Zerubbabel Baxter
rhyming quatrains in 6/5/6/5148 total reviews
Comment from lappmellott
Once again, I love your children's poem and the picture of Sawyer and his friend. They are adorable. Nice to hear that you are a story teller at VBS.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2014
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Once again, I love your children's poem and the picture of Sawyer and his friend. They are adorable. Nice to hear that you are a story teller at VBS.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2014
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lappmellott, thanks so much - the littlest kids at VBS are just adorable :-) Brooke
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You're welcome. I still think you need to write and illustrate a children's book.
Comment from amahra
Wow you've enticed me to read that Bible story. I have an online Bible that voices the scriptures. I loved your story of Zerubbabel and Tobias. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2014
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Wow you've enticed me to read that Bible story. I have an online Bible that voices the scriptures. I loved your story of Zerubbabel and Tobias. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2014
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thank you, Amahra, for your generous sixth star and kind contest wishes :-) Brooke
Comment from Halfree
Started, read and asked, 'what?' Reread and declared, ok. Read again and knew it was a five.
Enjoyed this poem...don't know why...yes I do. It's well done and a joy to read. Thanks for a nice few minutes on hot August afternoon.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2014
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Started, read and asked, 'what?' Reread and declared, ok. Read again and knew it was a five.
Enjoyed this poem...don't know why...yes I do. It's well done and a joy to read. Thanks for a nice few minutes on hot August afternoon.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2014
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Thank you, Halfree, for your review. Was the poem difficult to understand? Brooke
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No not hard to understand
Comment from flamingstar
Very clever and engaging. I like the use of the parentheticals and they can come in handy if you're stuck for a rhyme. The ending was very satisfying and I appreciate the Bible lesson in your notes!
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2014
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Very clever and engaging. I like the use of the parentheticals and they can come in handy if you're stuck for a rhyme. The ending was very satisfying and I appreciate the Bible lesson in your notes!
Comment Written 07-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2014
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flamingstar, thank you so much for your generous response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Eternal Muse
Oh, what an adorable tale of Zerubbabel Baxter, with an endearing picture of Sawyer with his friend who we haven't seen yet.
Great rhymes and flow. Very entertaining.
They never moved eastward
and never moved west,
for each remained stubborn
and thought he knew best
Excellent afternoon read.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2014
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Oh, what an adorable tale of Zerubbabel Baxter, with an endearing picture of Sawyer with his friend who we haven't seen yet.
Great rhymes and flow. Very entertaining.
They never moved eastward
and never moved west,
for each remained stubborn
and thought he knew best
Excellent afternoon read.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2014
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Yelena, thank you, my friend :-) Yes, there are not as many photos of this friend since he just has occasional play dates with him :-) Brooke
Comment from Robert Lee Brown
Another great story in a poem for Sawyer's book. I love it; and, it teaches an important social lesson on the gives and takes in life. Thanks for sharing this masterpiece. Bob
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2014
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Another great story in a poem for Sawyer's book. I love it; and, it teaches an important social lesson on the gives and takes in life. Thanks for sharing this masterpiece. Bob
Comment Written 07-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2014
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Bob, thank you so very much for your generous review, my friend :-) Brooke
Comment from Ridley Williams
Hello Brooke,
I enjoyed this tale of two friends that let their stubborn attitudes rule their lives. You display wonderful originality in this splendid story of possibilities that might have occurred, with a little compromise.
An enjoyable read...had me smiling a few times, lol.
Best wishes, Bill
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2014
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Hello Brooke,
I enjoyed this tale of two friends that let their stubborn attitudes rule their lives. You display wonderful originality in this splendid story of possibilities that might have occurred, with a little compromise.
An enjoyable read...had me smiling a few times, lol.
Best wishes, Bill
Comment Written 07-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2014
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Bill, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from padumachitta
Hi. Well, I am glad you put the way to pronounce it in the notes! Again, a fun poem, though with a bit of a warninng as well. I like the bit about the ehsips going neirther east or west. padumachitta
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2014
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Hi. Well, I am glad you put the way to pronounce it in the notes! Again, a fun poem, though with a bit of a warninng as well. I like the bit about the ehsips going neirther east or west. padumachitta
Comment Written 07-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2014
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padumachitta, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Dawn Munro
Hahahahaha! Oh my goodness, what a great story! I loved this one, even though the ending was so sad (*grin*) - ten decades and the ship sinks, huh? Is that like, a hundred years? LOL!!! I guess it would rot after such a long time, but where were Zee and Tee? LOL. Fabulous moral, Brooke - a children's poem that is sure to explain compromise even to little ones.:) Best of luck!
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2014
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Hahahahaha! Oh my goodness, what a great story! I loved this one, even though the ending was so sad (*grin*) - ten decades and the ship sinks, huh? Is that like, a hundred years? LOL!!! I guess it would rot after such a long time, but where were Zee and Tee? LOL. Fabulous moral, Brooke - a children's poem that is sure to explain compromise even to little ones.:) Best of luck!
Comment Written 07-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2014
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Dawn, thank you so much :-) Brooke I assume Zee and Tee had turned to bones by then LOL
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sniff, sniffle, see what stubbornness gets us?
Comment from elchupakabra
Wow, Zerubbabel. That certainly is a mouthful. I really like the way you constructed this piece and shortened the names to Zee and Tee which also made for a good rhyme construct. As usual, your poetic prowess is as apparent as ever. Great work overall on this piece and best of luck in the contest, thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2014
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Wow, Zerubbabel. That certainly is a mouthful. I really like the way you constructed this piece and shortened the names to Zee and Tee which also made for a good rhyme construct. As usual, your poetic prowess is as apparent as ever. Great work overall on this piece and best of luck in the contest, thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2014
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elchupakabra, thank you so much :-) It's good to see you! Brooke