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Shadows past.115 total reviews
Comment from Chris Hunter
Very nice poem of faith and the power of believing. You word usage is good and very descriptive. Your story is clear. I like especially how you call similar objects by different names..bells...gongs.. Keep the faith.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2015
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Very nice poem of faith and the power of believing. You word usage is good and very descriptive. Your story is clear. I like especially how you call similar objects by different names..bells...gongs.. Keep the faith.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2015
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Thank you Chris, for the excellent rating and great comments, blessings, Roy,
Comment from G.B. Smith
The spectres of my past laid bare,
exposed by Heaven's Son,
in God I trust, my lamp burns strong,
their hold on me is gone.
WTG Roy...Trusting in Jesus Christ has proven for me to be the best choice I ever made. When I 1st came home from Vietnam there were ghosts in my dreams, but after I gave it over, it has been a slice of Heaven for sure
Bear
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2015
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The spectres of my past laid bare,
exposed by Heaven's Son,
in God I trust, my lamp burns strong,
their hold on me is gone.
WTG Roy...Trusting in Jesus Christ has proven for me to be the best choice I ever made. When I 1st came home from Vietnam there were ghosts in my dreams, but after I gave it over, it has been a slice of Heaven for sure
Bear
Comment Written 02-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2015
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Thank you Bear, for the excellent rating and great comments, blessings, Roy,
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
Awesome poem! I felt that all the way to my soul. It was a breath of fresh air, and a balm to the soul. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2015
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Awesome poem! I felt that all the way to my soul. It was a breath of fresh air, and a balm to the soul. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2015
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Thank you you for this outstanding review, high rating and excellent stars, blessings Roy.
Comment from acerisestory
Your poem is a beautiful one -- a tribute to your strong faith, Roy.
You've used beautiful imagery throughout. Your fine alliteration and enjambment from line to line add to the great flow of your words. Your 8/6/8/6 meter is perfectly done.
One suggestion: perhaps you'd add to the dismal feeling if you said "rang their gongs of gloom" instead of "tolled their chimes," which is more uplifting. Just a thought. The poem is very nice, indeed.
Well done, my friend! Alana
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2015
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Your poem is a beautiful one -- a tribute to your strong faith, Roy.
You've used beautiful imagery throughout. Your fine alliteration and enjambment from line to line add to the great flow of your words. Your 8/6/8/6 meter is perfectly done.
One suggestion: perhaps you'd add to the dismal feeling if you said "rang their gongs of gloom" instead of "tolled their chimes," which is more uplifting. Just a thought. The poem is very nice, indeed.
Well done, my friend! Alana
Comment Written 02-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2015
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Heh, heh, I loved that comment, one person thought that that verse and another were superfluous, but the word count was short, so I had to, ironically it was disqualified, for the words in description, bit petty, but then... Thanks Alana, for the outstanding rating, comments, suggestion and stars, blessings, Roy.
Comment from Janet7053
Royowen, This is so encouraging! The burdens we carry from past sins and mistakes are ushered from the room in the light of the Son. What a thrilling picture. I am interested in your word choices and in case you are interested; these words are totally new to me and unusual.
wraiths and fetid. I spend time with Webster to see what he says. I surely love meeting new words.
Did you mean spectrum in the last verse?
Wonderful Job!
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2015
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Royowen, This is so encouraging! The burdens we carry from past sins and mistakes are ushered from the room in the light of the Son. What a thrilling picture. I am interested in your word choices and in case you are interested; these words are totally new to me and unusual.
wraiths and fetid. I spend time with Webster to see what he says. I surely love meeting new words.
Did you mean spectrum in the last verse?
Wonderful Job!
Comment Written 02-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2015
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Me too Janet, some very good word use here on site! Thank you, for the excellent rating and great comments, blessings, Roy
Comment from TAB_that's me
Our ghosts of past or all taken away when our sins are confessed. Great ending to a what started as a rather dark poem. Well written Roy.
teresa
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2015
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Our ghosts of past or all taken away when our sins are confessed. Great ending to a what started as a rather dark poem. Well written Roy.
teresa
Comment Written 02-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2015
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Thank you Teresa, for the excellent rating and great comments, blessings, Roy,
Comment from rjuselius
living in the past seems to be a big problem for many including me. your poem reveals somber ways of dealing with the present. very well presented and faith in god above.
thank you for sharing!
rebekka x
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2015
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living in the past seems to be a big problem for many including me. your poem reveals somber ways of dealing with the present. very well presented and faith in god above.
thank you for sharing!
rebekka x
Comment Written 02-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2015
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Thank you Rebekka, for the excellent rating and great comments, blessings, Roy,
Comment from giraffmang
Hello Roy,
This is a very fine and fitting testament you have presented here about the strength of faith and the power granted to those who accept it.
A very powerful poem in a quiet and meaningful style.
Very well written.
GMG
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2015
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Hello Roy,
This is a very fine and fitting testament you have presented here about the strength of faith and the power granted to those who accept it.
A very powerful poem in a quiet and meaningful style.
Very well written.
GMG
Comment Written 02-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2015
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Thank you GMG, for the excellent rating and great comments, blessings, Roy,
Comment from Travis64
This read very well! Your rhyming was consistent throughout and wasn't forced! It flowed with ease all the way to the end making it an enjoyable read. I also enjoyed the fact that as a reader, I too, could relate to this and the message of hope it holds in the end. Well done!
~Travis64
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2015
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This read very well! Your rhyming was consistent throughout and wasn't forced! It flowed with ease all the way to the end making it an enjoyable read. I also enjoyed the fact that as a reader, I too, could relate to this and the message of hope it holds in the end. Well done!
~Travis64
Comment Written 02-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2015
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Thank you Travis, for the excellent rating and great comments, blessings, Roy,
Comment from robina1978
Great way to write your poem, without artwork as well. It is about your life and the struggles you met. Shadows hunt you but faith rescues you. It rhymes all the way and flows well.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2015
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Great way to write your poem, without artwork as well. It is about your life and the struggles you met. Shadows hunt you but faith rescues you. It rhymes all the way and flows well.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2015
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Thank you Robina, for the outstanding rating and comments and encouraging stars, blessings, Roy,