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Comment from Literature Dragon
An interesting poem. Both passages reveal a "yin and yang" sequence that balances out. It's also good to put the lighter piece of the poem at the end. Good job.
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An interesting poem. Both passages reveal a "yin and yang" sequence that balances out. It's also good to put the lighter piece of the poem at the end. Good job.
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Comment Written 28-Apr-2014
Comment from GWHARGIS
Very interesting and I'm not at all familiar with this challenge but I think you nailed it. I like that you personified both attributes. I liked the simple child like picture that you put with it. Great job on this. Good luck in the contest.
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Very interesting and I'm not at all familiar with this challenge but I think you nailed it. I like that you personified both attributes. I liked the simple child like picture that you put with it. Great job on this. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2014
Comment from Jackarrie
an interesting Sedoka, it has all the proper syllable count, Two different mind sets, one of selfishness, and one of selflessness.
good luck in the contest. Mary
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an interesting Sedoka, it has all the proper syllable count, Two different mind sets, one of selfishness, and one of selflessness.
good luck in the contest. Mary
Comment Written 28-Apr-2014
Comment from Domino 2
I was thrown slightly by 'Charm' as I wasn't clear whether this is personification of the 'gift of charm', OR whether it's the lady's name - I now assume it's the latter.
Good progression from selfishness to caring.
Good luck and best wishes, Ted
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I was thrown slightly by 'Charm' as I wasn't clear whether this is personification of the 'gift of charm', OR whether it's the lady's name - I now assume it's the latter.
Good progression from selfishness to caring.
Good luck and best wishes, Ted
Comment Written 28-Apr-2014
Comment from Jean Lutz
In six lines you capture the choice of free will. Not only follows the rules of writing but gives much food for thought. I wish you well with the entry.
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In six lines you capture the choice of free will. Not only follows the rules of writing but gives much food for thought. I wish you well with the entry.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2014
Comment from humpwhistle
Two different women, two different views of life
and its duties. Interesting that you name them
Charm and Faith. Well done.
Best of luck at the polls.
Peace, Lee
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Two different women, two different views of life
and its duties. Interesting that you name them
Charm and Faith. Well done.
Best of luck at the polls.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 28-Apr-2014
Comment from JavaJunkie
I think this is how it is supposed to be done! Very clever writing with excellent juxtaposition. I love the complimentary artwork as well as the very strong message....to charm is to deceive after all.
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I think this is how it is supposed to be done! Very clever writing with excellent juxtaposition. I love the complimentary artwork as well as the very strong message....to charm is to deceive after all.
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Comment Written 28-Apr-2014