The Little Dog That Wouldn't Let Go
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "Primary/ Middle School Days. "Subtitle: God Never Lets Go!
34 total reviews
Comment from Eigle Rull
My friend, this piece was very well written and very much enjoyed. I've always liked the Australian accent, and yours comes through very well in your writing. Your school days sound a bit trying at times. This piece was very interesting and it held my attention like quicksand. My friend, if I had a six star remaining, I'd be giving it to you. This piece was so enjoyable.
Of all the places in this world that I'd like to live, other than here in the USA's Pacific Northwest, I think Australia would be my choice. I have another writer from there who is a joy to read and converse with. I enjoy the people. All of you seem so friendly and joyful. I admire you.
Always with respect,
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2014
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My friend, this piece was very well written and very much enjoyed. I've always liked the Australian accent, and yours comes through very well in your writing. Your school days sound a bit trying at times. This piece was very interesting and it held my attention like quicksand. My friend, if I had a six star remaining, I'd be giving it to you. This piece was so enjoyable.
Of all the places in this world that I'd like to live, other than here in the USA's Pacific Northwest, I think Australia would be my choice. I have another writer from there who is a joy to read and converse with. I enjoy the people. All of you seem so friendly and joyful. I admire you.
Always with respect,
Comment Written 17-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2014
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Thanks very much friend. We are coming through again with a major reorganize and edit approaching finalisation for publishing. The way the book is no9w is totally different to where I started almost a year ago. We are more in sequence now as to events happening. I have changed from splitting up school, Music, work and so on to mix it all throughout as a life story should be. One question and I want you to be honest what do you think of the Sub Headings? This was only a recent idea, but some are saying not necessary? Thanks again for coming by. Geoff is my name by the way.
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I agree, from an U.S. observation that it isn't necessary. However, it does not degrade either.
My name is Elgie (pronounced L.G.) and it's a pleasure to meet you, my friend.
Always with respect,
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Tell you a joke. Ae you familiar with "LG" TV's or Videos or Fridges etc? I call em "Lousy Goods" I know LG is a replacement for the old Goldstar name. Just something on the side thanks.
Comment from seaglass
Second review: Looks well organized to me and I see no errors.
School was a lot the same except we were not supplied milk. Our parents could pay for some at lunch time. Middle school here is 6th-9th grade and what you refer to as Primary is Elementary.
Derringer was an example of what a teacher shouldn't be. I had several of them too. In America children were beaten with a paddle rather than a cane. It wasn't outlawed unti1 1980 or a little later.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2014
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Second review: Looks well organized to me and I see no errors.
School was a lot the same except we were not supplied milk. Our parents could pay for some at lunch time. Middle school here is 6th-9th grade and what you refer to as Primary is Elementary.
Derringer was an example of what a teacher shouldn't be. I had several of them too. In America children were beaten with a paddle rather than a cane. It wasn't outlawed unti1 1980 or a little later.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2014
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Hey you are sweeping through the chapters only about 24 or 25 to go hehe. Thanks again. There might be one more added by the time you get nearer the end.
Comment from Gladness
A desolvinator, That sounds interesting. Was it different from a pit toilet? We are looking into alternatives for some land we are planning to build on.
That song about the redback was fun to include, especially the ending "Back to the Assylum". hehe.
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2013
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A desolvinator, That sounds interesting. Was it different from a pit toilet? We are looking into alternatives for some land we are planning to build on.
That song about the redback was fun to include, especially the ending "Back to the Assylum". hehe.
Comment Written 21-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2013
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Glad you liked it I ordered the book of the words. See if I can do the tune for ya later. Could get the track of the trains record for yas too if ya like. Long story about that one
Thanks for the lovely review.
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Hi I found an explanation and a picture of an old dissolvenator send me an e-mail will share it with ya or in on Face Book let me know looik for Geoffrey Moore who attended Ryde High School in Australia
Comment from barbara.wilkey
My grandparents still used an outhouse until I was in HS. Only because they chose too. I was shocked but grateful when they got indoor plumbing. There were a lot of spiders in the outhouse and I am deathly afraid of spiders. I read somewhere where most of the worlds most poisonous creatures live in Australia.
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2013
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My grandparents still used an outhouse until I was in HS. Only because they chose too. I was shocked but grateful when they got indoor plumbing. There were a lot of spiders in the outhouse and I am deathly afraid of spiders. I read somewhere where most of the worlds most poisonous creatures live in Australia.
Comment Written 21-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2013
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Could be right about the poisonous creatures hehe thanks for dropping in. Loved your review.
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
An interesting tale of your early life and the things that kept your life busy.
Many of the things you took for granted or that seemed commonplace would be considered antique by the young of today as technology rules...everything.Lol.
I still shudder to think of the old outhouse and the many spiders I did see there.
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2013
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An interesting tale of your early life and the things that kept your life busy.
Many of the things you took for granted or that seemed commonplace would be considered antique by the young of today as technology rules...everything.Lol.
I still shudder to think of the old outhouse and the many spiders I did see there.
Comment Written 20-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2013
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Right! Thanks for the great review. I have a picture I would have loved to use on my story but silly old FS only allows 1 per chapter. I have seen at least one member some how whangling several pictures in their story but they won't "fess up." on how they got to do it. Anyway tangent again the pic nis of one of those outside loos hehe and the outhouse on painted House movie reminded me of it. I said people will have to biy my book to see more pictures if it ever gets released hehe.
Comment from barkingdog
That's a mighty cute little boy. What happened? LOL
Aside from joking around with you, your post reads quite well. I wouldn't keep reminding the reader about other sections to read, but would rather you stay on the subject at hand in this post--the Hills trip. The info in the notes about the Hill family... well all of the notes should be in your post since they clarify so much and won't be part of the novel.
Merry Christmas to you and your lovely wife.
:) ellen xxx
Second comment:
I like the changes you've made!
And I love the addition of the song. I didn't know what a Redback was either. It's always good to assume your reader doesn't know. If they do, it doesn't hurt to tell them again. If they don't, you've just scored another point with the reader.
Good job.
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2013
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That's a mighty cute little boy. What happened? LOL
Aside from joking around with you, your post reads quite well. I wouldn't keep reminding the reader about other sections to read, but would rather you stay on the subject at hand in this post--the Hills trip. The info in the notes about the Hill family... well all of the notes should be in your post since they clarify so much and won't be part of the novel.
Merry Christmas to you and your lovely wife.
:) ellen xxx
Second comment:
I like the changes you've made!
And I love the addition of the song. I didn't know what a Redback was either. It's always good to assume your reader doesn't know. If they do, it doesn't hurt to tell them again. If they don't, you've just scored another point with the reader.
Good job.
Comment Written 20-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2013
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Hi Ellen thanks for that. Have taken some of the advice on board and I will also work on what you have said as well. Watch for the Geoffossary later on.
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Just been through fvor Edit number 3 I think if you wanna look
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Just been through fvor Edit number 3 I think if you wanna look.
Comment from mfowler
Well Sankey, I might have written this. I am 63. I grew up in QLD precisely at the same time as you. Pit toilets, yeah! And you are so right, no one talked about women's sicknesses. My mother would send me to the shop and ask for her usual. The lady shopkeeper would slip me a brown paper package. Happened monthly, if you get my drift. And didn't DJs do great milk shakes, a delicacy to a lad back then.
Obviously I enjoyed this.
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2013
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Well Sankey, I might have written this. I am 63. I grew up in QLD precisely at the same time as you. Pit toilets, yeah! And you are so right, no one talked about women's sicknesses. My mother would send me to the shop and ask for her usual. The lady shopkeeper would slip me a brown paper package. Happened monthly, if you get my drift. And didn't DJs do great milk shakes, a delicacy to a lad back then.
Obviously I enjoyed this.
Comment Written 20-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2013
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Thanks friend, glad I got on the same wavelength with ya.
Appreciate all the fine reviews. Merry Christmas
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Just been through fvor Edit number 3 I think if you wanna look
Comment from Tomes Johnston
This is an interesting chapter from your youth. I love the picture. You look very happy there beside that stream. I have similar memories from my childhood.
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2013
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This is an interesting chapter from your youth. I love the picture. You look very happy there beside that stream. I have similar memories from my childhood.
Comment Written 20-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2013
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Thanks mate appreciate your review.
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My pleasure.
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Just been through fvor Edit number 3 I think if you wanna look
Comment from MERRY1
this is an interesting chapter taking you back to childhood days in New South Wales. You do look a cheeky wee fellow in he photo I know parts of Australia as I lived in Queensland for 12 years and we traveled a lot. Well done
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2013
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this is an interesting chapter taking you back to childhood days in New South Wales. You do look a cheeky wee fellow in he photo I know parts of Australia as I lived in Queensland for 12 years and we traveled a lot. Well done
Comment Written 20-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2013
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Thanks Merry for your Merry review appreciated. I was a cite little guy hehe but I got old hehe!
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Just been through fvor Edit number 3 I think if you wanna look
Comment from michaelcahill
I'm loving the conversational tone of this chapter. It really draws the reader in and then you keep them there with interesting facts and stories and wit. All good stuff here with room for more details. Plenty of room for more. Lots of questions as I read along. A good thing there. Good notes too. Answers to some questions right there. mikey
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2013
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I'm loving the conversational tone of this chapter. It really draws the reader in and then you keep them there with interesting facts and stories and wit. All good stuff here with room for more details. Plenty of room for more. Lots of questions as I read along. A good thing there. Good notes too. Answers to some questions right there. mikey
Comment Written 19-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2013
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Good to have folks like you on board mate. Thanks for the review. I think y9ou came in after I did a further edit on the advice of some earlier reviewers.
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Just been through for Edit number 3 I think if you wanna look
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That song is a kick. hahaha. Good work.
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Ok ask questions I am like you I don't mind folks putting ideas in for consideration or asking those "gnawing?? hehe" questions.
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Let's see. Off the top of my head. Any "desolvinator" stories would be interesting! The legacy is fascinating to be sure. Any childhood memories of that or conversations with your friend for later perhaps. The old department store sounds interesting too and maybe trips to town in general, what was it like as far as how it looks and the way people got along with each other back then. what were the schools like? I know they taught things then that they don't bother with now. hahaha. you asked!!!
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Ok thanks will work po it I appreciate the hints. Still gotta send you those pics and stuff I promised. I know you ask people to comment on your stuff and I think I can see some resulting come back from things you and I have talked about. Wish you would get a secret Face Book account as I have found a way I can put my old Converted Super 8 movies on Face book. Love to share some of it with ya. Unless I figure 0out how to put them on Youtube I guess.
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http://facebook.com/madrigalisland
I think that will get you to my facebook. I am under Michael Cahill in Lancaster, California. Alhambra High School. They make it a bit difficult to find people.
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Ok I have made a folder in My Book file for Mikey's questions so have at it.
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OK will give it a go. I will have to wait till you accept me before I post anything.