Brother can you spare a dime?
Big Goverment for the Rich23 total reviews
Comment from GeorgieBoy
This is a well thought-out informative piece. I liked the fact that you included some humor into this very serious and importance subject: Some minor changes:
money to get prescriptions filled for OCD(,) and bi-polar (Bipolar) mental problems-
if your favor cliches(,) and metaphors. Remove comma
When you Wish Upon a Star." (' W')
The government claims that 100,000 or more jobs are added, in the work force every month, but they fail to say they are spread over 50 States, and most are at minimum wage level, without benefits. This sentence is very long, consider breaking it up into several sentences.
the work force - do you mean workforce?
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2015
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This is a well thought-out informative piece. I liked the fact that you included some humor into this very serious and importance subject: Some minor changes:
money to get prescriptions filled for OCD(,) and bi-polar (Bipolar) mental problems-
if your favor cliches(,) and metaphors. Remove comma
When you Wish Upon a Star." (' W')
The government claims that 100,000 or more jobs are added, in the work force every month, but they fail to say they are spread over 50 States, and most are at minimum wage level, without benefits. This sentence is very long, consider breaking it up into several sentences.
the work force - do you mean workforce?
Comment Written 11-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2015
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Thank you for the review and suggestions, revisions.
Comment from adewpearl
I love that particular dinner LOL
the narrator is forthright about the situation he/she is in
good social/political commentary
with strong illustrative examples
don't cry for me, Argentina - add comma for direct address
good use of the Waterfront reference
and of the Brother song
Argued with clarity and conviction
Brooke
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reply by the author on 11-Mar-2015
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I love that particular dinner LOL
the narrator is forthright about the situation he/she is in
good social/political commentary
with strong illustrative examples
don't cry for me, Argentina - add comma for direct address
good use of the Waterfront reference
and of the Brother song
Argued with clarity and conviction
Brooke
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2015
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Thank you.
Comment from Ricky1024
Nice work here Elpoetry!
Beautiful and lovely piece.
Great imagery.
Excellent Adjective and Objective Contents.
Perfect Grammar.
Thanks,
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reply by the author on 10-Mar-2015
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Nice work here Elpoetry!
Beautiful and lovely piece.
Great imagery.
Excellent Adjective and Objective Contents.
Perfect Grammar.
Thanks,
24.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2015
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Thank you. Sad, that this is the present situation for America.
