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Viewing comments for Chapter 13 "Polhena Beach, Sri Lanka, 0600."Poems about the coastline
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Comment from Brett Matthew West
Interesting notes. Creative to devise your own style of poetry. Isn't that what writing is all about? Your own style? Verses flow well into one another. Action is smooth throughout. Write on.
reply by the author on 01-May-2015
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Interesting notes. Creative to devise your own style of poetry. Isn't that what writing is all about? Your own style? Verses flow well into one another. Action is smooth throughout. Write on.
Comment Written 01-May-2015
reply by the author on 01-May-2015
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Thank you for these most encouraging comments.
Comment from bizzygirl
I was floating along on the lines a,b,c,b, then thunk. morn and dawn not quite the match you were going for. The 2nd stanza fills the bill of your intent, I think. My favorite lines are: the first two lines of the last stanza, lovley. I am not counting down for the first stanza and it is up to you and your interpretation. Bravo on attmpting something new?
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I was floating along on the lines a,b,c,b, then thunk. morn and dawn not quite the match you were going for. The 2nd stanza fills the bill of your intent, I think. My favorite lines are: the first two lines of the last stanza, lovley. I am not counting down for the first stanza and it is up to you and your interpretation. Bravo on attmpting something new?
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Comment Written 01-May-2015
reply by the author on 01-May-2015
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If screech can rhyme with beach I don't see why dawn and morn are wrong. Rhyme can be spelling but it is sound above all. I know that there are differences on either side of the pond but I realy can't see the problem. Thanks anyway for reading and reviewing and your congratulations on the new form.
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In my opinion, screech beach have chuh sound, dawn ahn, mourn orn, just my opinion,
Comment from Edward J
I thought you did a good job with this poem. The flow was wonderful. The word choices were perfect. I especially liked the part where you waded out. I could see this (and feel the water). Great job.
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I thought you did a good job with this poem. The flow was wonderful. The word choices were perfect. I especially liked the part where you waded out. I could see this (and feel the water). Great job.
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Comment Written 01-May-2015
reply by the author on 01-May-2015
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Thank you for reading and reviewing and for your encouraging comments.