Comment from Dom G Robles

Excellent

You are hiding down beneath the Ferris haunting ground. But I have a feeling and sense that I want to sound. You write excellent horror stories. Your trade mark--your markings are evident to me. If I now make a guess, would this jeopardize your quest? (I call you Edgar Allen Poe) But would you care? Or do you want me to spare...? You are, I think,from the Great Land of England-- an English writer. Friend please tell me. This is out from this posting now. How do you count the syllables of "Diana"? Is it two or 3 syllables? And how about "Prince's" Is it one or two syllables? I need your expertise. Please give me your opinion. Will you? Congratulations, my friend. Dom

 Comment Written 18-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 19-Apr-2015

Sure, Dom, no worries...

Di-an-a I would count as three syllables, and "prince" as just one. But you don't have to take mine or anyone else's word for that, my friend. Simply go to the link provided here... Word Calculatior, type in your words and it will tell you how many syllables are in each and every word you wish to enter.

Thanks very much for your review, and I hope the link provides you with the information that you need...~Dean

reply by Dom G Robles on 19-Apr-2015

Dean I w3as struggling on word counting. I always go to the dictionary which cumbersome. I always go to my dictionary which takes a longer time. Good you told me I could go to "Word Calculator" and does its work. My friend, thanks again. Dom

reply by the author on 19-Apr-2015

I use it quite a bit myself, Dom, especially when I'm in doubt. You're very welcome, glad I could help you out. :)

Comment from rspoet

Excellent

Perfect blending of the theme words in a complete story. Horror no less.
Slowly revealed as a good horror story should be
How easily those parents are distracted, true to real life.
Well written, saving the sole line of monologue for the last
Excellent presentation, one might say signature
Good luck

 Comment Written 18-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 19-Apr-2015

Thanks, rspoet. I'm really very grateful for your positive review, but even more than that, I'm happy that you enjoyed the story...~Dean

Comment from Donovan

Excellent

Excellent flash story. Has all the elements and evokes in my mind a picture that far exceeds the words used. This is Rod Serling at his best. Well done.

 Comment Written 18-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 19-Apr-2015

Thank you very much, Donovan. I'm really very grateful for your positive review, but even more than that, I'm happy that you enjoyed the story...~Dean

Comment from Dawn Munro

Excellent

As if I couldn't recognize this writer - as if - WOW. This is about as creepy as it gets, and I absolutely love the presentation too. "This carnival employs no clowns." YIKES. Exceptional short, short. Good luck in the contest. (SIX stars, if I had any!)

 Comment Written 18-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 19-Apr-2015

Hey, thanks for checking this one out for me, Dawn. I'm really very grateful for your positive review, but even more than that, I'm happy that you enjoyed the story...~Dean :)

reply by Dawn Munro on 20-Apr-2015

It was my pleasure, Dean.

Comment from Acquired Taste

Exceptional

Another excellent reason to avoid men wearing white makeup. Clowns were never a favorite for me, just thinking about the evil hidden by the makeup and clothing is enough to start chills. Great short fiction! J

 Comment Written 18-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 19-Apr-2015

Thanks for the generous rating and review, Jean. I sincerely appreciate it! My friends growing up all shied away from clowns...but not yours truly. I was always the first to run up to them, grab them by the hand and say, "Okay...let's go have some fun!" It could'a gotten me into some hot water I realize now, heh-heh

Much obliged, my friend...~SPOOKY

Comment from sibhus

Excellent

Yeah, definitely a scary piece in with in a brief word limit. Probably the must frightening aspect of this short piece is, is that it could so easily happen in our society today. Good stuff there, Mystery Written. Who was that masked man? Good luck with this well written entry.

 Comment Written 18-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 19-Apr-2015

Thanks a bunch, sibhus. I'm really very grateful for your positive review, but even more than that, I'm happy that you enjoyed the story...~Dean

Comment from Tatarka2

Exceptional

I thought I knew which entry I would vote for - then I read this one. Dean, is that you? I'm in awe of this. Such a daunting task, yet you've fulfilled he prompt and created something so horrible, mostly in what you did not say. Now, that's art. Congratulations, and best of luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 18-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 21-Apr-2015

Yep, none other than, Tatarka, lol. Of course, I couldn't say so while the contest was going on, but I can now. I can also thank you for your generous six star rating and thoughtful comments too. Oh wait...I think I just did! LOL...

Thanks again, I am very glad that you enjoyed the story...~Dean

Comment from emkoutny

Excellent

I didn't know you cold add music or a video. it reminded me of Stephen King's "It" or John Wayne Gacy. Very creepy and a parents worst nightmare. Great job!

 Comment Written 18-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 19-Apr-2015

Heh-heh..., thanks, Em. I'm really very grateful for your positive review, but even more than that, I'm happy that you enjoyed the story...~Dean :)

Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell

Excellent

I have never liked clowns, they scare the life out of me. I see nothing funny in them. Your story is so creepy, just what I would expect from a clown. It quite gave me the shudders. Was the Pied Piper a clown? Excellent writing, well down, a horror in so few words. Good luck in the contest. :) Sandra. xsx

 Comment Written 18-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 21-Apr-2015

Thanks, Sandra. I'm very glad you were entertained....~Dean

Comment from flylikeaneagle

Excellent

Dean: I like your alluring music and the words of distraction. They were watching and he was waiting for the youth. The parents weren't aware. Great story telling in a few words for the prompt

This parallels with the churches...gathered around the word and coffee time. What are the youth doing? Who is catching their eye? Campfires with drugs, alcohol and sex catch their attention. We need to be aware and awake. I'm on praying ground behind My Master!

Love life...enjoy your weekend! flylikeaneagle

 Comment Written 18-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 21-Apr-2015

Thanks, Nancy, as always. I really appreciate your comments...:)
~Dean