Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

Stunning presentation of your poem
solid use of abcb rhyming
excellent iambic meter in 8/6/8/6 format and good use of enjambment to keep the thoughts flowing
This sounds really good when read aloud
soulful expression of emotion and I love the change in mood in the closing stanzas as the speaker reaches the other side of midnight :-) Brooke

 Comment Written 17-May-2014

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reply by the author on 17-May-2014

Thank you so much for this absolutely first class review Brooke. I'm just getting back into writing again and your review has given me a huge boost. Jaq xxx

Comment from GracieAnn

Excellent

Jaq, I found this write lilting in meter and well constructed. The honest appraisal of pain and the hope that is a choice on our part. Pain only controls as long as we give it permission. Well done. :0 GracieAnn

 Comment Written 17-May-2014

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reply by the author on 17-May-2014

Thank you so much GracieAne, you are correct of course, it only has the power we allow it. Light n love, Jaq xx

Comment from kiwijenny

Excellent

You will never find the cure for your insomnia if you come up with fantastic poems like this .......well written
On the other side of midnight
there dawns a brand new morn,
where I can start rebuilding
my dreams to be reborn.

On the other side of midnight
caressed by hope's delight,
my tears are now subsiding
and I won't give up the fight.
Never give up the fight
God bless

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 Comment Written 17-May-2014

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reply by the author on 17-May-2014

Many thanks Jenny so glad you enjoyed it :) xx