spot on! I would have given you a 6, but I didn't have any left. Kudos
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reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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There is great imagery in this poem which is a pleasure. I am not usually impressed with a haiku. Yours is spot on! I would have given you a 6, but I didn't have any left. Kudos
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Comment Written 27-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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Thank you for this wonderful review for my haiku, fossilhunter! I'm thrilled you enjoyed the imagery and your kind words are truly worth more than an extra star. Thank you for taking the time to read and share your thoughts.
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi,
_ Nice imagery in your verbiage.
_ Formatting color makes one think of the fog, mist, etc.
_ Good entry. Good luck.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax (*;*)
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reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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Hi,
_ Nice imagery in your verbiage.
_ Formatting color makes one think of the fog, mist, etc.
_ Good entry. Good luck.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax (*;*)
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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Thank you for this great review and for taking the time to read and share your thoughts for my haiku, Jax. I'm pleased you enjoyed the imagery, and thank you for your good luck wish in the voting booth.