First Light
There's promise in the dawn's first light46 total reviews
Comment from bizzygirl
The presentation is wonderful. The photo and colors create a mood that the poem follows through from beginning to end. I love this. The poem is soft and lilting as if a morning song, relates to birds early in the am. Very well constructed. Good Job
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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The presentation is wonderful. The photo and colors create a mood that the poem follows through from beginning to end. I love this. The poem is soft and lilting as if a morning song, relates to birds early in the am. Very well constructed. Good Job
Comment Written 08-May-2015
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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Thank you for your thoughtful and encouraging review. So pleased that you liked this one.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from MissMerri
This is a most satisfying poem to read. I've now read all of them in this contest and like the way you have done your repeating line in this piece. The meter is excellent and the rhymes too, but the story you tell is quite beautiful. I think this will do very well in the contest. It is truly lovely.
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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This is a most satisfying poem to read. I've now read all of them in this contest and like the way you have done your repeating line in this piece. The meter is excellent and the rhymes too, but the story you tell is quite beautiful. I think this will do very well in the contest. It is truly lovely.
Comment Written 08-May-2015
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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Thank you MissMerri for your thoughtful and encouraging review. So pleased that you liked this one.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Praise000
Hie
Opened your poem with intriguing words
to capture the readers mind.
"...There's promise in the dawn's first light
... me with its gentle glow.
... stars fade from my sight ..."
All the best.Praise000
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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Hie
Opened your poem with intriguing words
to capture the readers mind.
"...There's promise in the dawn's first light
... me with its gentle glow.
... stars fade from my sight ..."
All the best.Praise000
Comment Written 08-May-2015
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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Thank you for your thoughtful and encouraging review. So pleased that you liked this one.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from NicciFaye
And what is that Golden Rule...up for interpretation of one's moral character and belief. A wonderful poem that reads of peace, clarity and goodness. Enjoyed.
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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And what is that Golden Rule...up for interpretation of one's moral character and belief. A wonderful poem that reads of peace, clarity and goodness. Enjoyed.
Comment Written 08-May-2015
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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Thank you for your thoughtful and encouraging review. So pleased that you liked this one. For me the Golden Rule is simple "do onto others as you would have them do to you". Sounds simple but it isn't always".
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Maritza M. Mejia
The lines flow with style according to the imagery and title.
My favorite part:
"Each day begins a mystery
to solve before day turns to night.
If we obey the 'Golden Rule"
there's promise in the dawn's first light."
Congratulations!
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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The lines flow with style according to the imagery and title.
My favorite part:
"Each day begins a mystery
to solve before day turns to night.
If we obey the 'Golden Rule"
there's promise in the dawn's first light."
Congratulations!
Comment Written 08-May-2015
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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Thank you Maritza for your thoughtful and encouraging review. So pleased that you liked this one.
Blessings
Janet
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You're very welcome!
Maritza
Comment from Chris Tee
This is an absolutely wonderful poem with the iambic meter excellently done. The repetition line advances perfectly to become the climax line. Well done indeed and good luck in the contest,
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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This is an absolutely wonderful poem with the iambic meter excellently done. The repetition line advances perfectly to become the climax line. Well done indeed and good luck in the contest,
Comment Written 08-May-2015
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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Thank you Chris for your thoughtful and encouraging review. So pleased that you liked this one. It is always a pleasure to have you review my work.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from TPAC
Super plus, do not have six stars rate but you have close this poem nice. The efforts and endeavors you took to compose show poem positive efforts Truly an enriched soul Thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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Super plus, do not have six stars rate but you have close this poem nice. The efforts and endeavors you took to compose show poem positive efforts Truly an enriched soul Thank you for sharing
Comment Written 08-May-2015
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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Thank you for your thoughtful and encouraging review. So pleased that you liked this one. Just knowing that you think this one deserved a six is awesome.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from kiwigirl2821
What a wonderful piece of writing. I wondered how the repetition contest would be and this is an excellent entry! Good luck in your contest. This is so soothing and encouraging. xoxo Kiwi
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What a wonderful piece of writing. I wondered how the repetition contest would be and this is an excellent entry! Good luck in your contest. This is so soothing and encouraging. xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 08-May-2015
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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Thank you Kiwi for your thoughtful and encouraging review. So pleased that you liked this one.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Pantygynt
This is a very effective piece of poetry. The secret with all these poems that repeat lines or portions of lines is to make the repetions unobtrusive. And with this quaterne, where the repeated line cascades down through subsequent stanzas, you have certainly achieved that and excelled the simple instructions for the entry.
I particularly liked the way you pointed up the dawn chorus of the birds with line of splendid alliteration on the S.
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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This is a very effective piece of poetry. The secret with all these poems that repeat lines or portions of lines is to make the repetions unobtrusive. And with this quaterne, where the repeated line cascades down through subsequent stanzas, you have certainly achieved that and excelled the simple instructions for the entry.
I particularly liked the way you pointed up the dawn chorus of the birds with line of splendid alliteration on the S.
Comment Written 08-May-2015
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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Thank you for your thoughtful and encouraging review. So pleased that you liked this one.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from patcelaw
This is a beautifully written and presented work. It is a joy to read and is a good entry for the prompt. Good luck. Patricia
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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This is a beautifully written and presented work. It is a joy to read and is a good entry for the prompt. Good luck. Patricia
Comment Written 08-May-2015
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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Thank you Patricia for your thoughtful and encouraging review. I'm so pleased that you liked it.
Blessings
Janet