Comment from His Grayness

Excellent

Les: quick and surprising of course, with a shocking kicker to bring the reader into consciousness, lest the poor doctor of course, not to be comprehending your great works herein, I shall offer congratulations on his part! Vance

 Comment Written 18-May-2015

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reply by the author on 19-May-2015

Thanks a bunch, Vance! I'm really glad to know you enjoyed this tiny, twisted tale of terror, my friend. I think I speak for all the wonderful member here who have contributed of their time and talents to this book when I say...We sincerely appreciate your generous support.

All my best to you, my friend. ~Dean

Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

Is Watson Hispanic? Maybe--ice Cuban? I wonder if Mrs. Watson was frigid as well? This is a cool story of a virtual eternity in a conscious state. Crazy cool!

 Comment Written 18-May-2015

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reply by the author on 18-May-2015

Thanks for having a go at this tiny twisted tale of terror, Bill. I sincerely appreciate the excellent feedback. ~Dean

Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

For one to be successful, others have to lose their abilities to succeed. This is very well written, but I would like to see more conflict with Mr. Watson having the final word and trading places with the good doctor.

 Comment Written 18-May-2015

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reply by the author on 18-May-2015

Thanks for letting me know what worked for you in this tiny terror tale, Charlie, and what you would like to see done a bit better. I'll see if I can somehow work something like that in at a later date and still remain within the constraints of flash fiction/micro fiction word counts. I very much appreciate your constructive feedback. ~Dean

reply by c_lucas on 18-May-2015

You're welcome, Dean.

Comment from Ric Myworld

Excellent

People have always been obsessed with the idea of living forever, and have tried many things to accomplish the feat. Cryogenics is to this day the most logical, but even if a person can be flash frozen and then thawed to a healthy state, we must never forget that, each of us is appointed once to die. HE HE. Now ain't that awakening. Great job. :-)

 Comment Written 18-May-2015

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reply by the author on 18-May-2015

Hah, yeah, it sure is, Ric. Thanks a bunch for the comments and your review, my friend. :)
~Dean

Comment from Gunner Lil

Excellent

Well written and very easy to follow. The good doctor was more into
the celebration then seeing the real sign.
I love flash fiction and the twist. Thank you.

 Comment Written 18-May-2015

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reply by the author on 18-May-2015

Thanks a million for not only reviewing this story, but for supporting this book as well, Gunner. I think I speak for all of the wonderful authors involved who have contributed that we appreciate it immensely.

Thanks again! ~Dean :}

Comment from boxergirl

Excellent

Ha! Being frozen would be hell to me because I can't stand the cold! And to be conscious of the process. Yikes!
Great job with another short ditty. 8-)

 Comment Written 18-May-2015

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reply by the author on 18-May-2015

Thank you, boxergirl. I really am grateful for the review.
Yes, it sure would. Let's make a pact to never endeavor to find out, deal?
~Dean :)

Comment from jpduck

Good

Cryogenics, as currently practised, can only lawfully be carried out on people who are legally dead. However, even if we are to assume that this story takes place in a world where this is not the case, a body whose core has been frozen could not have a beating heart, let alone blood pressure.

This, it seems to me, removes all validity from your story. If you protest that it is pure fantasy, then it surely shouldn't be making use of concepts like 'cryogenics' or 'blood pressure' -- far too realistic.

Adrian

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 Comment Written 18-May-2015

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reply by the author on 18-May-2015

Okay, Adrian, whatever you say. You're obviously an expert on cryogenics, right? Porbably done extensive research on the subject, as I have. I suppose you've never seen Planet of the Apes, or Aliens either, correct? Sigourney Weaver's character, Ripley, is placed in cryogenic stasis for her long journey back to earth from the outer rim of another solar system. She also has a blood pressure, and a heartbeat.

In the beginning stages of the process, you are placed in a medically induced coma, but you are still very much alive. Your body shakes as it tries to gin up heat, your heartbeat quickens, your breath comes faster, but the farther your body temperature drops from its usual 98-plus degrees, the less you feel or understand. At about five degrees below normal, you develop amnesia. As more warmth seeps out, you grow apathetic, then fall into a stupor. Just before you lose consciousness. Your kidneys start to fail. Urine may flow out of you, though you probably won't notice; nor will you be aware that your breathing has now slowed while carbon monoxide builds up inside you. Your metabolism sputters like an engine out of gas. Your heartbeat becomes erratic. When your temperature sinks to about 75 degrees, your heart stops. Very shortly after that, your brain flat lines.

But, thanks for being a realist all the same. I wish you all the best in your own writing with your brilliant imagination... ~Dean

Comment from mfowler

Excellent

This micro-flash is great. You take us immediately to the lab and we can feel the incompetence and lack of compassion immediately. I got quite a start at '"Balderdash, Parsons, my good woman." I really was surprised that she was a woman. Something in my biases, no doubt. The poor Watson, stuck inside his body unable to let these ghouls know they can bring him round. You are truly the master of these things.
One suggestion:
He screamed, he pleaded--he begged with them..this reads a little off as 'begging with' is an odd way to put it. Maybe:
He screamed, he begged--he pleaded with them

 Comment Written 18-May-2015

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reply by the author on 18-May-2015

Thanks, Mark, I'm glad you thought it was readable, at least. I made some edits based upon your suggestion
Much obliged. ~Dean

Comment from barkingdog

Excellent

This gave me the shivers. Poor fellow--frozen while still alive.
The nurse did point out the one clue, but the doctor was anxious to get on with the 'successful' procedure. I can see the mad scientist, proud of his work. :) e

 Comment Written 18-May-2015

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reply by the author on 18-May-2015

Nice to hear from you again, Ellen. Hope all is well with you & yours.
Yeah, I guess the doc was in denial. Too bad for poor Mr. Watson. He had his whole life ahead of him, lol.
Thanks very much for your kind comments. ~Dean

Comment from chasennov

Excellent

Chapter 13 of the book Tiny Tales of Terror A Tiny Tale of Terror "The Unfortunate Mr. Watson" Who, in this world, would want to be cryovaced while he was still alive, I ask you. This is, as usual with your posts, an excellent piece, Dean. That includes the artwork. Well done.

 Comment Written 18-May-2015

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reply by the author on 18-May-2015

Thanks, Chase. I'm very happy that you enjoyed this tiny twisted tale of terror. Me, along with all the other writer who have graciously contributed to this book, sincerely appreciate your support.~Dean

reply by chasennov on 18-May-2015

You are most welcome, Dean.