Comment from nelliesellie

Excellent

I love the picture. I love the poem. The woman went on a diet and she was doing good. Then she was tempted. She gave in. Can not beat the genes. She was blessed with a big bottom. Great work. Fun read. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 27-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 27-Aug-2014

Hi Ellie :) Thank you so much for your lovely feedback and good luck wishes. I appreciate both! Kindest regards as always, Debra :) x

Comment from Amenian Aypotheeno

Excellent

Ha ha! Yes diet phase might well be in order but to keep that wobbly backside in shape to shimmy and shake whilst doing that rumba! Don't give in to temptation and have the cream top off that cake! This write brought a smile and has a good rhythm pacing that I am sure the Queen band member would be proud off... so I say wiggle those hips and shake your maracas! I wish luck in this competition and thanks for brightening my day with this humorous and fun ditty.

 Comment Written 27-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 27-Aug-2014

Hi AA :) Thank you so much for your fun feedback - I'm going to have to go out and get some maracas just so that I can do as I'm told and 'shake them!' Thanks also for your good luck wishes - muchly appreciated! Kindest regards, Debra :)

Comment from gypsycaravan

Excellent

This is just darling. You did a great job with the poem and he artwork you chose is fabulous. I hope you drag home a ribbon in the contest.

 Comment Written 27-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 27-Aug-2014

Thank you so much gypsycaravan for your lovely feedback - I really appreciate it :) Kindest regards as always, Debra

Comment from mauial

Excellent

This is very well written in rhyme with a good sense of humor too. I like how you incorporated the title of another song from the list in the last line.

 Comment Written 27-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 27-Aug-2014

Hi mauial :) Thank you for your great feedback. Kindest regards, Debra

Comment from Domino 2

Excellent

All my uncles and male cousins had big bellies and bald heads, Debs, so I know about the gene problem. :-)

Thankfully, I don't have a sweet tooth like you, but I wouldn't mind a fat bottom, as it would be something to hold my trousers up.

Thanks for creating the contest, and the smiles.

Good luck and best wishes, Ray. xx

 Comment Written 27-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 27-Aug-2014

Hi Ray :) genes are a bitch sometimes aren't they?! LOL
Thanks for your fun feedback and good luck wishes :) Debs x

Comment from Cajungirl

Excellent

hahaha, very funny. I am easily tempted by sweets such as cake especially when I call myself dieting. I don't diet anymore, I am a fat bottomed girl. LOL

Best of luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 27-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 27-Aug-2014

Hi Cajungirl :) Thank you for your great feedback and good luck wishes. I appreciate both! From one fat bottomed girl to another (you said it!) Kindest regards, Debra :)

reply by Cajungirl on 27-Aug-2014

you are very welcome.

Comment from TAB_that's me

Excellent

I do like where this old Queen song took you. It sounds like you have done great on your diet and I commend it - it is not easy (been there many times). Good luck in the contest.
Teresa

 Comment Written 27-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 27-Aug-2014

Hi Teresa :) Thank you for your great feedback and good luck wishes. I appreciate both! Kindest regards, Debra :)

Comment from granny goes viral

Excellent

Fat bottomed girls are all the rage now. Good poem, fantastic visual. Made me laugh. Laughing is almost as good as cake. Maybe better. Good job.

 Comment Written 27-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 27-Aug-2014

Hi Granny :) Thank you for your great feedback - nice to know having a big bum is on trend - at last!! You're right though, there's nothing like a good laugh :) Kindest regards, Debra :)

Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell

Excellent

LOL, Debra, that is soooo funny, especially seeing I have joined Slimming World to try and find my hips again! That cake looks divine! Your rhyme is perfect, is bounces along with the same rhythm of my hips as I bounce up the stairs! That cake still looks divine! Good luck in the contest, this one is brilliant! No 6 left. :( Sandra xsx

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 Comment Written 27-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 27-Aug-2014

Hi Sandra :) Thank you so much for your fun feedback and good luck wishes - I truly appreciate both and am glad you enjoyed the poem! I made a chocolate and courgette loaf the other day - it's delicious and it must be healthy right?!
Lots of love, Debra xx

Comment from Andrewajgblue

Excellent

I loved this its brilliant, i loved the picture also its so perfect, i liked the rhyming couplets, they were really fun and really worked well and i
noticed you got two song titles in there as well, genius, good luck its a great entry,
Andrew

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 Comment Written 27-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 27-Aug-2014

Hi Andrew :) Thank you of your great feedback and good luck wishes. I appreciate both! Kindest regards as always, Debra :)