Get Over It
Very Short Story (A contest entry)36 total reviews
Comment from krys123
Tony;
I really like sci-fi types of stories and this was totally brilliant and I enjoyed it immensely. Stereotypes she was how convenient for the people who have to reprogram the people who come in from off the street and different countries.
You handled this composure really well and the composition was done superbly. Your context, concept and grammar were all done correctly including your syntax.
Another scary thing is that maybe someday this will happen to all of us; a reprogramming of our capabilities, background and even emotions.
Thank you for sharing and posting this Tony and may the starshine need you the way through the darkest of night.
Alex
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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Tony;
I really like sci-fi types of stories and this was totally brilliant and I enjoyed it immensely. Stereotypes she was how convenient for the people who have to reprogram the people who come in from off the street and different countries.
You handled this composure really well and the composition was done superbly. Your context, concept and grammar were all done correctly including your syntax.
Another scary thing is that maybe someday this will happen to all of us; a reprogramming of our capabilities, background and even emotions.
Thank you for sharing and posting this Tony and may the starshine need you the way through the darkest of night.
Alex
Comment Written 21-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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Many thanks for another fine review, Alex. You do a fellow's ego good! I'm afraid you are right though, conformity seems to be king these days.
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You are so very welcome Tony.
Comment from kiwijenny
This reminds me of a Ray Bradbury short story ..and of 1984.....Very Big Brother....very articulate and sinister
Well done...thought provoking
God bless
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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This reminds me of a Ray Bradbury short story ..and of 1984.....Very Big Brother....very articulate and sinister
Well done...thought provoking
God bless
Comment Written 21-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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Thanks, Jenny. Conformity does sometimes seem to be king these days.
Comment from Spitfire
Chilling! And not far from the truth. Science is already cloning."cultural erasure" Oh, wouldn't the world be boring!
In some ways it's already happening. A fine entry.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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Chilling! And not far from the truth. Science is already cloning."cultural erasure" Oh, wouldn't the world be boring!
In some ways it's already happening. A fine entry.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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I'm afraid you are right, Spitfire, conformity is all the go these days.
Comment from Loren (7)
Hmm, unfortunately, it seems some things never change. You'd think by then some of us would have had an awakening. Great dialogue, by the way. Very, very real. Loren
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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Hmm, unfortunately, it seems some things never change. You'd think by then some of us would have had an awakening. Great dialogue, by the way. Very, very real. Loren
Comment Written 21-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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Thanks, Loren. You are right - it is a bit sad that we never seem to learn.
Comment from His Grayness
Well Tony...this one is certainly creative to say the least! I like the simple title" "GET OVER IT". I wish you the best in the short story contest as this one is really great! Vance
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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Well Tony...this one is certainly creative to say the least! I like the simple title" "GET OVER IT". I wish you the best in the short story contest as this one is really great! Vance
Comment Written 21-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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Thanks, Vance. I appreciate your supportive comment and good luck wishes.
Comment from Just2Write
Love your story, Tony - I like how you toy with words and make them play along (Migrants / Migraines) Customs as in habitual ways of doing things, and customs as in Immigration Stations.
I don't think we need to wait to 2092 to see this story attune more closely to reality. We already DO judge folks for what they cherish, and yes, sometimes for what they think.
Customs agents are the same the world over - Enforcers who can bully anyone they like. If you show any attitude at all, you'll get put into that cultural erasure line, for sure.
Great story. Very Orwellian.
Rose.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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Love your story, Tony - I like how you toy with words and make them play along (Migrants / Migraines) Customs as in habitual ways of doing things, and customs as in Immigration Stations.
I don't think we need to wait to 2092 to see this story attune more closely to reality. We already DO judge folks for what they cherish, and yes, sometimes for what they think.
Customs agents are the same the world over - Enforcers who can bully anyone they like. If you show any attitude at all, you'll get put into that cultural erasure line, for sure.
Great story. Very Orwellian.
Rose.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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You're not alone in thinking that I could not a few years off the fictitious scenario and call it fact!
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Darned straight. What a messed up world we live in. R.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Yes, it just may be that bad by the date you quote here, I am glad I won't be around to see it. I don't like what I can imagine happening in the near future. Good job, good luck Tony Nancy
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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Yes, it just may be that bad by the date you quote here, I am glad I won't be around to see it. I don't like what I can imagine happening in the near future. Good job, good luck Tony Nancy
Comment Written 21-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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Yes, conformity seems to be all that matters sometimes. A good thing there are poets to redress the balance! LOL
Comment from DALLAS01
What an interesting approach to this prompt. You have packed a whole lot of philosophy into this futuristic scene, capturing the essence of the threat of an attempt to create mass conformity.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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What an interesting approach to this prompt. You have packed a whole lot of philosophy into this futuristic scene, capturing the essence of the threat of an attempt to create mass conformity.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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Thanks, Dallas. I enjoyed the challenge of rewriting a 2000-word short story that was going nowhere and reducing it by 90% for the prompt.
Comment from TAB_that's me
Wow, this is a great entry for the contest. There are no spags that I found. I like where this took you and I agree with what you say. Good luck to you.
Teresa
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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Wow, this is a great entry for the contest. There are no spags that I found. I like where this took you and I agree with what you say. Good luck to you.
Teresa
Comment Written 21-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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Many thanks, Teresa for your kind review and good luck wishes!
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hi Tony - This is very good. I like the year 2092. A bit like 1984 - seemed a long way off when it was written. Big Brother and all that makes your story quite feasible - frightening. Like the migraine/migrants - good twist. People must conform or get out - I remember Julia Gillard and her views. It seems as time goes on Science fiction and fact are beginning to be less distinguishable. I think you have a good entry here and I wish you Good Luck in the contest. Kind regards Dorothy x
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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Hi Tony - This is very good. I like the year 2092. A bit like 1984 - seemed a long way off when it was written. Big Brother and all that makes your story quite feasible - frightening. Like the migraine/migrants - good twist. People must conform or get out - I remember Julia Gillard and her views. It seems as time goes on Science fiction and fact are beginning to be less distinguishable. I think you have a good entry here and I wish you Good Luck in the contest. Kind regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 21-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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Yes, it is sometimes scary to think how sci-fi becomes fact. I hope not in this case!