Writing Prompt Entries 2014
Viewing comments for Chapter 15 "Lost and Found"The clue is in the title!
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Comment from gazzagodbod
Omg this is disturbing in so many ways a woman with the remote (shudder) a lost remote (screaming ) in sweaty belly bits (voming) lol great poem big six from the godbodxx
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2014
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Omg this is disturbing in so many ways a woman with the remote (shudder) a lost remote (screaming ) in sweaty belly bits (voming) lol great poem big six from the godbodxx
Comment Written 04-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2014
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Hi gazza :) Thank you so much for your fantastic and funny feedback and the magnificent 6 stars. I really appreciate it:) Hugs, Debs x
Comment from adewpearl
strong rhymes in good limerick format
twas tucked - I would eliminate "up" for better cadence/limerick inflection
good alliteration in large, lovely lady
strong visual creating laugh out loud humor :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2014
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strong rhymes in good limerick format
twas tucked - I would eliminate "up" for better cadence/limerick inflection
good alliteration in large, lovely lady
strong visual creating laugh out loud humor :-) Brooke
Comment Written 04-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2014
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Hi Brooke, thank you for your great feedback and suggestion re the last line - I had been fighting with it (without winning!) to get it to 9 syllable count and the solution was right in front of me - thank you for opening my eyes! Kindest regards as always, Debra :)
Comment from daeneam
A large, lovely lady named Nellie
once lost the remote for her telly.
She was rather impressed
when that night she undressed;
'twas tucked up in the folds of her belly.
Ahahaha it is indeed a good laugh for the morning!
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2014
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A large, lovely lady named Nellie
once lost the remote for her telly.
She was rather impressed
when that night she undressed;
'twas tucked up in the folds of her belly.
Ahahaha it is indeed a good laugh for the morning!
Comment Written 04-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2014
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Hi bulletski :) Good to share a laugh with you! Thank you for the stars. Kindest regards, Debra :)
Comment from krys123
Or this one made me laugh a lot and I enjoyed this very much.
An excellent composition and Limerick which was sustained and written very well and very much easier to read. Thank you so much for sharing and posting your work for everyone. May you have and/or fine peace always.
Alex
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2014
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Or this one made me laugh a lot and I enjoyed this very much.
An excellent composition and Limerick which was sustained and written very well and very much easier to read. Thank you so much for sharing and posting your work for everyone. May you have and/or fine peace always.
Alex
Comment Written 04-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2014
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Hi Alex :) Thank you so much for your wonderful feedback - so glad to share a laugh with you! Kindest regards as always, Debra :)
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You are so welcome Debra and thanks for the laugh again.
Comment from tfawcus
Well goodness me! Doesn't that just go to show that the remote is better kept in the hands of the man of the house? Or was it in his hands when he fumbled, I wonder? Delightful limerick!
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2014
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Well goodness me! Doesn't that just go to show that the remote is better kept in the hands of the man of the house? Or was it in his hands when he fumbled, I wonder? Delightful limerick!
Comment Written 04-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2014
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Hi Tony :) Thank you for your wonderful feedback - heavens know how it ended up there! Glad you enjoyed the limerick, kindest regards as always, Debra :)
Comment from ennahanid
This one places a whole lot of images in the bind. Certainly has me sitting here with a Cheshire Cat grin on my face. I wish you luck in the contest - Dinah
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2014
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This one places a whole lot of images in the bind. Certainly has me sitting here with a Cheshire Cat grin on my face. I wish you luck in the contest - Dinah
Comment Written 04-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2014
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Thank you Dinah for your wonderful feedback and good luck wishes. I appreciate both! Kindest regards, Debra :)
Comment from emrpoems
A large, lovely lady named Nellie
once lost the remote for her telly.
She was rather impressed
when that night she undressed;
'twas tucked up in the folds of her belly.
This is certainly the funniest one I have read
Good aabba rhymes
Good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2014
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A large, lovely lady named Nellie
once lost the remote for her telly.
She was rather impressed
when that night she undressed;
'twas tucked up in the folds of her belly.
This is certainly the funniest one I have read
Good aabba rhymes
Good luck in the contest
Comment Written 04-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2014
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Hi :) Thank you so much for your fabulous feedback and good luck wishes. I appreciate both! Kindest regards, Debra :)
Comment from Domino 2
Hahaha!
Top flow and rhymes, plus the LOL last line gag make this an excellent limerick that deserves to contend in the contest, Debs.
Good luck, Ted
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2014
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Hahaha!
Top flow and rhymes, plus the LOL last line gag make this an excellent limerick that deserves to contend in the contest, Debs.
Good luck, Ted
Comment Written 04-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2014
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Aw, Cheers Ted for your great feedback and good luck wishes. You know I appreciate both :) Cheers, Debs x
Comment from nannabot
Hi Debs, I had to give this a six cos it cracked me up. It's well written and flows like a limerick should. It has strong imagery and is very comical. Love it and good luck with this in the contest. Big huggies from Maggy. xxxxx
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2014
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Hi Debs, I had to give this a six cos it cracked me up. It's well written and flows like a limerick should. It has strong imagery and is very comical. Love it and good luck with this in the contest. Big huggies from Maggy. xxxxx
Comment Written 04-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2014
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Hi Maggy :) I love you I do!! Thank you so much for your cracking comments and very generous 6th star - really appreciate both, along with the good luck wishes :) Yorkshire love and hugs, Debs xx
Comment from nelliesellie
I love the picture. I love poem. I did not take offense. When looking for a lost remote you have to look in the least likely places. I have found them in the bathroom and even in the car. Great work.
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reply by the author on 04-Mar-2014
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I love the picture. I love poem. I did not take offense. When looking for a lost remote you have to look in the least likely places. I have found them in the bathroom and even in the car. Great work.
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Comment Written 04-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2014
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Hi nelliesellie :) They turn up all over don't they?! Thank you for your lovely feedback - I appreciate it! Kindest regards as always, Debra :) x
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I forgot finding one in the refrigerator,
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LOL! Really?! x