Comment from tfawcus

Excellent

Poor old Santa, 'sentenced' to oblivion for another 12 months, unless he can re-invent himself. I'll bet he has an Easter Bunny suit stashed away somewhere though! Happy New Year to you!

 Comment Written 01-Jan-2015

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reply by the author on 01-Jan-2015

Tony, I'm betting he has floppy ears and a pink nose somewhere. Maybe even an Uncle Sam outfit for July. :-)

Comment from mfowler

Excellent

Ho, Ho, Ho
This is both clever and funny. Yes, there's nothing more redundant than a Santa in January. Banished from the Malls. Probably go back to setting up displays in stores. Your final line, is, of course, the key to Ho,ho, hos. Not Santa Claus, but the punny 'subordinate clause', that grammatically inferior, who hasn't such a big contract, who works in the mall between Santa gigs. Good senryu, as it is an ironic view of the human condition.
Very enjoyable.

 Comment Written 01-Jan-2015

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reply by the author on 01-Jan-2015

What a great solid review. Thanks a heap, mfowler.

Comment from maggieadams

Excellent

That last line is perfect....what a perfect end to the year and perfect end to a haiku. Subordinate clauses is a grammatical term as you obviously know, meaning dependent on the context around it to make complete....just like Santa needs Christmas....great job.

 Comment Written 01-Jan-2015

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reply by the author on 01-Jan-2015

Thanks goodness, reviews caught the last line too although in the end I changed it to "dependent clauses" just to make sure.

reply by maggieadams on 01-Jan-2015

I loved subordinate clauses...it has so many meanings....

Comment from emrpoems

Excellent

I always hated to be working for a boss and engineered things to be my own boss so I can imagine Santa's position
Good satori line and superb presentation.
Happy New Year to you and your family

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 Comment Written 01-Jan-2015

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reply by the author on 01-Jan-2015

Thanks for sharing your story and the detailed comments.
HNY to you and your loved ones too.

Comment from kiwijenny

Excellent

And with all those subordinate clauses there will be someone out there who is Clause-trophobic. Ho Ho Ho
Or was that a little Santa -monious? Yikes it's 2015 and I rang in the new year with puns...yeah baby
God bless
HAPPY NEW YEAR

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 Comment Written 01-Jan-2015

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reply by the author on 01-Jan-2015

Hey, I call it a good poem when it brings out the creativity in others. Got a kick out of your word play.