Reflections Of Color
Viewing comments for Chapter 24 "Tonight You Had To Call Me"A collection of my All-Time Best rated song lyrics
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Comment from LIJ Red
Hey, look, one of those antique land line public phones. Oh, in Mexico, el telefono. Oh, Italy, too? This kinda rambles and the meter needs a kick or two, but I like the dialect and the storyline. Five stars.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2015
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Hey, look, one of those antique land line public phones. Oh, in Mexico, el telefono. Oh, Italy, too? This kinda rambles and the meter needs a kick or two, but I like the dialect and the storyline. Five stars.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2015
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Comment from Eric1
Hi Mystery author, well, this is a beautifully written poem which seems almost lyrical in its presentation and structure, Once I started reading it carried me along at a fair old pace.
Great rhyming and a wonderful rhythm leading to a great creative flow.
Good luck in the contest my friend.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2015
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Hi Mystery author, well, this is a beautifully written poem which seems almost lyrical in its presentation and structure, Once I started reading it carried me along at a fair old pace.
Great rhyming and a wonderful rhythm leading to a great creative flow.
Good luck in the contest my friend.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2015
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Comment from amahra
Very nicely written and good contest entry.
You never seemed to notice how much I really care.[I know cared doesn't rhyme with there, but grammatically, it should be cared.]
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2015
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Very nicely written and good contest entry.
You never seemed to notice how much I really care.[I know cared doesn't rhyme with there, but grammatically, it should be cared.]
Comment Written 27-Apr-2015
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Comment from sibhus
They never seem to know what the want, these women. This makes for a great entry for the contest, and you have really caught the drama of the break-up, make-up, break-up dance that we all have been in, at one time or another with your rhymes. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2015
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They never seem to know what the want, these women. This makes for a great entry for the contest, and you have really caught the drama of the break-up, make-up, break-up dance that we all have been in, at one time or another with your rhymes. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2015
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Comment from Spitfire
Revenge is sweet. Were I still dating, I'd hang this on my wall, ready to use your words if someone dumped me and then changed their minds. Charming reversal of first and last lines about closing the door.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2015
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Revenge is sweet. Were I still dating, I'd hang this on my wall, ready to use your words if someone dumped me and then changed their minds. Charming reversal of first and last lines about closing the door.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2015
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Comment from emkoutny
I liked how you created a voice for this character. usually you see the wronged woman, but here is the wronged man. that twist made it really interesting. Also I got a sense of the character in the line, "I mean, it was something I ain't never seen before,"
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2015
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I liked how you created a voice for this character. usually you see the wronged woman, but here is the wronged man. that twist made it really interesting. Also I got a sense of the character in the line, "I mean, it was something I ain't never seen before,"
Comment Written 26-Apr-2015
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Comment from Dean Kuch
Hah-hah! Well... you sure told her, buddy! It serves her right, too, doing you the way she done. Who the hell knows how a woman's mind works -- except for maybe another woman? I gave up tryin' to figure 'em out a long time ago. Why wrack yer brain-pan just beatin' it against the wall? What's gonna happen's gonna happen, and there ain't a damn thing anybody can do about it. 'Cept maybe the gal herself, but that hardly ever happens...'cept in the movies, maybe...
Seriously, Anonymous Author, I had a lot of fun reading this. The meter is a bit choppy in some places, and I stumbled over a couple of lines -- but nothing major. For a poem of such great length, I think you did a fabulous job.
Good luck in your contest...~Dean
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2015
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Hah-hah! Well... you sure told her, buddy! It serves her right, too, doing you the way she done. Who the hell knows how a woman's mind works -- except for maybe another woman? I gave up tryin' to figure 'em out a long time ago. Why wrack yer brain-pan just beatin' it against the wall? What's gonna happen's gonna happen, and there ain't a damn thing anybody can do about it. 'Cept maybe the gal herself, but that hardly ever happens...'cept in the movies, maybe...
Seriously, Anonymous Author, I had a lot of fun reading this. The meter is a bit choppy in some places, and I stumbled over a couple of lines -- but nothing major. For a poem of such great length, I think you did a fabulous job.
Good luck in your contest...~Dean
Comment Written 26-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2015
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You're more than welcome, it was a great poetic tale. :)
Comment from Delahay
Well it sounds like this person has done the right thing and gotten over this girl who would, no doubt, bring them nothing but heartache. She ran out on this guy then expected him to still be at home waiting for her when it didn't work out.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2015
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Well it sounds like this person has done the right thing and gotten over this girl who would, no doubt, bring them nothing but heartache. She ran out on this guy then expected him to still be at home waiting for her when it didn't work out.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2015
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Comment from skye
This one just grabbed my attention and held on tightly.
You made the situation real, using prose and poetry to tell the story form both sides, but especially from his.
I think you did a terrific job of filling the prompt.
Excellent.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2015
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This one just grabbed my attention and held on tightly.
You made the situation real, using prose and poetry to tell the story form both sides, but especially from his.
I think you did a terrific job of filling the prompt.
Excellent.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2015
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Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Wow and excellently done.
It flowed on andon and believe it or not it became a sing/song type of piece.
So easy to read and understand.
Rhyme and rhythm were spot on.
Loved the wording and the flow
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2015
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Wow and excellently done.
It flowed on andon and believe it or not it became a sing/song type of piece.
So easy to read and understand.
Rhyme and rhythm were spot on.
Loved the wording and the flow
Comment Written 26-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2015
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Thanks for your comments and support. Appreciate them very much.