Comment from kiwisteveh

Excellent

Lovely haiku for this River Contest.

I had never heard of the 'Bridge of the Gods' - what an original name for a wonderful feat of engineering.

If I had one query about this piece, it would be whether putting the bridge in the first line makes it the focus, rather than the river, thus weakening the connection to the salmon.

I might be tempted to open with 'The mighty Columbia.'

Good luck.

Steve

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 Comment Written 24-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014

Very interesting comment, and I will look at it. Thank you for the review and critique.

Comment from Ben Colder

Excellent

Good contest piece. The Columbia is beautiful, especially along the shore when all the fruit orchards are in bloom. Best to you.

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 Comment Written 23-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 23-Jun-2014

Thank you, yes the Columbia is amazing as is the area around it.