Poems of Love and Spirit
Viewing comments for Chapter 15 "Mary once was filled with light"This book is about love, God's Love most of all.
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Comment from Jackarrie
a very well written spiritual poem, about this festive season. You have made good use of rhymes and language with good word choices. and it flows well. The image goes with it aptly.
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2013
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a very well written spiritual poem, about this festive season. You have made good use of rhymes and language with good word choices. and it flows well. The image goes with it aptly.
Comment Written 24-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2013
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A marvellous reaction by you, and I love to read what you say about my use of language and rhymes. Must be heaven sent as this has little to do with me. Have a wonderful Christmas Jackarrie
Comment from Lynette Marie
This image filled poem creates such a sense of peace, especially within the first two stanzas. Very good rhyming scheme (except for "blast", I was a bit confused by that one). All in all a lovely piece!
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2013
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This image filled poem creates such a sense of peace, especially within the first two stanzas. Very good rhyming scheme (except for "blast", I was a bit confused by that one). All in all a lovely piece!
Comment Written 23-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2013
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Thank you for your exellent review, it fits so well into the poem. Could'n be better. Merry Christmas
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This is a lovely poem and beautifully written with the exception of one verse in which you stray from a rhyme scheme that is consistent everywhere else. "the driving force that sins out blast." - might I suggest changing this to 'the force by which all sin departs"? It holds you rhyme scheme together and does not alter your meter. Thank you so much for sharing this with me.
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2013
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This is a lovely poem and beautifully written with the exception of one verse in which you stray from a rhyme scheme that is consistent everywhere else. "the driving force that sins out blast." - might I suggest changing this to 'the force by which all sin departs"? It holds you rhyme scheme together and does not alter your meter. Thank you so much for sharing this with me.
Comment Written 23-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2013
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Thank you for your exellent suggestion regarding this change which I already put in the poem. Much better chose, thank you! Merry Christmas
Comment from rouskin
Very enjoyable read
My favorite lines:
The gift of love so simple and true,
He's always in love with you.
Excellent artwork to complement this poem
Thank you for sharing
Merry Christmas and Happy Holidays
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2013
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Very enjoyable read
My favorite lines:
The gift of love so simple and true,
He's always in love with you.
Excellent artwork to complement this poem
Thank you for sharing
Merry Christmas and Happy Holidays
Comment Written 23-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2013
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Thank you so mush for your exellent review, I really appreciate such a helpful view on it. Merry Christmas to you, Rouskin
Comment from bkbehera
It is a lovely piece of work dedicated to you sweetheart.I feel- "Strategy for love
cannot be planned at any cost
but when it happens
in the true sense, in one's life
than 'home sweet home' can be planned"
Let the God bless you with joyful life.
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2013
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It is a lovely piece of work dedicated to you sweetheart.I feel- "Strategy for love
cannot be planned at any cost
but when it happens
in the true sense, in one's life
than 'home sweet home' can be planned"
Let the God bless you with joyful life.
Comment Written 23-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2013
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Thank you so much for this beautiful reaction you sent me, and this could be true indeed, but wherever the Holy Spirit flows there's great love, the Love of our Creator, out Father in Heaven. Have a wonderful Christmas Bkbehera
Comment from Nosha17
Nice spiritual poem, befitting the festive season. You have made good use of rhymes and language and it read well. You have chosen an apt illustration. Faye
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2013
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Nice spiritual poem, befitting the festive season. You have made good use of rhymes and language and it read well. You have chosen an apt illustration. Faye
Comment Written 23-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2013
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Thank you for your heartfelt review, I especially like your comments on the rhymes and ally your positiveness. Thank you so much for your help.
With my best regards, Guðbjörg
Comment from kiwisteveh
Strong message of peace and love to suit the season - I like that your poem focuses on Mary's perspective.
I would suggest just a couple of tiny changes:
overshadows seems wrong when you are describing how she is filled with light - perhaps you could tinker with this line e.g. with heavenly love shining bright
I think you need to hyphenate out-blast to make the meaning of this line clear.
Merry Christmas.
Steve
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reply by the author on 23-Dec-2013
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Strong message of peace and love to suit the season - I like that your poem focuses on Mary's perspective.
I would suggest just a couple of tiny changes:
overshadows seems wrong when you are describing how she is filled with light - perhaps you could tinker with this line e.g. with heavenly love shining bright
I think you need to hyphenate out-blast to make the meaning of this line clear.
Merry Christmas.
Steve
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Comment Written 23-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2013
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I think your review was absolutely marvellous and very well articulated. I checked the scriptures in the Bible about over shadowing with light and found in Luke 1:35. Still your suggestion is very good and I'll check into it as times goes on. With appreciation, Gudbjorg
New King James Version (NKJV)
35 And the angel answered and said to her, â??The Holy Spirit will come upon you, and the power of the Highest will overshadow you; therefore, also, that Holy One who is to be born will be called the Son of God.
Comment from dragonpoet
Nicely written poem about Mary's moment of truth. We wonder what would of happened if she said 'No'. Loving and praying help one make the right decision in their moments of truth.
In the last line of the poem-thing should be think. Though Jesus doesn't have to fall in love for He has always and will always love everyone.
Keep writing
Happy Holidays.
dragonpoet
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Nicely written poem about Mary's moment of truth. We wonder what would of happened if she said 'No'. Loving and praying help one make the right decision in their moments of truth.
In the last line of the poem-thing should be think. Though Jesus doesn't have to fall in love for He has always and will always love everyone.
Keep writing
Happy Holidays.
dragonpoet
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Comment Written 23-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2013
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Thank you so much for pointing this out to me. Shows we need each others help and encouragement and have already changed it.
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You're welcome. Ain't that the truth.
dragonpoet