From a Distance
When the outside world intrudes30 total reviews
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
Today, I'm alone. I think of tomorrow's world -
Will it ever accept without a need to explain?
Good-bye my love....
Oh, this is so sad, Dossie - I took this to be forbidden love because of prejudice. Everyone should have the choice to love whoever they want - it really is no one's business to interfere.
Margaret
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2014
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Today, I'm alone. I think of tomorrow's world -
Will it ever accept without a need to explain?
Good-bye my love....
Oh, this is so sad, Dossie - I took this to be forbidden love because of prejudice. Everyone should have the choice to love whoever they want - it really is no one's business to interfere.
Margaret
Comment Written 27-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2014
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Thanks so much, Margaret, for your empathetic and encouraging review; I appreciate it. I'm sorry I'm just now replying, but I've been super busy. Be blessed. Dossie
Comment from jmdg1954
What a powerful poem, Dossie. This is touching in many ways and would want you as a lifelong friend if I had the opportunity, as told by this,
So, darling, from afar I continue to adore you,
I?m content to live without you all my days.
I have peace knowing our love is intense,
but too much separates us in too many ways.
Very nicely done. John
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2014
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What a powerful poem, Dossie. This is touching in many ways and would want you as a lifelong friend if I had the opportunity, as told by this,
So, darling, from afar I continue to adore you,
I?m content to live without you all my days.
I have peace knowing our love is intense,
but too much separates us in too many ways.
Very nicely done. John
Comment Written 27-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2014
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Thanks, John, for your empathetic and encouraging review; I appreciate it. I'm sorry I'm just now replying, but I've been super busy. Be blessed. Dossie
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Very well written. Bravo! Just one more way that bigotry ruins lives in ways you don't evem imagine until it happens. Sometimes even love isn't enough.
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2014
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Very well written. Bravo! Just one more way that bigotry ruins lives in ways you don't evem imagine until it happens. Sometimes even love isn't enough.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2014
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Thanks so much, Phyllis for your empathetic review; I appreciate it. You're right about love; sometimes it can actually get in the way. I'm sorry I'm just now replying, but I've been super busy. Be blessed. Dossie
Comment from Sylvia Page
Dear Dossie,
This poem speaks from the heart. Your friend must be lucky to have you by his side to deal with his pain and loss.
Very well crafted.
Cheers
Sylvia
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2014
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Dear Dossie,
This poem speaks from the heart. Your friend must be lucky to have you by his side to deal with his pain and loss.
Very well crafted.
Cheers
Sylvia
Comment Written 27-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2014
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Thanks, Sylvia, for your empathetic and encouraging review; I appreciate it. I'm sorry I'm just now replying, but I've been super busy. Be blessed. Dossie
Comment from vkmack
This is a sweet, compassionate, and heartfelt cry for a lost love, Dossie. I am touched by the pleading desire that is so evident here. And the acceptance of the inevitable--the separateness of these lives--is almost crushing to us as readers. I wanted this person to fight, but I understood why he/she would not. Thank you for the note. I'm so sorry for your friend. That's why the work is so plaintive and sad. It's a beautiful piece of poetry and a lovely way to mark the end of a relationship that should be--and a love that always will.
You third stanza is the strongest, but it's a truly well-constructed poem throughout. Best use of rhyme: immense/defense. And your concluding stanza asks such an important question. I wish we had an answer. Excellent us of meter and verse.
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2014
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This is a sweet, compassionate, and heartfelt cry for a lost love, Dossie. I am touched by the pleading desire that is so evident here. And the acceptance of the inevitable--the separateness of these lives--is almost crushing to us as readers. I wanted this person to fight, but I understood why he/she would not. Thank you for the note. I'm so sorry for your friend. That's why the work is so plaintive and sad. It's a beautiful piece of poetry and a lovely way to mark the end of a relationship that should be--and a love that always will.
You third stanza is the strongest, but it's a truly well-constructed poem throughout. Best use of rhyme: immense/defense. And your concluding stanza asks such an important question. I wish we had an answer. Excellent us of meter and verse.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2014
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Thank you so much, vkmack, for your empathetic and encouraging review; it's in-depth, and analytical and I appreciate it. I'm sorry I'm just now replying, but I've been super busy. Be blessed. Dossie
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No problem, Dossie. It was my pleasure. And I understand all about delays. Just be happy!
Vista Kay
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You are so welcome, Dossie.
Vista Kay
Comment from sunnilicious
That's a beautiful poem.
Sad, however, expressive. There is so much talk offering nothing at the same time. That is truly an art. GOod flow of rhythm and rhymes.
It is difficult to understand why we love people (man/men) who do not want to be with us. They just have issues... I suppose. Heartbreaks.
Goodnite Dossie!
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2014
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That's a beautiful poem.
Sad, however, expressive. There is so much talk offering nothing at the same time. That is truly an art. GOod flow of rhythm and rhymes.
It is difficult to understand why we love people (man/men) who do not want to be with us. They just have issues... I suppose. Heartbreaks.
Goodnite Dossie!
Comment Written 27-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2014
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Thanks so much, Alicia, for your empathetic and encouraging review; I appreciate it. I'm sorry I'm just now replying, but I've been super busy. The mayor speech and my coverage of it last night went over just peachy. I got an opportunity to sit with some real journalists in the media section. Be blessed. Dossie
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That sounds so like it was so exciting. I am glad for you. May many more good things transpire. Have a good weekend :)
Comment from royowen
A nice easy flow to this sad and whimsical poem! It moves with, what appears to be a mixture of romantic and filial love, along with a tragic pathos, an interlude and a partnership that may never happen! I hope sincerely it will change! Well written, with rhyme and proximate, rhythm consistent! Well done? Blessings, Roy.
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2014
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A nice easy flow to this sad and whimsical poem! It moves with, what appears to be a mixture of romantic and filial love, along with a tragic pathos, an interlude and a partnership that may never happen! I hope sincerely it will change! Well written, with rhyme and proximate, rhythm consistent! Well done? Blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2014
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Thanks, Roy, or your empathetic and encouraging review; it is analytical and in-depth. I appreciate it. I'm sorry I'm just now replying, but I've been super busy. Be blessed. Dossie
Comment from ProjectBluebook
Sometimes doing nothing is as good as doing something. Evolution has always found a way. The universe came from nothing. Being a friend is doing something. A shoulder to lean on and encouragement. You even donated a poem for the cause. good intentions and good luck, sincerely, wackydo
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2014
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Sometimes doing nothing is as good as doing something. Evolution has always found a way. The universe came from nothing. Being a friend is doing something. A shoulder to lean on and encouragement. You even donated a poem for the cause. good intentions and good luck, sincerely, wackydo
Comment Written 27-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2014
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Thanks so much, Wackydo, for your empathetic and cerebral review; I appreciate it. I'm sorry I'm just now replying, but I've been super busy. Be blessed. Dossie
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I know how it is!
Comment from Dean Kuch
This is beautifully penned, Titanx9, and the love, respect and admiration you have for your friend shines in each wonderfully written line.
'Tis true, the only thing one can do is be there for our family and friends when the chips are down. But being there for them, helping them through a particularly difficult circumstances is what being a caring friend is all about.
Your rhyme and flow were excellent! Very heartfelt & inspirational...
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reply by the author on 08-Mar-2014
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This is beautifully penned, Titanx9, and the love, respect and admiration you have for your friend shines in each wonderfully written line.
'Tis true, the only thing one can do is be there for our family and friends when the chips are down. But being there for them, helping them through a particularly difficult circumstances is what being a caring friend is all about.
Your rhyme and flow were excellent! Very heartfelt & inspirational...
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Comment Written 27-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2014
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Hello, Dean. Thanks for reading and rating my poem. I'm most appreciative of your in-depth and analytical review. Cheers! Dossie.
Comment from GracieAnn
Titanx, this is lovely with melancholy overtones as the love not unlike Romeo and Juliet is prevented by forces beyond their control. How very sad for this love. Nice rhyme and meter:0 GracieAnn
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reply by the author on 08-Mar-2014
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Titanx, this is lovely with melancholy overtones as the love not unlike Romeo and Juliet is prevented by forces beyond their control. How very sad for this love. Nice rhyme and meter:0 GracieAnn
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Comment Written 27-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2014
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Thanks, GracieAnn, for reading and rating my poem. I'm most appreciative of your in-depth and analytical review. Cheers! Dossie.