senryru (my life)
contest entry29 total reviews
Comment from RYME4U
This is well done and presented in a very attractive manner. I like the way you have expressed yourself here. The form is done perfectly. Good job
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This is well done and presented in a very attractive manner. I like the way you have expressed yourself here. The form is done perfectly. Good job
Comment Written 28-Aug-2014
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Thank you
Comment from JM
You said plenty. You wrote a little philosophical senryru. I think most of us have a piece of our puzzles missing now and then. The challenge is to find it. Great poem.
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You said plenty. You wrote a little philosophical senryru. I think most of us have a piece of our puzzles missing now and then. The challenge is to find it. Great poem.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2014
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Thank you
Comment from Lovinia
Hi Mystery Poet
Ironical and provides a chuckle ... I can identify well with this one. Clever and strong word use. I liked the alliteration of "puzzle/piece" and the assonance of soft and hard 'i' . Excellent presentation. Good luck in the contest ... a sure contender for high placement. Warm Regards - Lovinia xoxo
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Hi Mystery Poet
Ironical and provides a chuckle ... I can identify well with this one. Clever and strong word use. I liked the alliteration of "puzzle/piece" and the assonance of soft and hard 'i' . Excellent presentation. Good luck in the contest ... a sure contender for high placement. Warm Regards - Lovinia xoxo
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Thank you
Comment from Acquired Taste
Isn't that the truth? How many of us must feel that way on occasion when things just don't seem to fit. There are days I think my 'puzzle/life' has dropped to the floor and pieces have fallen through the air vent.
Like this very much and the artwork is terrific! Best of luck in the contest. AT=/
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Isn't that the truth? How many of us must feel that way on occasion when things just don't seem to fit. There are days I think my 'puzzle/life' has dropped to the floor and pieces have fallen through the air vent.
Like this very much and the artwork is terrific! Best of luck in the contest. AT=/
Comment Written 28-Aug-2014
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Thank you for the great review and stars
Comment from kiwisteveh
... and as we grow older, more and more of the pieces go missing! I'm sure they're just under the couch here somewhere - hold on while I have a look....
I guess I'm trying to say you have used a very apt image.
Good luck.
Steve
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... and as we grow older, more and more of the pieces go missing! I'm sure they're just under the couch here somewhere - hold on while I have a look....
I guess I'm trying to say you have used a very apt image.
Good luck.
Steve
Comment Written 28-Aug-2014
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Thank you for the great review and stars
Comment from mikemagine
Spot on! And imo, we'll not be complete this side of our graves. "Now we know in part and see in part"...We're finite beings wanting to be infinite...
Thanks for sharing.
Mike
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Spot on! And imo, we'll not be complete this side of our graves. "Now we know in part and see in part"...We're finite beings wanting to be infinite...
Thanks for sharing.
Mike
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Comment Written 28-Aug-2014
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Thank you for the great review and stars
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You got it:)
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You got it Debbie!!
Mike
Comment from seaglass
Your poem describes what I've often though of my life or that I was assigned to a competition gave without being given the rules.
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Your poem describes what I've often though of my life or that I was assigned to a competition gave without being given the rules.
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Comment Written 28-Aug-2014
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Thank you for the great review and stars
Comment from mauial
This is a great senryu. I like that you used the first line for the irony instead of the last as usual. I love the comparison to a jig saw puzzle with missing pieces.
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This is a great senryu. I like that you used the first line for the irony instead of the last as usual. I love the comparison to a jig saw puzzle with missing pieces.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2014
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Thank you for the great review and stars
Comment from flamingstar
I don't that could be improved upon. I love to be around people who don't take themselves too seriously. Self-deprecating humor is a first-rate self-defense strategy!
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I don't that could be improved upon. I love to be around people who don't take themselves too seriously. Self-deprecating humor is a first-rate self-defense strategy!
Comment Written 28-Aug-2014
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Thank you for the great review and stars