The moon and the sun
A Lune poem about the moon, 5-3-5 syllables24 total reviews
Comment from Nosha17
Lovely picture which compliments your words well. Good use of imagery and well chosen words to convey your thoughts. Good luck in the contest. FAye
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2014
Lovely picture which compliments your words well. Good use of imagery and well chosen words to convey your thoughts. Good luck in the contest. FAye
Comment Written 19-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2014
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Thanks for your kind and nice review. Have a good week, Ine
Comment from c_lucas
Your poetry is in high orbit this morning. It's very philosophical with a smooth flow of words, making for an interesting flow of words.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2014
Your poetry is in high orbit this morning. It's very philosophical with a smooth flow of words, making for an interesting flow of words.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2014
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Thanks for your kind and nice review. Have a good week, Ine
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You're welcome, Ine. Charlie
Comment from TAB_that's me
Ine, you have 6 syllables in the last line. This can easily be modified by taking out 'the'. If you decide to change it let me know and I will change my rating.
Tresa
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reply by the author on 19-Aug-2014
Ine, you have 6 syllables in the last line. This can easily be modified by taking out 'the'. If you decide to change it let me know and I will change my rating.
Tresa
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Comment Written 19-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2014
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Thanks for your kind and nice review. Have a good week, Ine
Comment from Joan E.
I like the way your tiny poem captures the cycles of nature so simply. You selected the perfect artwork to reinforce your theme. Best wishes in the 3-5-3 Lune contest- Joan
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reply by the author on 19-Aug-2014
I like the way your tiny poem captures the cycles of nature so simply. You selected the perfect artwork to reinforce your theme. Best wishes in the 3-5-3 Lune contest- Joan
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Comment Written 19-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2014
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Thanks for your kind and nice review. Have a good week, Ine