Mister Expert Explorer
50 word story38 total reviews
Comment from Dean Kuch
See? Just when you think you have the situation well in hand and all is well, a shark appears. Well, that's only if you're in an ocean somewhere,of course, or perhaps a pool hall game of billiards.
Nice micro flash, Mikey. Good luck! ~Dean
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See? Just when you think you have the situation well in hand and all is well, a shark appears. Well, that's only if you're in an ocean somewhere,of course, or perhaps a pool hall game of billiards.
Nice micro flash, Mikey. Good luck! ~Dean
Comment Written 04-May-2015
Comment from Michaelk
Great job. Building the tension like that. I didn't think he was going to make it and was surprised when he did. And then you threw him to the sharks.
Well done, well rounded story told in very few words.
great description of the surrounding too, I could feel the water rising.
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Great job. Building the tension like that. I didn't think he was going to make it and was surprised when he did. And then you threw him to the sharks.
Well done, well rounded story told in very few words.
great description of the surrounding too, I could feel the water rising.
Comment Written 04-May-2015
Comment from amahra
So glad this was a contest entry. I always think writing this clever and funny should receive something more than just a casual reading. This was a nice, cheerful read. Good luck.
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So glad this was a contest entry. I always think writing this clever and funny should receive something more than just a casual reading. This was a nice, cheerful read. Good luck.
Comment Written 04-May-2015
Comment from krys123
Mikey;
+ Bravo! Excelsior! Fantisimo!
+ Absolutely brilliant the way you lead on the reader to believe that there is danger ahead and everything seems to be okay and then you bring on a dangerous shark that may be the end to his uplifting feelings.
+ An exceptional piece of writing which I truly enjoyed very much. Could that had me in suspense all the while.
+ Good luck in the contest Mikey. I'm sure this is a winner.
+ Thank you for sharing and posting and may the good life be with you and the Lord.
Alex
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Mikey;
+ Bravo! Excelsior! Fantisimo!
+ Absolutely brilliant the way you lead on the reader to believe that there is danger ahead and everything seems to be okay and then you bring on a dangerous shark that may be the end to his uplifting feelings.
+ An exceptional piece of writing which I truly enjoyed very much. Could that had me in suspense all the while.
+ Good luck in the contest Mikey. I'm sure this is a winner.
+ Thank you for sharing and posting and may the good life be with you and the Lord.
Alex
Comment Written 04-May-2015
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Well done Mikey. Great picture for the poem. Why didn't you say the tide is rising now? I was relieved that the victim made it through the trauma and then Shark? How awful. To drown would have been kind. LOL :<) Nancy
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Well done Mikey. Great picture for the poem. Why didn't you say the tide is rising now? I was relieved that the victim made it through the trauma and then Shark? How awful. To drown would have been kind. LOL :<) Nancy
Comment Written 04-May-2015
Comment from humpwhistle
Overall, this is a pretty boring story. The protagonist gets free (somehow) with two feet to spare. Where is the drama? Where is the suspense? Shark. Convenient.
50 words is a challenge, not a number.
Peace, Lee
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Overall, this is a pretty boring story. The protagonist gets free (somehow) with two feet to spare. Where is the drama? Where is the suspense? Shark. Convenient.
50 words is a challenge, not a number.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 04-May-2015
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
LOL! This is a hoot, Mike!
Mr. Expert Explorer, indeed. He goes from one pickle into the boiling pot. This is a super entry. Good luck.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*:*)
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LOL! This is a hoot, Mike!
Mr. Expert Explorer, indeed. He goes from one pickle into the boiling pot. This is a super entry. Good luck.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*:*)
Comment Written 04-May-2015
Comment from Sasha
As the old saying goes, when it rains, it pours. Great story and I am impressed you did this in just 50 words. I know nothing about the use of commas and I use elipses all the time and usually incorrectly. This looks fine to me but you may want to listen to someone that actually knows what they are talking about. Great entry for this fun contest. I wish you all the best.
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As the old saying goes, when it rains, it pours. Great story and I am impressed you did this in just 50 words. I know nothing about the use of commas and I use elipses all the time and usually incorrectly. This looks fine to me but you may want to listen to someone that actually knows what they are talking about. Great entry for this fun contest. I wish you all the best.
Comment Written 04-May-2015
Comment from justafan
Mikey, you never cease to amaze me!! Another great work...So, that being said...I am not the one to give advice on ellipses...obviously!! I just know that I am gonna visit a different place every time I read your work :)
Always,
Missy
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Mikey, you never cease to amaze me!! Another great work...So, that being said...I am not the one to give advice on ellipses...obviously!! I just know that I am gonna visit a different place every time I read your work :)
Always,
Missy
Comment Written 04-May-2015
Comment from Kingsland
Hit'em with that rock you were stuck on, or is that just wishful thinking. This was a well written short story line. It is not easy to write a completed story in so few words, but you pulled it off here quite well. I enjoyed reading this well written short story line... John
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Hit'em with that rock you were stuck on, or is that just wishful thinking. This was a well written short story line. It is not easy to write a completed story in so few words, but you pulled it off here quite well. I enjoyed reading this well written short story line... John
Comment Written 04-May-2015