The Little Dog That Wouldn't Let Go
Viewing comments for Chapter 32 "Bliss! Our Wonderful Wedding Day!"Subtitle: God Never Lets Go!
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Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi (*<*)
= Wow! Your job sounds like working for the state, here in the USA. Nightmare.
=LOTS of SPAG for you. (*_*)
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<> FYI: You have A LOT of REDUNDANT verbiage AND comma issues.
<> Lower case: air conditioning
= There was no Air Conditioning,
<> Comma errors.
<> Incorrect end of sentence ellipses (space before ellipses--only three periods).
<> Add = which = after darn windows for smoother flow.
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=YOURS=
An entirely different scenario, where we all froze to death, with the cold winds blowing freely through those darn windows, we could not close, to bless ourselves. I (r)ecently recovered some notes I had written in my frustration about my new position. Here they are, kindly re-typed for me by my dear wife......
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An entirely different scenario where we all froze to death, with the cold winds blowing freely through those darn windows, WHICH we could not close to bless ourselves. I recently recovered some notes I had written in my frustration about my new position. Here they are, kindly re-typed for me by my dear wife ...
<> Incorrect commas.
Also, Mr Chapman could have gone to the clerk covering that particular breakup[,] and spoken privately[,] with them[,] to avoid total embarrassment.
<> Incorrect commas.
<> Typo: exempted / exempt
I have tried to organize my work more and get the easier claims done to build up my output(,) but the slow work has to be done[,] and cannot continually be put aside. I was exempt[ed] from answering phones but
<> Comma need.
At one stage(,) Mr Chapman made what I consider to be a threat(,) if not personally(,) then generally to the Travel Expenses area that Donald Norfolk had said that a clerk's position had to be abolished
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<> Typo: day-dream / daydream
I was told that I should do at least 20 claims per day(,) and I attempted to do this. As has been alluded to in the reports, I do have difficulty with noise being distracting and in the 'open space' nature of our floor, every noise from one end of the building to the other can be heard(,) plus[,] of course(,) the deafening truck and traffic noises from one of the busiest intersections in the city(,) compounded by the lack of sealed windows. Working conditions in this area are quite difficult(,) and the lack of oxygen can tend to make one day[-]dream and slow down work.
<> Need space between above this section.
Some supervisors seem to have a better understanding of problems of hearing impaired than others. I think all supervisors of hearing impaired should be compelled to take some sort of course of familiarization with the problems involved.
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I agree with Ms Saltine's comment(,) and I appreciate her encouragement. I also feel that I could do a better job in an area such a Public Relations counter work or computer work. I appreciate the opportunity to answer these reports(,) and I wish to state that I want to do a fair day's work in a job suitable to my abilities(,) which apparently do not include the criteria of the current position.
<> This whole section starting with( I feel as thought I am) down to G. MOORE JP" has BAD spacing issues that need attention.
<> No hyphen: no-one / no one
I feel as though I am being put upon, trodden down, being treated very unreasonably because I am slow in my work. It seems that when I am off sick either no[-]one does any of my work and it piles up(,) or if
<> Commas needed.
<> No hyphen: out-going / outgoing
Therefore(,) the system of measuring the incoming and out-going work was not realistic.
So now apparently(,) (I haven't gotten to see any myself)(,) the work flow is being adjusted to the required
5 a/c to Voucher etc.(,) and my helper is whizzing through like a 'Bondi'* on new claims.
I heard someone in our area say a while ago that you can't keep up with the work by following the procedure(,) you have to take short cuts.
<> You have TOO MANY =and= usage, so I made a suggestion below.
<> Typo: enquiries / inquiries
=YOURS=
Why should I be penalized for being slow when I am following procedure(,) checking eligibility(,) and P/A etc. on computer(,) writing letters to physio's(,) and telling them what we will be paying etc.(,) and handling JP(,) and phone [e}(I)nquiries[.](?)
=SUGGEST=
Why should I be penalized for being slow when I am following procedure, checking eligibility, P/A etc. on computer, writing letters to physio's, telling them what we will be paying etc., handling JP, and phone enquiries.
<> Incorrect punctuation.
=YOURS=
I am accused of spending too much time on the phone and day dreaming too much however I don't spend any more time on the phone than other people do talking to other staff members -- the argument is "but they get their work done" -- I wonder!!
=SUGGEST=
I am accused of spending too much time on the phone and day dreaming. However, I don't spend any more time on the phone than other people do while talking to other staff members -- the argument is, "But they get their work done" -- I wonder!!
<> Incorrect punctuation.
<> Delete unneeded = and =
<> Add hyphen: all time / all-time AND break-down / breakdown
I know I can't work and talk(,) too(.) [and] I'm sure many others are like me. Many years ago(,) we were told that we should be able to enjoy our work -- I would enjoy my work if I could be allowed to get at it, and on with it without feeling pressurized(,) either real or imaginary -- I'm at a stage now where myself esteem is at an all(-) time low(,) and if it wasn't for the fact that I have a lovely wife who I know loves me, I would have had a nervous break[-]down by now. It's [not](isn't) just a matter of not enjoying my work at present(,) but actually feeling threatened by my work(,) and all (or most) of those associated with it.
I hope that this little note gets to the right place at the right time -- I am not a nut(,) or mental case(.) I am (still) a same human being who is trying to survive in an increasingly hostile environment. Please help me before I go completely down in a heap. Yours sincerely,
G. MOORE JP"
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As you will see in my song below(,) I talk about the afters of the operations too.
I wrote a poem/song about my time in the Department Of Veteran's Affairs. I will give you the detail of it, later on. The Midi File for the tune to(,) "It's Not What You Know, But Who You Know" is at the head of the Chapter.
=::= A Smile Is A Frown Turned Upside Down! =::=
Jacqueline M Franklin (*_*)
=::= Feel free to visit my profile on Amazon.com =::=
amazon.com/author/jacquelinefranklin
reply by the author on 14-May-2016
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Hi (*<*)
= Wow! Your job sounds like working for the state, here in the USA. Nightmare.
=LOTS of SPAG for you. (*_*)
[ ] delete ( ) add
<> FYI: You have A LOT of REDUNDANT verbiage AND comma issues.
<> Lower case: air conditioning
= There was no Air Conditioning,
<> Comma errors.
<> Incorrect end of sentence ellipses (space before ellipses--only three periods).
<> Add = which = after darn windows for smoother flow.
<> Typo: encently / recently
=YOURS=
An entirely different scenario, where we all froze to death, with the cold winds blowing freely through those darn windows, we could not close, to bless ourselves. I (r)ecently recovered some notes I had written in my frustration about my new position. Here they are, kindly re-typed for me by my dear wife......
=SUGGEST=
An entirely different scenario where we all froze to death, with the cold winds blowing freely through those darn windows, WHICH we could not close to bless ourselves. I recently recovered some notes I had written in my frustration about my new position. Here they are, kindly re-typed for me by my dear wife ...
<> Incorrect commas.
Also, Mr Chapman could have gone to the clerk covering that particular breakup[,] and spoken privately[,] with them[,] to avoid total embarrassment.
<> Incorrect commas.
<> Typo: exempted / exempt
I have tried to organize my work more and get the easier claims done to build up my output(,) but the slow work has to be done[,] and cannot continually be put aside. I was exempt[ed] from answering phones but
<> Comma need.
At one stage(,) Mr Chapman made what I consider to be a threat(,) if not personally(,) then generally to the Travel Expenses area that Donald Norfolk had said that a clerk's position had to be abolished
<> Commas needed.
<> Typo: day-dream / daydream
I was told that I should do at least 20 claims per day(,) and I attempted to do this. As has been alluded to in the reports, I do have difficulty with noise being distracting and in the 'open space' nature of our floor, every noise from one end of the building to the other can be heard(,) plus[,] of course(,) the deafening truck and traffic noises from one of the busiest intersections in the city(,) compounded by the lack of sealed windows. Working conditions in this area are quite difficult(,) and the lack of oxygen can tend to make one day[-]dream and slow down work.
<> Need space between above this section.
Some supervisors seem to have a better understanding of problems of hearing impaired than others. I think all supervisors of hearing impaired should be compelled to take some sort of course of familiarization with the problems involved.
<> Commas needed.
I agree with Ms Saltine's comment(,) and I appreciate her encouragement. I also feel that I could do a better job in an area such a Public Relations counter work or computer work. I appreciate the opportunity to answer these reports(,) and I wish to state that I want to do a fair day's work in a job suitable to my abilities(,) which apparently do not include the criteria of the current position.
<> This whole section starting with( I feel as thought I am) down to G. MOORE JP" has BAD spacing issues that need attention.
<> No hyphen: no-one / no one
I feel as though I am being put upon, trodden down, being treated very unreasonably because I am slow in my work. It seems that when I am off sick either no[-]one does any of my work and it piles up(,) or if
<> Commas needed.
<> No hyphen: out-going / outgoing
Therefore(,) the system of measuring the incoming and out-going work was not realistic.
So now apparently(,) (I haven't gotten to see any myself)(,) the work flow is being adjusted to the required
5 a/c to Voucher etc.(,) and my helper is whizzing through like a 'Bondi'* on new claims.
I heard someone in our area say a while ago that you can't keep up with the work by following the procedure(,) you have to take short cuts.
<> You have TOO MANY =and= usage, so I made a suggestion below.
<> Typo: enquiries / inquiries
=YOURS=
Why should I be penalized for being slow when I am following procedure(,) checking eligibility(,) and P/A etc. on computer(,) writing letters to physio's(,) and telling them what we will be paying etc.(,) and handling JP(,) and phone [e}(I)nquiries[.](?)
=SUGGEST=
Why should I be penalized for being slow when I am following procedure, checking eligibility, P/A etc. on computer, writing letters to physio's, telling them what we will be paying etc., handling JP, and phone enquiries.
<> Incorrect punctuation.
=YOURS=
I am accused of spending too much time on the phone and day dreaming too much however I don't spend any more time on the phone than other people do talking to other staff members -- the argument is "but they get their work done" -- I wonder!!
=SUGGEST=
I am accused of spending too much time on the phone and day dreaming. However, I don't spend any more time on the phone than other people do while talking to other staff members -- the argument is, "But they get their work done" -- I wonder!!
<> Incorrect punctuation.
<> Delete unneeded = and =
<> Add hyphen: all time / all-time AND break-down / breakdown
I know I can't work and talk(,) too(.) [and] I'm sure many others are like me. Many years ago(,) we were told that we should be able to enjoy our work -- I would enjoy my work if I could be allowed to get at it, and on with it without feeling pressurized(,) either real or imaginary -- I'm at a stage now where myself esteem is at an all(-) time low(,) and if it wasn't for the fact that I have a lovely wife who I know loves me, I would have had a nervous break[-]down by now. It's [not](isn't) just a matter of not enjoying my work at present(,) but actually feeling threatened by my work(,) and all (or most) of those associated with it.
I hope that this little note gets to the right place at the right time -- I am not a nut(,) or mental case(.) I am (still) a same human being who is trying to survive in an increasingly hostile environment. Please help me before I go completely down in a heap. Yours sincerely,
G. MOORE JP"
<> Add comma.
As you will see in my song below(,) I talk about the afters of the operations too.
I wrote a poem/song about my time in the Department Of Veteran's Affairs. I will give you the detail of it, later on. The Midi File for the tune to(,) "It's Not What You Know, But Who You Know" is at the head of the Chapter.
=::= A Smile Is A Frown Turned Upside Down! =::=
Jacqueline M Franklin (*_*)
=::= Feel free to visit my profile on Amazon.com =::=
amazon.com/author/jacquelinefranklin
Comment Written 14-May-2016
reply by the author on 14-May-2016
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Thanks mate, knew I should have looked at this more carefully. Most of it was only added to day as I said from some notes I wrote and Louise typed for me. Appreciate you coming through. Maybe you never saw this before? promise I will work on it.
Comment from drivenbackward
I liked your other chapter better, but this was still a good read. It's obvious you put a lot of work into it. Since you're in Australia, not sure how much of the notes below should be considered, but here you go:
The next part of my story covers a period of 5 years, -- 'five years'. Always spell out numbers below 10, whether using Chicago or AP.
reality for me, began to unfold -- Check spacing after comma.
(which was now back in the Ryde area since the problems I had out West.) -- Period outside parenthesis in this case. It's not a standalone sentence.
'*higher duties' -- A little heavy on the punctuation. Not sure if this is intended.
as much as two grades above their gazetted positions.. -- Extra period.
.(Chapter 4.) -- Check spacing after period.
6.I'm sick of being treated -- Missing space after period.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2014
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I liked your other chapter better, but this was still a good read. It's obvious you put a lot of work into it. Since you're in Australia, not sure how much of the notes below should be considered, but here you go:
The next part of my story covers a period of 5 years, -- 'five years'. Always spell out numbers below 10, whether using Chicago or AP.
reality for me, began to unfold -- Check spacing after comma.
(which was now back in the Ryde area since the problems I had out West.) -- Period outside parenthesis in this case. It's not a standalone sentence.
'*higher duties' -- A little heavy on the punctuation. Not sure if this is intended.
as much as two grades above their gazetted positions.. -- Extra period.
.(Chapter 4.) -- Check spacing after period.
6.I'm sick of being treated -- Missing space after period.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2014
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I appreciate the consideration of our differences hehe I will work on the suggestions though probably mostly relevant ha! thanks very much.
Comment from Selina Stambi
Hitler/littler ... clever!
What an eventful life you have led, brother Geoff!
Life took you on a meandering path to the girl of your dreams - how wonderful!
Have a lovely week.
Sonali :)
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2014
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Hitler/littler ... clever!
What an eventful life you have led, brother Geoff!
Life took you on a meandering path to the girl of your dreams - how wonderful!
Have a lovely week.
Sonali :)
Comment Written 28-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2014
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Thanks Sis I know as I said earlier from the time I followed the Lord in Believer's baptism He had His hand on me and guided me. He probably was a guide in the absence of my earthly father growing up too but I sensed it from the tome of that exhilarating lift I had as I came up out of the waters of baptism in 1974. Thanks Sis and good friend fopr the encouragement. Need to get back to writing!!! Soon!
Comment from seaglass
Your letter was well written and described and explained your dissatisfaction. In the few times I've attempted this, it hasn't turned out well. That is a really big building. I think I would have stuffed the window cracks with paper, rags, or something. lol
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2014
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Your letter was well written and described and explained your dissatisfaction. In the few times I've attempted this, it hasn't turned out well. That is a really big building. I think I would have stuffed the window cracks with paper, rags, or something. lol
Comment Written 18-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2014
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Thanks friend as usual I appreciate so very much your interest in my book. A real encourager and so glad Mikey introduced us...kind of indirectly anyway.
Comment from michaelcahill
You've been busy!!! Lots of new stuff here too. A lot more smooth in flow. Love the note. Lewis Carroll maybe? Great song, on the money too. Getting late 4:30am here. Hahaha. More delving tomorrow. mikey
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2014
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You've been busy!!! Lots of new stuff here too. A lot more smooth in flow. Love the note. Lewis Carroll maybe? Great song, on the money too. Getting late 4:30am here. Hahaha. More delving tomorrow. mikey
Comment Written 14-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2014
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Thanks mate glad you are back on board. Still more coming we are not done yet...even though we thought we were hehe. Wish I could add more photos!
Comment from GWinterwin
Well a good story my friend, and a good picture of you and Louise. Sounds like you were treated pretty badly for a long time but things finally did get better.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2014
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Well a good story my friend, and a good picture of you and Louise. Sounds like you were treated pretty badly for a long time but things finally did get better.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2014
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Well Bro there is more to come for the final chapter on our work in the Public Service. So stay tuned. Thanks for the lovely review.
Comment from Petriesan
Pretty cool old chap... I never worked in the pybluc secor myself. I had a few issue with aussie vs american English the piece but otherwise, greatvtelling of you life
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2014
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Pretty cool old chap... I never worked in the pybluc secor myself. I had a few issue with aussie vs american English the piece but otherwise, greatvtelling of you life
Comment Written 12-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2014
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Thanks mate glad you admit that no matter how much our English is similar there are differences. Appreciate the review.
Comment from Eigle Rull
This account is a well written, nicely detailed account of the good, the bad and the ugly during a specific time in your life. Your words are easy to understand and this piece held my attention. Nice job, my friend.
Always with respect,
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2014
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This account is a well written, nicely detailed account of the good, the bad and the ugly during a specific time in your life. Your words are easy to understand and this piece held my attention. Nice job, my friend.
Always with respect,
Comment Written 12-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2014
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Thanks very much friend. Good to have you along again. Appreciate your fine words.
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
Indeed you have had an interesting yet sometimes uneasy
experience of employment.
It seems that these experiences brought out the songwriter in you and along the way you met and married your wife so some positive
Outcomes were achieved.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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Indeed you have had an interesting yet sometimes uneasy
experience of employment.
It seems that these experiences brought out the songwriter in you and along the way you met and married your wife so some positive
Outcomes were achieved.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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Thanks friend hope you have seen my Carols and stuff. I appreciate your review on this brand new chapter. I have re-sorted the chapters of the book now to reflect more closely the actual sequence of events. Up till yesterday I thought I was nearly finished then as my wife and I were talking I realised I had leftr this bit out.
Comment from Tomes Johnston
This is yet another interesting addition to the story of your life. This makes for an interesting read. It is true that everybody has a story to tell and this is a compelling one. Well done.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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This is yet another interesting addition to the story of your life. This makes for an interesting read. It is true that everybody has a story to tell and this is a compelling one. Well done.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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Thanks dear bro appreciate your review again. Got hit on the knuckles yesterday with a bunch of errors no one else had seen in the new Chapter 18 they are now fixed. I was glad after I fixed it that the new reviewer found what she did. God Bless.