Act of Endurance
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Comment from Domjponi
Fabulous pease of work.
A blindfold a balance and a sword stands are Liberty!!
Mr. bill, places people like me in despair.
Very much enjoyed your words of such truth in this world we live.
reply by the author on 24-May-2016
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Fabulous pease of work.
A blindfold a balance and a sword stands are Liberty!!
Mr. bill, places people like me in despair.
Very much enjoyed your words of such truth in this world we live.
Comment Written 22-May-2016
reply by the author on 24-May-2016
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This conclusion surprised me, too. Thanking you for generous rate and welcomed thoughts about this write.
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Welcome
Comment from Gloria ....
This is actually a powerful T. I have one suggestion that if you laid it out a little differently it would be easier to read and feel the impact.
Your centrepiece thread of bill and all its different applications throughout so many different aspects of life is very good.
With a little bit of different prosody your poem would pop right out.
Nice work!
Gloria
reply by the author on 24-May-2016
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This is actually a powerful T. I have one suggestion that if you laid it out a little differently it would be easier to read and feel the impact.
Your centrepiece thread of bill and all its different applications throughout so many different aspects of life is very good.
With a little bit of different prosody your poem would pop right out.
Nice work!
Gloria
Comment Written 22-May-2016
reply by the author on 24-May-2016
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Great insight as always: appreciate the shout. Thanking you for generous rate; dispite: and touching sentiments.
Comment from dscheuren
I'm sorry, I had a hard time with this poem due to incorrect verb usage. I don't know if that was your intent, but I couldn't get past it. Best wishes.
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reply by the author on 30-Mar-2016
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I'm sorry, I had a hard time with this poem due to incorrect verb usage. I don't know if that was your intent, but I couldn't get past it. Best wishes.
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Comment Written 29-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2016
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Thank you for your honesty, appreciate comment and agree my works have pits. Again, thanking you for generous rate and encouraging statements.
Comment from thonnigford09
Very strong use of the word for government bills and dollar bills. I wish money didn't exist---root of all evil. Everyone could just excel. I know. I would definitely recommend this poem. Thanks for sharing such strong emotion and wording. thonnigford09
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2016
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Very strong use of the word for government bills and dollar bills. I wish money didn't exist---root of all evil. Everyone could just excel. I know. I would definitely recommend this poem. Thanks for sharing such strong emotion and wording. thonnigford09
Comment Written 28-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2016
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Glad this write touched you. Very generous rate but more so loved statements.
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Thanks!!!!thonnigford09
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Thanks!!!!thonnigford09
Comment from djeckert
This is awesome, a great history lesson and great study in the evolution of our bill of rights born of freedomcountry into a " i owe, i owe lots of bills debt slave country. very interesting style .says alot. God Bless you and your writing
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2016
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This is awesome, a great history lesson and great study in the evolution of our bill of rights born of freedomcountry into a " i owe, i owe lots of bills debt slave country. very interesting style .says alot. God Bless you and your writing
Comment Written 26-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2016
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Thank you for far too generous rate, your actions illustrate certain aspects pleasing in this write. Thanking you for comments and inspiring thoughts.
Comment from prettybluebirds
Excellent. Another chapter in your book? It seems you are really writing these days. I think I read four of these yesterday. I wish you the best on this.
reply by the author on 29-Feb-2016
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Excellent. Another chapter in your book? It seems you are really writing these days. I think I read four of these yesterday. I wish you the best on this.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 29-Feb-2016
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The project is almost complete, thanks to all given reviews and revisions: thanking you for generous rate and touching statements.
Comment from foxangie123
Wow. Is that a pic of an Atom Bomb? As one reads they can draw both knowledge and emotion from this. Thank you for this and keep going....
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2016
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Wow. Is that a pic of an Atom Bomb? As one reads they can draw both knowledge and emotion from this. Thank you for this and keep going....
Comment Written 08-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2016
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Glad aspects in this write had some appeal of interests. Thanking you for generous rate and captivating comments about this work.
Comment from Ricky1024
very powerfully written Trac with your unique style about how the weather over it works and run by the oil and mighty dollar bill bill seems to be the four letter word in this piece of 24 out
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2016
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very powerfully written Trac with your unique style about how the weather over it works and run by the oil and mighty dollar bill bill seems to be the four letter word in this piece of 24 out
Comment Written 08-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2016
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Yeah and so much more, a pyramid scheme of the highest-actually works: the dollar bill. Thanking you for generous rate and touching thoughts about this work.
Comment from TallySally
The passion expressed in your work is undeniable. Your reasoning is sound and each point is valid. As a senior lower middle class Caucasian woman I did have some trouble in reading this - but I new how good this is and I read it many times until I began to sync better with your style. This not a criticism - just an observation.
It is all worthy but the last 3 verses shot right through me. So powerful. I was with word for word all the way.
Best of luck to, brother in prose.
God bless!
Relda
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2015
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The passion expressed in your work is undeniable. Your reasoning is sound and each point is valid. As a senior lower middle class Caucasian woman I did have some trouble in reading this - but I new how good this is and I read it many times until I began to sync better with your style. This not a criticism - just an observation.
It is all worthy but the last 3 verses shot right through me. So powerful. I was with word for word all the way.
Best of luck to, brother in prose.
God bless!
Relda
Comment Written 22-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2015
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You indeed captured my attention with the defining of yourself, even though I was pleased a resolution was found in reading this work and the end agreement between. Thanking you for generous rate and always welcomed comments up or down about any of my work. Can't go wrong with truth.
Comment from country ranch writer
in today's world ain't much a dollar will buy in any case so if you take a dare make sur it is worth your wild for the bail is more than the almighty dollar
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2015
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in today's world ain't much a dollar will buy in any case so if you take a dare make sur it is worth your wild for the bail is more than the almighty dollar
Comment Written 22-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2015
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Thanking you partner, not just for this work but support. Trying to do the best which we all are. Appreciate rate and all comments about my works trying to get to see more of yours.
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WELCOME, SMILES