The Herd On the Hillside
Short Story30 total reviews
Comment from Antoine Charlemaine
Oh, yes! Very, very clever, Michael. A inventive, creative, ingenious twist on the old 'wolf in sheep's clothing'. So that's why we don't employ shepherds these days! They're all et up..
Love it.
Ant.
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Oh, yes! Very, very clever, Michael. A inventive, creative, ingenious twist on the old 'wolf in sheep's clothing'. So that's why we don't employ shepherds these days! They're all et up..
Love it.
Ant.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2015
Comment from jpduck
I thought this was immaculately, if somewhat floridly, written. But I felt it contained a fundamental contradiction which rankled a bit for me. In Paragraph 2 you write, 'a werewolf proved no match for an angry mob'. But in the final paragraph (with its splendid final sentence) you imply that weresheep would be omnipotent. So, my question is, why wouldn't a weresheep 'prove no match for an angry mob'?
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I thought this was immaculately, if somewhat floridly, written. But I felt it contained a fundamental contradiction which rankled a bit for me. In Paragraph 2 you write, 'a werewolf proved no match for an angry mob'. But in the final paragraph (with its splendid final sentence) you imply that weresheep would be omnipotent. So, my question is, why wouldn't a weresheep 'prove no match for an angry mob'?
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Comment Written 08-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2015
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It wouldn't be one weresheep. It would be a herd of them. Once the other werewolves saw the success of the one who had changed into a sheep then they would've done so also. Eventually the herd would've been all wolves in sheep's clothing. Plus, an angry mob wouldn't have any idea that a sheep was a danger, so there would be a complete element of surprise as well. Hope that helps. mikey
Comment from Dawn Munro
Oooh, "You should be asking, 'When did that happen'" << nice conclusion! What a great story. I felt as if I were reading one of the old master horror writers, Mikey - I enjoyed this very much. Best of luck in the contest!
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Oooh, "You should be asking, 'When did that happen'" << nice conclusion! What a great story. I felt as if I were reading one of the old master horror writers, Mikey - I enjoyed this very much. Best of luck in the contest!
Comment Written 08-Jan-2015
Comment from Sankey
Wow! What a story. Loved the word "transmogrify" I have a picture here of a wolf in sheep's clothing. If I had known you could have used it hehe! hey! NO SPAGS!@ Shock horror!
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Wow! What a story. Loved the word "transmogrify" I have a picture here of a wolf in sheep's clothing. If I had known you could have used it hehe! hey! NO SPAGS!@ Shock horror!
Comment Written 08-Jan-2015
Comment from nordicgirl
A tremendous commentary on the state if the world. What an exceptional meyaphorical tale this is. I so love the subtle way you tell this. Great respect for the reader's intelligence makes the impact powerful. This should win, but the voters are not always aware of something with depth. Good luck!!
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A tremendous commentary on the state if the world. What an exceptional meyaphorical tale this is. I so love the subtle way you tell this. Great respect for the reader's intelligence makes the impact powerful. This should win, but the voters are not always aware of something with depth. Good luck!!
Comment Written 08-Jan-2015
Comment from Dean Kuch
Yes, it has indeed already happened I fear, Mikey. Societal influences today -- even up to and including the highest elected officials in our own nation -- are rife with corruption, volatile violence, questionable thinking, and the common man is left holding the bag and paying the consequence.
When will we ever learn? It's probably already too late.
Nice take on the prompt. Best of luck to you.
~Dean
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Yes, it has indeed already happened I fear, Mikey. Societal influences today -- even up to and including the highest elected officials in our own nation -- are rife with corruption, volatile violence, questionable thinking, and the common man is left holding the bag and paying the consequence.
When will we ever learn? It's probably already too late.
Nice take on the prompt. Best of luck to you.
~Dean
Comment Written 08-Jan-2015
Comment from mfowler
An intriguing concept, Mikey. The hills are alive with the howls of sheepish. You know how to raise the Ba in this horror fiction. This story has an interesting construction, with this third person narrative chronicling the Laserta Madrigal story as she uses her transmogrification skills to set up the possibility of werewolves outnumbering sheeps on the hillsides. Shepherd's Pie is the main delight. A spooky read with a great plot. Good Luck with this.
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An intriguing concept, Mikey. The hills are alive with the howls of sheepish. You know how to raise the Ba in this horror fiction. This story has an interesting construction, with this third person narrative chronicling the Laserta Madrigal story as she uses her transmogrification skills to set up the possibility of werewolves outnumbering sheeps on the hillsides. Shepherd's Pie is the main delight. A spooky read with a great plot. Good Luck with this.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2015
Comment from GracieAnn
Mikey, I liked this Horror Fiction in a Flash contest entry. It is plain spoken but holds a wise warning within. It makes me think of the verse, "The heart is deceitfully wicked. Who can know it?" It held my interest and I found it creative. Nice work. All the best in the contest. :0 GracieAnn
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Mikey, I liked this Horror Fiction in a Flash contest entry. It is plain spoken but holds a wise warning within. It makes me think of the verse, "The heart is deceitfully wicked. Who can know it?" It held my interest and I found it creative. Nice work. All the best in the contest. :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 08-Jan-2015
Comment from giraffmang
Another fantastic tale and well written story.
Taking the prompt totally at face value and on a literal level. Also a meditation on the evil of man and what lurks beneath the surface.
A good strong entry into the competition.
The last line is superb and chilling.
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Another fantastic tale and well written story.
Taking the prompt totally at face value and on a literal level. Also a meditation on the evil of man and what lurks beneath the surface.
A good strong entry into the competition.
The last line is superb and chilling.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2015
Comment from CR Delport
That last sentence change the whole complexity of the story. The people was not even aware that it already happened. Quite interesting and well written. Good luck in the contest.
Have a great day.
Christelle.
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That last sentence change the whole complexity of the story. The people was not even aware that it already happened. Quite interesting and well written. Good luck in the contest.
Have a great day.
Christelle.
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Comment Written 08-Jan-2015
