2015 Haiku
Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "Desolating Grief "A collection of haiku I wrote in 2015
67 total reviews
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello author your 5-7-5 poem about how tees n a forest feel put a very vivid picture in my mind.
which to me makes a very concrete haiku.
Gert
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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Hello author your 5-7-5 poem about how tees n a forest feel put a very vivid picture in my mind.
which to me makes a very concrete haiku.
Gert
Comment Written 08-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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thank you for your review gert
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You are welcome
Gert
Comment from LIJ Red
And we think it's rough when a few thousand acres get scorched. At 640 acres per square mile-that's a big fire. Burned over woodlands are truly sad. A fine
scorched stump hugger five/seven/five.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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And we think it's rough when a few thousand acres get scorched. At 640 acres per square mile-that's a big fire. Burned over woodlands are truly sad. A fine
scorched stump hugger five/seven/five.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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Thank you so much for your excellent review, I appreciate it.
Comment from thee-name
Excellent poem. I enjoyed reading this 5-7-5.
Longest Lasting Fire
Pleading Branches To Heaven
Desolating Grief
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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Excellent poem. I enjoyed reading this 5-7-5.
Longest Lasting Fire
Pleading Branches To Heaven
Desolating Grief
Comment Written 08-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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thank you for your review
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thank you!
Comment from robina1978
Did you make the photo of the woods yourself? It complements your poem very well. Dot on syllable count, and a wood that had fire looks desolate. Best wishes for the prompt.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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Did you make the photo of the woods yourself? It complements your poem very well. Dot on syllable count, and a wood that had fire looks desolate. Best wishes for the prompt.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2015
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thank you very much for the excellent revew, i appreciate it
Comment from TPAC
Writer has selected items for this work stir, rearranging selections could enhanced writer aimed intent, bringing coherency throughout lines
Longest Lasting Fire
Pleading Branches To Heaven
Desolating Grief
Fire Desolating
Grief Branches Pleading out To
Heaven Long Lasting
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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Writer has selected items for this work stir, rearranging selections could enhanced writer aimed intent, bringing coherency throughout lines
Longest Lasting Fire
Pleading Branches To Heaven
Desolating Grief
Fire Desolating
Grief Branches Pleading out To
Heaven Long Lasting
Comment Written 08-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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thank you very much for the excellent revew, i appreciate it
Comment from Walu Feral
G'day mate. Great work. It is so sad and tragic when this happens, Australia cops it every year, it's horrid. This is a really good entry into this contest and I wish you luck. Cheers Fez
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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G'day mate. Great work. It is so sad and tragic when this happens, Australia cops it every year, it's horrid. This is a really good entry into this contest and I wish you luck. Cheers Fez
Comment Written 08-Jun-2015
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G'day mate, i hope all is well at home. thank you very much for the excellent revew, i appreciate it
Comment from livelylinda
Author: powerful 5/7/5 looking at the remains of a horrific fire. The picture and the colors you used are perfect enhancements of your words. Good contest contender. livelylinda
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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Author: powerful 5/7/5 looking at the remains of a horrific fire. The picture and the colors you used are perfect enhancements of your words. Good contest contender. livelylinda
Comment Written 08-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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thank you very much for the excellent revew, i appreciate it
Comment from Bill Schott
Along with having the worst economy in Europe, this couldn't have helped their already severe austerity government. Your poem ignites passion for this situation.
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Along with having the worst economy in Europe, this couldn't have helped their already severe austerity government. Your poem ignites passion for this situation.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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thank you very much for the excellent revew, i appreciate it
Comment from dragonpoet
These short lines mirror the desolation of the artwork. Good personification in the second line. It words evoke the loss that is described in the notes. How horrible.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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These short lines mirror the desolation of the artwork. Good personification in the second line. It words evoke the loss that is described in the notes. How horrible.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 08-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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thank you very much for the excellent revew, i appreciate it
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Any time.
dragonpoet
Comment from Brabazon
This is about a fire that burnt down a forest to its skeleton. It must be painstaking sticking to the 5-7-5 syllable count, but the message is even vivid enough in the photo illustration.
It was nice reading it. I wish you the best in the contest.
Brabazon.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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This is about a fire that burnt down a forest to its skeleton. It must be painstaking sticking to the 5-7-5 syllable count, but the message is even vivid enough in the photo illustration.
It was nice reading it. I wish you the best in the contest.
Brabazon.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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thank you very much for the excellent revew, i appreciate it