Storm Signals
When you live in a typhoon path, be prepared for the worst32 total reviews
Comment from robina1978
Lovely photo that complements your little poem very well. You describe what a bad storm can do. Do you live in a typhoon area? If I think about this it already terrifies me.
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Lovely photo that complements your little poem very well. You describe what a bad storm can do. Do you live in a typhoon area? If I think about this it already terrifies me.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2014
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Thanks my friend for the warm comments and the five stars too. Yes I live in a typhoon area visited by storms for ten months in a year. So we are almost battered by monthly dosage of flood and heavy rains, thunder and lightning. But God protects us despite the odds against us.
Comment from butterfly4265
I reviewed one of your poems yesterday and this is just as excellent. You once again have managed to convey a true sense of the storm where you can almost feel the thunder, wind and rain from just a few words. Very well done!
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I reviewed one of your poems yesterday and this is just as excellent. You once again have managed to convey a true sense of the storm where you can almost feel the thunder, wind and rain from just a few words. Very well done!
Comment Written 11-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2014
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Thanks my friend for reading and appreciating my work. You inspired me, thanks again.
Comment from Dean Kuch
Based upon my very limited knowledge of the haiku form, Nassus, I would say this qualifies perfectly as a haiku. It has a nature theme, two interconnected lines, and your satori, comparing the rolling sounds of thunder to that of a drum was very well executed. It also has less than 17 syllables, with a 4-4-2 count. The only thing that haiku purists might knock is that it includes a picture, as many say haiku should speak for itself. But, as you've stated, this is not a haiku, per say, so you have every right to display your stunning picture you you wish.
Excellent work! ~Dean
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Based upon my very limited knowledge of the haiku form, Nassus, I would say this qualifies perfectly as a haiku. It has a nature theme, two interconnected lines, and your satori, comparing the rolling sounds of thunder to that of a drum was very well executed. It also has less than 17 syllables, with a 4-4-2 count. The only thing that haiku purists might knock is that it includes a picture, as many say haiku should speak for itself. But, as you've stated, this is not a haiku, per say, so you have every right to display your stunning picture you you wish.
Excellent work! ~Dean
Comment Written 11-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2014
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Thanks a lot my friend for the very intelligent review of my work and for being honest. Thanks for considering this an excellent work. God bless. Susan
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You're very welcome, Susan. It's always a pleasure. :)
~Dean
Comment from c_lucas
The length of the poem isn't as important the quality. Your poem is short and to the point. This is very well written. Good job.
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The length of the poem isn't as important the quality. Your poem is short and to the point. This is very well written. Good job.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2014
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Thanks my friend for considering this poem, very well written. May Jesus bless you more.
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You're welcome, Susan. Charlie
Comment from Glasstruth
Storm Signals could relate to a number of warnings, as my dreams seem to be of that so often. Read your author notes, and I think it's sometimes better to write without a form in mind. The typhoon is terrible, but is it just nature, or maybe global warming as well? Well done. Les
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Storm Signals could relate to a number of warnings, as my dreams seem to be of that so often. Read your author notes, and I think it's sometimes better to write without a form in mind. The typhoon is terrible, but is it just nature, or maybe global warming as well? Well done. Les
Comment Written 11-Dec-2014
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Thanks Les for considering this poem well done, no matter how short it is. Thanks for the five stars again. May Jesus bless you more.
Comment from misscookie
I like the artwork you choose for your poem
it is a perfect match.
some times things come to you without rhyme or reason and it could be your best work,
and this was truly on point.
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I like the artwork you choose for your poem
it is a perfect match.
some times things come to you without rhyme or reason and it could be your best work,
and this was truly on point.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2014
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Thanks a lot my friend for understanding the decisions of writers to write sometimes without a rhyme or reason. Thanks too, for the warm review and the five stars. May Jesus bless you more.
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Your very welcome. have a nice day
Cookie
Comment from Jackarrie
Hi
I like this short poem about how the storm signals with the water pellets that sound like a drum roll.
water pellets
drop from drenched clouds
drums roll
Well done
Mary
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Hi
I like this short poem about how the storm signals with the water pellets that sound like a drum roll.
water pellets
drop from drenched clouds
drums roll
Well done
Mary
Comment Written 11-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2014
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Thanks Mary for considering this poem well done. I do appreciate it. God bless.
Comment from kiwisteveh
And yet it works quite ell as a haiku. The rain storm is the kigo or seasonal reference and the 'drums roll' is an effective satori - the moment of insight.
Good alliteration in line 2 as well and the drum reference adds an aural image.
Steve
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2014
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And yet it works quite ell as a haiku. The rain storm is the kigo or seasonal reference and the 'drums roll' is an effective satori - the moment of insight.
Good alliteration in line 2 as well and the drum reference adds an aural image.
Steve
Comment Written 11-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2014
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Thanks a lot Steve for the intelligent and very positive review of this poem. I am deeply humbled. God bless. Susan
Comment from linsbm
Word cannot be expressed meaningfully but not always powerful and energetic. But this one, is super typhoon in its impact in the delivery of each and rolls like thunder. Great short poem. Thanks for sharing.} Lin
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Word cannot be expressed meaningfully but not always powerful and energetic. But this one, is super typhoon in its impact in the delivery of each and rolls like thunder. Great short poem. Thanks for sharing.} Lin
Comment Written 11-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2014
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Thanks Lin for the positive review and the five stars too. God bless.
Comment from royowen
A nicely conceived poetic work, it is very smooth and very neat, both in appearance, and in creativity, it's difficult to get anything meaningful out of these short forms, but this work combined with the artwork is quite good. well done, blessings, Roy.
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2014
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A nicely conceived poetic work, it is very smooth and very neat, both in appearance, and in creativity, it's difficult to get anything meaningful out of these short forms, but this work combined with the artwork is quite good. well done, blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2014
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Thanks Roy for appreciating this poem, thanks for the very warm review. May Jesus bless you more.
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Most welcome