Geoffrey's Musings.
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "Sharing Your Joy."A book of Stories, Essays and Poetry.
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Comment from Tomes Johnston
I know exactly where the author is coming from in this piece of work. My fiance and I ate trying for a baby and after a miscarriage I despair about our chances. We love children and it is wonderful T pls with the children of others. Maybe we will have one ourselves yet.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2014
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I know exactly where the author is coming from in this piece of work. My fiance and I ate trying for a baby and after a miscarriage I despair about our chances. We love children and it is wonderful T pls with the children of others. Maybe we will have one ourselves yet.
Comment Written 16-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2014
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AMEn Bro we can pray in that vein. God Bless and thanks for sharing have not seen you around FS for some time.
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I am busy with my degree at the moment but I must find time to write again.
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Had a feeling you were busy with something important. Gonna meet Reaching for the stars next Month ya! First up close and personal with a fellow believer and FS'er, right here in a local coffee shop!.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your picture is sooo good. I enjoyed reading this poem. I enjoyed the expression the picture caught of the two in the picture. It looks like both are a bit unsure of the things going on around them. I would change one thing:
make the blue background more light (sky) blue and less neon blue. I understand the reason for the pink text. However, the blue is fighting with it. Anyway, good job and thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2014
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Your picture is sooo good. I enjoyed reading this poem. I enjoyed the expression the picture caught of the two in the picture. It looks like both are a bit unsure of the things going on around them. I would change one thing:
make the blue background more light (sky) blue and less neon blue. I understand the reason for the pink text. However, the blue is fighting with it. Anyway, good job and thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 16-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2014
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Hi friend thanks thought you were talking about the photo duh realise you mean the actual poem appreciate your coming by. The bub is now around 40 ha!
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Is this better?
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Yes, I believe the blue is better. There is still something odd about the way the background color interacts with the text color. However, that could just be me. This blue is better than the other choice.
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OK well darker or lighter pref do you think?
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Not colour blind are we?? HEHE!! Kidding.
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How about a light pink background with a darker (maroon) background? No, I am not color blind. I know you meant that in jest. However, sometimes what we see on our finished product is not the same as what the readers see. There seems to be a 'neon' look to the pink text.
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Did you mean light pink back ground and maroon font? Will try that. thanks for your time.
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Have a look now thanks.
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PERFECT! Did I say perfect! Yes, I really like it.
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Aww thanks. Could not find a deep Maroon colour. Maybe it is called something else.
Comment from royowen
A nice, sentimentally piece written here Geoff, you mentioned that you and your wife couldn't have children, maybe adoption or being being foster parents could have been an option! Well done, nicely written tribute, blessings, Roy.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2014
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A nice, sentimentally piece written here Geoff, you mentioned that you and your wife couldn't have children, maybe adoption or being being foster parents could have been an option! Well done, nicely written tribute, blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 16-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2014
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Hi Bro I doubt if they would have allowed us to adopt as we are both disabled. But I am sure we would have got around it, if Louise's Mother didn't take over. Read what she said in the chapter when we told her we wanted to get married. all those years ago haha. Thanks Bro.
Comment from Eric1
Hi sankey, the perfect poem for the first time mother/father, they all cling on doting, all the Aunts and uncles come around needing a cuddle, well written and observed my friend.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2014
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Hi sankey, the perfect poem for the first time mother/father, they all cling on doting, all the Aunts and uncles come around needing a cuddle, well written and observed my friend.
Comment Written 16-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2014
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Yeah right. Could tell you a few stories. Thanks for the great review.
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You are very welcome Sankey.
Comment from michaelcahill
Hahaha! I'm scared to death to hold one of those things!!!! I've had a couple named after me and they practically threw one of them in my arms, Mikayla. I've never been so terrified in my life. I didn't drop her or damage her. She looked at me like I was nuts! My "kids" are in there fifties. I get funny looks in Walmart when they call me Dad. Mostly looks of sympathy. I guess they wonder how in the world it all came about that I look younger than my "kids"! You look pretty at home with the whole idea. Kudos! mikey
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Hahaha! I'm scared to death to hold one of those things!!!! I've had a couple named after me and they practically threw one of them in my arms, Mikayla. I've never been so terrified in my life. I didn't drop her or damage her. She looked at me like I was nuts! My "kids" are in there fifties. I get funny looks in Walmart when they call me Dad. Mostly looks of sympathy. I guess they wonder how in the world it all came about that I look younger than my "kids"! You look pretty at home with the whole idea. Kudos! mikey
Comment Written 16-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2014
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Ta mate appreciate ur wonderful review God Bless
Comment from CR Delport
I remember when my son was born. I had to fight a crowd for a little bit of his attention :) They are so precious at that age. This is well written.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2014
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I remember when my son was born. I had to fight a crowd for a little bit of his attention :) They are so precious at that age. This is well written.
Comment Written 16-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2014
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thanks mate glad you came by.
Comment from Ben Colder
Nothing is more precious than a child. Especially of your own. God;s tinder blessings. Picture is Ok. looks as if the sun is shining . Well done. Thanks for sharing. Blessings
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2014
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Nothing is more precious than a child. Especially of your own. God;s tinder blessings. Picture is Ok. looks as if the sun is shining . Well done. Thanks for sharing. Blessings
Comment Written 16-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2014
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Thanks Bro appreciate your comments. The picture is almost 40 years old now ha.
Comment from DSMalott
Great tribute.
Sounds like she did not want to share the joy of a new birth with all of the others who crowd around and can hardly wait to have their turn. Our poor first grandchild was passed around like a football to a hundred halfbacks. And I didn't get near enough time those first few week. :)
Good rhyme sequence throughout.
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reply by the author on 16-Oct-2014
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Great tribute.
Sounds like she did not want to share the joy of a new birth with all of the others who crowd around and can hardly wait to have their turn. Our poor first grandchild was passed around like a football to a hundred halfbacks. And I didn't get near enough time those first few week. :)
Good rhyme sequence throughout.
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Comment Written 16-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2014
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Thanks new friend have not seen your stuff before! Are you a newby on FS? Actually one person I am thinking of her sister actually withheld her new born from her own Mother for nearly a year. She was a blonde if that has anything to do with it. I think it was partly the Dad's fault he came from a weird family as well.
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I am new since August and little by little am uploading writing projects and learning the art of helpful reviewing.
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Welcome to FS I came a year ago last July. I am getting real close to finshing my Autobiography. Sorry no rewards around except possibly Chapter 28 on Friends that just had a title change and some new info added. Still a big edit to go and sort out the pictures for the Published edition.
Again, welcome. Will look and see what you are writing.
Comment from Jay Squires
If that isn't a loving Uncle, Geoff, I'd have to change my definition and not go by the bliss I see on your face.
If you didn't have that lovely one-stockinged lassie on your lap, a bundle borrowed from your brother or sister, your poem would have a hint of sadness to it.
They ultimately took their daughter back, but they could not take back (nor would they want to) the love you borrowed and kept in your heart.
I wish I had a six for this, Geoff.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2014
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If that isn't a loving Uncle, Geoff, I'd have to change my definition and not go by the bliss I see on your face.
If you didn't have that lovely one-stockinged lassie on your lap, a bundle borrowed from your brother or sister, your poem would have a hint of sadness to it.
They ultimately took their daughter back, but they could not take back (nor would they want to) the love you borrowed and kept in your heart.
I wish I had a six for this, Geoff.
Comment Written 16-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2014
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Hey mate she is now almost forty. Sadly she has chosen not to be a MUm her self. My brother and sis in law reckoned I was a good uncle ha. This one was the first of my favourite brother's children he now has twin grandchildren in Poland (2yrs old in December)and 2 others in Queensland in their teens.
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
Wait for that such short bliss, (I would change this to waiting.)
A very meaningful poem and I'm glad you decided to share it. Great pix, my friend~Debbie
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reply by the author on 16-Oct-2014
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Wait for that such short bliss, (I would change this to waiting.)
A very meaningful poem and I'm glad you decided to share it. Great pix, my friend~Debbie
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Comment Written 16-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2014
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Thanks Debbie for the suggestion work on it soon.
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Thanks Debbie I did that correction appreciate you coming by.