Paper Dolls and Toy Soldiers
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Comment from Darkhorse555
excellent picture drawn in these words mikey a lingering doubt dripping slowly and congealing in a pool where loneliness swims, waiting for irony extremely beautifully penned piece dear friend
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2014
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excellent picture drawn in these words mikey a lingering doubt dripping slowly and congealing in a pool where loneliness swims, waiting for irony extremely beautifully penned piece dear friend
Comment Written 01-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2014
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Glad you choose that line. I liked that myself. Thank you very much, mikey
Comment from Mastery
Very, very good, Mike. You have a strong message here because of your use of strong verbs and clever ironic twists like here:
" a lingering doubt dripping slowly and congealing
in a pool where loneliness swims, waiting for irony"
Excellent job! Bob (Mastery)
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2014
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Very, very good, Mike. You have a strong message here because of your use of strong verbs and clever ironic twists like here:
" a lingering doubt dripping slowly and congealing
in a pool where loneliness swims, waiting for irony"
Excellent job! Bob (Mastery)
Comment Written 01-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2014
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So pleased to hear these words of praise from you. Very encouraging indeed. Thank you kindly. Hope you have a great 2014!! mikey
Comment from A TARNISHED KNIGHT
You do expand the images of loss my friend. This was quite the train ride of words and meanings.. Was a bit to over the top for me as I had to linger on many of the lines to try and figure just where you were at or coming from..Please do not take that as knocking your work just my own personal like and dislikes. I have not read any of your other works so my opinion being based on just this one is not a fair judgement of what you have written..
tk
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2014
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You do expand the images of loss my friend. This was quite the train ride of words and meanings.. Was a bit to over the top for me as I had to linger on many of the lines to try and figure just where you were at or coming from..Please do not take that as knocking your work just my own personal like and dislikes. I have not read any of your other works so my opinion being based on just this one is not a fair judgement of what you have written..
tk
Comment Written 01-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2014
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I very much appreciate the honest review. That is the one thing that I do get from time to time. I do tend to get on the rambling train a bit! Not always though. Thank you for reading. I hope this is a great year for you. Looking forward to reading your work and hearing from you in the year ahead. mikey
Comment from Tatarka2
I loved it from "I really do love" - - especially the parts about "it is real when" - -. I have to tell you that this is not one of m y favorites of yours (which I usually give too many 6's to). I'm afraid I found the first part a bit too wordy for my taste. Loved the ending and the author's notes, though.
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I loved it from "I really do love" - - especially the parts about "it is real when" - -. I have to tell you that this is not one of m y favorites of yours (which I usually give too many 6's to). I'm afraid I found the first part a bit too wordy for my taste. Loved the ending and the author's notes, though.
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Comment Written 01-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2014
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I am a wordy little guy from time to time. hahaha. I am pleased that you enjoyed parts of this and I appreciate your honest review. Different tastes I suppose. This is actually my favorite! This should be a great year coming up. We are both in first place!! mikey
Comment from rouskin
This is brilliant writing, but I would expect no less from your pen. I Love it all but especially your powerful ending
And finally our grief
becomes the only love
that receives no response
and needs none
Wishing you all a very happy and prosperous new year 2014. May this year be the luckiest year for you that brings success and helps you in reaching the zenith of your true potential
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2014
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This is brilliant writing, but I would expect no less from your pen. I Love it all but especially your powerful ending
And finally our grief
becomes the only love
that receives no response
and needs none
Wishing you all a very happy and prosperous new year 2014. May this year be the luckiest year for you that brings success and helps you in reaching the zenith of your true potential
Comment Written 01-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2014
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What wonderful encouraging words. Your encouragement and support is most appreciated. Glad you enjoyed this. Thank you for all the stars. I hope this is a great year for you as well. We are already tied for first!!!! mikey
Comment from w.j.debi
Words of wisdom so eloquently expressed. Excellent opening line to set the tone and draw in the reader.
Several stanzas stand out just on their own.
Excellent imagery in
But scales are rusty and bolts are hard to come by
nothing weighs the same when gravity is a trick
a lingering doubt dripping slowly and congealing
in a pool where loneliness swims, waiting for irony
Truth in life is a cone with ice cream on the ground
The righteous condemn the germs and common pathways
The liar scoops it up like lightening without remark
and takes a chance that sugar is worth damnation
Thanks for sharing and Happy New Year.
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2014
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Words of wisdom so eloquently expressed. Excellent opening line to set the tone and draw in the reader.
Several stanzas stand out just on their own.
Excellent imagery in
But scales are rusty and bolts are hard to come by
nothing weighs the same when gravity is a trick
a lingering doubt dripping slowly and congealing
in a pool where loneliness swims, waiting for irony
Truth in life is a cone with ice cream on the ground
The righteous condemn the germs and common pathways
The liar scoops it up like lightening without remark
and takes a chance that sugar is worth damnation
Thanks for sharing and Happy New Year.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2014
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Hello! I am so behind.... I am just thrilled with your wonderful review and compliments. This may keep a smile on my face all year. I am so pleased that you enjoyed this and delighted with all of the stars. Hope this is a great year for you. Look, we are tied for first already!!! mikey
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LOL. We are tied for first. Wow, I am in good company! I hope 2014 brings your lots of good things.
Comment from Sankey
Well done mate. Interesting thoughts throughout. No Spags shock horror again hehe. Had a bad night serious Vertigo vomiting sessions for several hours then could not get my CPA machine working so have to try and call some one (holiday period here argh! January 2nd) Happy New Year
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2014
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Well done mate. Interesting thoughts throughout. No Spags shock horror again hehe. Had a bad night serious Vertigo vomiting sessions for several hours then could not get my CPA machine working so have to try and call some one (holiday period here argh! January 2nd) Happy New Year
Comment Written 01-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2014
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I have a touch of vertigo. I had no idea it could be so severe. It sounds awful. Well, hope you are feeling better and soon. Take care my friend. I wonder which one of us gets the Pulitzer this year? We could share I suppose.....
Comment from B. Diehl
" It is real when it sings
It is real when it dances
It is real when it is foolish
It is real when a thousand words
can't quite describe it
nor can a thousand more"
^ I love that. The pain of loss in nearly indescribable...so I appreciate this very much. Excellent work.
-B<3
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2014
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" It is real when it sings
It is real when it dances
It is real when it is foolish
It is real when a thousand words
can't quite describe it
nor can a thousand more"
^ I love that. The pain of loss in nearly indescribable...so I appreciate this very much. Excellent work.
-B<3
Comment Written 01-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2014
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Thank you so much my friend. Much appreciated. Hey! Look at the standings. We are tied for first place. hahaha. mikey
Comment from emrpoems
Loss is loss. Love is love. Grief is grief. There is no way we can change that and we each deal with it in different ways. Very emotional piece and well written
Loved this very dramatic ending
"And finally our grief
becomes the only love
that receives no response
and needs none"
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2014
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Loss is loss. Love is love. Grief is grief. There is no way we can change that and we each deal with it in different ways. Very emotional piece and well written
Loved this very dramatic ending
"And finally our grief
becomes the only love
that receives no response
and needs none"
Comment Written 01-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2014
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I am so delighted with your wonderful review. I do think that this smile may last all year. Thank you so very much!! mikey
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Or, maybe you have been married for forty years and your spouse and lifemate has passed away. Or, a story that is all your own. Loss is loss. Love is love. Grief is grief.
You never get rid of the grief, I don't care what they say. I will never have closure, he is gone, I am alone and miss him. Good job Michael. Nancy
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2014
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Or, maybe you have been married for forty years and your spouse and lifemate has passed away. Or, a story that is all your own. Loss is loss. Love is love. Grief is grief.
You never get rid of the grief, I don't care what they say. I will never have closure, he is gone, I am alone and miss him. Good job Michael. Nancy
Comment Written 01-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2014
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Absolutely. I very much agree and have things in my past that are just as fresh in my mind as they were then. I thought of you as well when I was writing this and some of the wonderful touching pieces you have written. mikey