Apollo's First Love
Rondeau Redouble28 total reviews
Comment from Phil1:6
I have never heard Greek mythology put so beautifully and concisely. It was very enjoyable to read. The story is very interesting and God and gods is such an amiable topic. I prefer Jesus of course but that Greek is not so flowery and it is lovely but not like this . gods have a very dramatic life and everything has such all-earth proportions. This is a tragedy but quite light hearted with any heaviness removed. Thanks
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2014
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I have never heard Greek mythology put so beautifully and concisely. It was very enjoyable to read. The story is very interesting and God and gods is such an amiable topic. I prefer Jesus of course but that Greek is not so flowery and it is lovely but not like this . gods have a very dramatic life and everything has such all-earth proportions. This is a tragedy but quite light hearted with any heaviness removed. Thanks
Comment Written 29-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2014
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Thank you for a great review, Phil 1:6. Thank you for sharing your insights on the topic. I appreciate the encouraging comments about the writing and am pleased that you enjoyed reading this poem.
Comment from kiwijenny
but what Apollo does not know
is Cupid plays a wicked game.
A dart of lead will bring love low
so Cupid takes most careful aim
and Daphne's heart recoils with shame.
Apollo trails her to and fro;
she runs and calls her father's name.
Enchantment now begins to glow:
I love your story in a poem and learning about daphne and Apollo . I love the fragrant daphne flower
God bless
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2014
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but what Apollo does not know
is Cupid plays a wicked game.
A dart of lead will bring love low
so Cupid takes most careful aim
and Daphne's heart recoils with shame.
Apollo trails her to and fro;
she runs and calls her father's name.
Enchantment now begins to glow:
I love your story in a poem and learning about daphne and Apollo . I love the fragrant daphne flower
God bless
Comment Written 28-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2014
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Thank you for the encouraging remarks, kiwijenny. I am happy you enjoyed it and liked learning about Daphne and Apollo. It is one of my favorite myths. I cut out a lot of details from the story because I didn't want the notes to get too long. I am tempted to try the myth as a short story sometime down the road. Thank again. Debi
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Debi that would be great a modern Daphne and Apollo...any of the myths a Narcissus and Echo...
Comment from Terror2s
I love mythology so this was a treat to read. Your synopsis helped give the poem greater impact. I thought the words flowed very nicely. T2
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2014
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I love mythology so this was a treat to read. Your synopsis helped give the poem greater impact. I thought the words flowed very nicely. T2
Comment Written 28-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2014
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I am so happy to have you say it was a treat and that you love mythology, T2. Thank you for pointing out what you liked so I know what worked. I appreciate the encouragement. Debi
Comment from daljit
A beautiful descriptive poem fitting very well with art work. The story of Apollo expressed in perfect meter and rhyme. It deserved to be entered in contest. I have learned a lot from this poem. Thank you for sharing a
true work of art.
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2014
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A beautiful descriptive poem fitting very well with art work. The story of Apollo expressed in perfect meter and rhyme. It deserved to be entered in contest. I have learned a lot from this poem. Thank you for sharing a
true work of art.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2014
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Thank you for the kind comments about the writing. I am happy you enjoyed it, and learned something new. "A true work of art" You are going to make me smile for a long time with that statement. Thank you!
Comment from royowen
A beautifully written poem about one of the great heroes of Greek mythology, great poetic expression written in this poem! Enjambment was good, the writing smooth and fluid, the subject was well expressed and comprehensively addressed, nice abab rhyming, eloquent language, nice even meter! Well done, blessings, Roy.
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2014
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A beautifully written poem about one of the great heroes of Greek mythology, great poetic expression written in this poem! Enjambment was good, the writing smooth and fluid, the subject was well expressed and comprehensively addressed, nice abab rhyming, eloquent language, nice even meter! Well done, blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2014
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Such an a encouraging review with such nice comments about the writing, Roy. You make my day brighter. Thank you so much. Debi
Comment from Veeb
Very enjoyable and creative! I liked, 'enchantment now begins to grow' - very descriptive and a good word choice. Tells a good story. Congratulations on a fine poem. Well done!
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2014
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Very enjoyable and creative! I liked, 'enchantment now begins to grow' - very descriptive and a good word choice. Tells a good story. Congratulations on a fine poem. Well done!
Comment Written 28-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2014
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Thank you, Veeb. I appreciate the kind comments and also you pointing out the line you liked and why.
Comment from Nosha17
This poetic form suits this poem very well. I am glad you have written about Greek mythology, I have forgotten most of it so this is a nice reminder. Good use of descriptive language and rhyming to convey your message. Lovely picture. Faye
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reply by the author on 01-Oct-2014
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This poetic form suits this poem very well. I am glad you have written about Greek mythology, I have forgotten most of it so this is a nice reminder. Good use of descriptive language and rhyming to convey your message. Lovely picture. Faye
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Comment Written 28-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2014
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Thank you for the encouraging review, Faye. I am happy you enjoyed it and the Greek mythology is was based on. Debi
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi W.J.,
Lovely artwork you paired perfectly with this great poem with an excellent story. It's almost like you wrote the story around artwork it matches so well.
Beautiful presentation!
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax (*.*)
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reply by the author on 01-Oct-2014
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Hi W.J.,
Lovely artwork you paired perfectly with this great poem with an excellent story. It's almost like you wrote the story around artwork it matches so well.
Beautiful presentation!
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax (*.*)
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Comment Written 28-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2014
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Hi Jax,
I had chosen what I thought was the perfect picture, but could not figure out how to download it--then I found this lovely piece on FanArt and it seemed to work. Thank you for the lovely review and good wishes. I appreciate it.
Debi
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It's gorgeous!
I have the best luck with Shutterstock.com. I download the artwork/photo to a folder on my computer, then it's a simple upload into your work on FS. They have a great collection of 'stuff!' (*.*)
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Thank your for the suggestion, Jax. I'll try that and maybe I'll have better luck. I got lucky this time with the artwork. I appreciate your help.
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No problem. Glad to help. (*.*)