Short Form Poetry
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Comment from royowen
I like your entry in this 'putting the sartori first ' haiku contest! I quite like this haiku, it's an abstract one, I don't know how you managed to do that! I like the artwork also which gives the mystery impetus, well done with this one, stands a chance! Good luck. Blessings, Roy.
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2014
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I like your entry in this 'putting the sartori first ' haiku contest! I quite like this haiku, it's an abstract one, I don't know how you managed to do that! I like the artwork also which gives the mystery impetus, well done with this one, stands a chance! Good luck. Blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2014
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How very encouraging. I do appreciate your extremely complimentary comments. A lot of great writers in this contest. I'm happy that people like my piece. Thank you so much, mikey
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
Oh how sad, Mikey. How utterly devoid of hope. Perhaps the moon long ago was a thriving planet, oh now I'm depressed! But you see how effective your haiku has been, three little lines can lay me low! Good luck with your poem. Perhaps it will bring a brighter day for you, Giddy
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2014
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Oh how sad, Mikey. How utterly devoid of hope. Perhaps the moon long ago was a thriving planet, oh now I'm depressed! But you see how effective your haiku has been, three little lines can lay me low! Good luck with your poem. Perhaps it will bring a brighter day for you, Giddy
Comment Written 18-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2014
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It is sad, I suppose. Well, I hope that the pictures we poets paint have an impact on those that sit idly by. Perhaps they will do something to prevent such terrible outcomes! I'm an optimist, though sometimes my poetry doesn't seem so. Just trying to shake things up. :) Thank you, mikey
Comment from c_lucas
A very interesting subject matter. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a good read.Your short poem has good imagery.
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A very interesting subject matter. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a good read.Your short poem has good imagery.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2014
Comment from country ranch writer
a vision of ones moon it is a scary thought although they say no moon is a good moon just making a poor funny hehe I need to go to bed I am getting silly
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a vision of ones moon it is a scary thought although they say no moon is a good moon just making a poor funny hehe I need to go to bed I am getting silly
Comment Written 18-Jun-2014
Comment from CR Delport
I wouldn't say like the moon, because the landscape on earth differ much from the moon, but maybe more like Venus, who they say was very earth-like millions of years ago. Good poem. Good luck.
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I wouldn't say like the moon, because the landscape on earth differ much from the moon, but maybe more like Venus, who they say was very earth-like millions of years ago. Good poem. Good luck.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2014
Comment from nordicgirl
Oh my! This little piece may be your finest. You have met this challenge and then some. Perfection in thought as you make it present tense by giving it the weight of prophecy. Excellent image as well. Something to contemplate and ponder. NG
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Oh my! This little piece may be your finest. You have met this challenge and then some. Perfection in thought as you make it present tense by giving it the weight of prophecy. Excellent image as well. Something to contemplate and ponder. NG
Comment Written 18-Jun-2014
Comment from seaglass
This is a great Haiku. perfect syllable count, great picture to present it as well. It paints a picture as it is suppose to do. Its a great response to the prompt.
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This is a great Haiku. perfect syllable count, great picture to present it as well. It paints a picture as it is suppose to do. Its a great response to the prompt.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2014
Comment from krys123
Mikey, first of all the picture that you have chosen works very well with your poem or Haiku. And it is very descriptive your last two lines and expressive as well as your first line or cutter line definitely is clear to support your other two lines. Thank you for sharing and posting this for everyone and may all your endeavors be good ones. By the way good luck in the contest.
Alex
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Mikey, first of all the picture that you have chosen works very well with your poem or Haiku. And it is very descriptive your last two lines and expressive as well as your first line or cutter line definitely is clear to support your other two lines. Thank you for sharing and posting this for everyone and may all your endeavors be good ones. By the way good luck in the contest.
Alex
Comment Written 18-Jun-2014
Comment from SLHarper
Wow! You really put the Satori first! Like, this is awesome in a way I couldn't have envisioned before. I read the prompt and thought, "huh?" But, thanks to you, I truly see the light. You actually foreshadowed your own insight about nature's future by putting the insight at the beginning! Crafty! I'm impressed!
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2014
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Wow! You really put the Satori first! Like, this is awesome in a way I couldn't have envisioned before. I read the prompt and thought, "huh?" But, thanks to you, I truly see the light. You actually foreshadowed your own insight about nature's future by putting the insight at the beginning! Crafty! I'm impressed!
Comment Written 18-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2014
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So delighted with your wonderful review. I entered this thing without a word written down. I figured the ten bucks would force me to come up with something! I have a tendency to write endings first in my poems and stories, so this came somewhat naturally to me. You have made my week. Thank you so much!!! mikey
Comment from Raphael Montonaro
Does the finger point to the moon or does the moon point to the finger? Great haiku in the ancient tradition. Basho would be proud. Great job!
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2014
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Does the finger point to the moon or does the moon point to the finger? Great haiku in the ancient tradition. Basho would be proud. Great job!
Comment Written 17-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2014
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That is some high praise indeed. So pleased that you enjoyed it. That has to be the most encouraging words I have ever heard. Thank you very much! mikey